Date: August 03, 2007 07:15 pm Title: Chapter 6
I really liked this story. You did a very good job of presenting Karen in a three-dimensional, sympathetic way.
Date: April 22, 2007 05:33 pm Title: Chapter 6
Excellent. Loved the Karen backstory, and how's she's not a bitch about the Jim/Pam thing- she's way too classy for that. Great job.
Date: March 08, 2007 09:59 pm Title: Chapter 6
wonderfully well written I'm smitten with your karen prov and take on her past and character. The car ride... so good.
Author's Response: Smitten is my #1 favorite word in the whole world. you rock. THANK YOU. thank you. :)
Date: March 07, 2007 09:28 pm Title: Chapter 6
I actually really like that this is about Karen, and not Jim and Pam.
It's kinda of tragic, but not kinda of like...burning down an old building in order to be able to build a new one in it's place.
Thank you.
cheers.
--Lex
Author's Response: Thanks Lex! That is the kind of tone I was going for. I just started reading your most recent story and I've been meaning to review. I really like it so far!
10 [Report This]Date: March 07, 2007 03:28 pm Title: Chapter 6
What a thoughtfully crafted ending with so many insightful lines - "So now she’s trying to figure out a way to secure her role in their story as neither the tragic supporting heroine or the ill fated mistake. Watching their faces, the radiance that comes from truth, she suspects she would feel best if she could erase herself altogether." and "Every night the sounds invade her slumber until finally the once haunting memory of footsteps on the stairs fades and footsteps blurs into her dreams as waves in the ocean." I'm glad Karen was able to move on with dignity and strength as she re-discovered herself. Really enjoyed this and although I'm sorry to see it end, I look forward to your next story!
Author's Response: Thank you for this review!! I love that you have picked out the lines that resonated with you. I always end up wondering what translated well and what didn't and it means so much to me that you spent the time to pick those things out. Thanks for reading!
Date: March 07, 2007 11:27 am Title: Chapter 6
You've written a really compelling Karen here -- neither the noble martyr nor the pitable fool. This line sums it up so well: That car ride was the most honest self she’s been in awhile and she decides she means it when she thinks she is done serving herself up as the victim.
Now to have this happen on the show. (I'm not too demanding here, am I?)
Author's Response: Thanks so much lisahoo! Definitely not too demanding. If we will it, it will happen. Right? Here's hoping..
Date: March 07, 2007 11:09 am Title: Chapter 6
I didn't really get the very last line (footsteps, footsteps, waves) or the absentmindedly lazy rubberband. I love the finally! and the suddenly! - I think you could just start that sentence with "It manages to be both..." and it would work as well, and not cause me to think "hey, what the heck IS an absentmindedly lazy rubberband, anyway?"
The 1st sentence is such a great start; I especially like the nervous glances and flushed cheeks. This sentence made me fill in the background that Pam didn't make a big confession of love to Jim, since I would think that would have led to a pretty quickly bonded couple (I'm coining the phrase "full frontal dating"), rather than tentative steps. I could definitely see either thing happening and being in character, and I really like how you described it.
I enjoyed your tale.
Feel free to write more fanfic.
I will still review.
Author's Response:
Those are great comments! I have tried to tweak both lines so it better conveys what I was trying to get across. I really appreciate your honesty!
Thanks for all your reviews. I've really appreciated them along the way. I'll watch out for you in the future. :)
8 [Report This]Date: March 07, 2007 10:30 am Title: Chapter 6
"It is during this self imposed solitude that she realizes how little she knows the rest of the office, how little she has bothered to know them before."
This is such a great observation and seems not only indicative of Karen in the office but also Karen in relation to Jim. Great job with this piece!
Author's Response: Thank you! There are so many little ways I just don't see them as truly compatible and I'm glad that line worked for you. I love how Pam and Jim are so much the heart of the office, not just in their romance but as people. Like Pam may not always like these people but you can tell she genuinely cares about them, as seen in her odd little "friendship" (if that's the right word) with Angela. Thanks for the review Sharky!!