1 [Report This]Date: February 04, 2023 07:49 am Title: Mosquitoes
Off to a great start, can't wait to read the rest!
Date: March 02, 2009 03:25 pm Title: Mosquitoes
That was amazing. I loved the Dundies/Casino Night kiss mix-up. Actually, I loved just about everything about this story. Hahah. :)
Date: February 17, 2009 08:00 pm Title: Mosquitoes
omg if roy lays a finger on jim, I will kill him lol.
10 [Report This]Date: October 20, 2007 10:00 am Title: Mosquitoes
Uhhh, I dunno if you're back from your European vacation yet, but they should hire you to write for the show. You REALLY have a handle on the characters and did a fantastic job with this story. It felt so realistic all the way through - more believable than some other fanfics I've read. You do an amazing job with the dialogue and I love how you intersperse serious conversation with JAM banter. So real.
One quick thing. In the "had" vs. "has" conversation between JAM - I think she should say that what she meant to say was "have" as in "I have feelings for Jim."
Otherwise, FANTASTIC!
Date: April 12, 2007 12:34 pm Title: Mosquitoes
I still have to read the most recent chapter, but I gotta say... I just had a mosquito buzzing around my head, and this... this was my first thought.
what ave you done to my brain?
Date: April 09, 2007 09:30 pm Title: Mosquitoes
What an awesome ending for an awesome story! First off, Dwight arriving was PERFECT. I have imagined Dwight sleeping with a HAM radio (not that I've imagined Dwight in bed - I just realized how yuck that sounded). But the dialogue here between jim and dwight and then dwight and pam was just spot on and freaking HILARIOUS. I laughed out loud several times. And then of course Jim showing up at Pam's place - just not being able to be away from her for one more minute - perfect. Oh how I enjoyed this story! Can't wait for the epilogue. You rock!
Date: April 09, 2007 04:48 pm Title: Mosquitoes
oh I loved the end, my favorite after jealous!jim is out of control Jim and you captured him perfectly. Loved it, a perfect ending. The amazing thing about this story was that throughout we were never assured of a happy ending and yet this was so perfect and sweet.
Date: April 08, 2007 06:14 pm Title: Mosquitoes
Wow, I really really love this fic, it's written wonderfully and captures the characters perfect. I think when watching the show I am looking for someone to blame for all of this, whether it be Pam, Jim, Karen, or Roy, but in this fic you've layed it all out so well it really hit me how no one is to blame for all of this, they've all made acceptable mistakes, and all of them are suffering the consequences just because no one can speak their mind and talk about it, which is so real. There is nothing worse than reading a fic that is out of character, but you have managed to nail everything, can't wait to read the last chapter. (And it so sounds like Dwight at the door =P)
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I love the way that you put it-- "all of them are suffering the consequences just because no one can speak their mind and talk about it." So true. And as for the next chapter... I'm not telling!
Date: April 07, 2007 08:46 am Title: Mosquitoes
First time I've bothered to review any story.I'm such a lurker but I really had to tell you that your fic is one of the very few on this site that manages to stay so in character. It's been Jim, Pam, Karen and Roy for 7 chapters without hesitation. And I love that it's told from numerous points of view. There really isn't a bad guy. Everyones hurting and it's so rare for that to come out in fics. I am anxious to see where this is going and all I ask is that you would wrap it up around 10 chapters please. Of course it's your story but I can't stand the waiting.
Author's Response:
Wow. To get a compliment from Gregory House. That's like unheard of! (hee!)
Thank you so much! I'm honored to be the first story you've reviewed :) And the next chapter should be the last one, although I'll probably write an epilogue too.
Date: April 02, 2007 08:35 pm Title: Mosquitoes
Loving your story.
Especially loved this bit: Maybe spin her around and hoist her onto the counter, cocoa be damned, and ravish her right there.
"cocoa be damned" lol, good stuff
Author's Response: Hehehe. I think I should try to work the phrase "cocoa be damned" into every story I write :) Thanks for the review!
Date: April 02, 2007 02:17 pm Title: Mosquitoes
OMG. I was reveling in the honest voice you've given Karen. That it was so nice to finally get a glimpse of all the things that keep her with Jim, since so much fic focuses on all the ways that she causes him to change who he really is. I love the mosquito metaphor and the barely suppressed jealousy and the neat interweaving of the actual show moments. And then you leave the chapter break with the impending Roy beat-down and I have to go home and not finish because my ride is on the way! GAH!
Author's Response:
Oh no! Your ride needs to accomodate your fic-reading! Heh.
Thank you for the review. I really do have a soft spot for Karen. I'm really flattered by your phrasing- "reveling" Hee! Thanks!
Date: April 02, 2007 12:40 pm Title: Mosquitoes
PLEASE BE DWIGHT AT THE DOOR. Thats all I have to say. Hahaha. Well that, and I love this story and cant wait to see more!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I have to plead no comment on the Dwight thing...
Date: April 02, 2007 11:10 am Title: Mosquitoes
Shan21, I'm not a regular fanfic reader, but the hiatus left me jonesing so I started getting an office fix through TWOP fan fic recs. I just wanted to say I have been really enjoying Truth & Consequence. I think the story strikes an excellent balance of angst and humor and the dialogue seems very true to the show.
Thanks for making the hiatus bearable.
Author's Response:
Wow, thank you so much! I'm glad I could help out during the hiatus. It was rough for me too and writing this gave me the chance to create my ideal solution to the Cocktails angst :)
I'm glad that you think it's not too angsty or OOC. I try hard to diffuse all of the intense scenes with humor, because that's what makes the show so great!
Date: April 01, 2007 07:45 am Title: Mosquitoes
awesome, shan21! i haven't read a lot of fanfic, but yours was my first & one of the best! can't wait to see what happens next (before thurs, please?)!
Author's Response:
I was your first? (TWSS)
I'm so happy that you liked it :) I would looooove to have the next chapter out before Thursday. Friday would be a much better bet... and the weekend would be an even better bet. But we'll see! I've just written the first page of chapter 7 and it's going well.
Date: March 23, 2007 07:29 pm Title: Mosquitoes
Shannon,
I just wanted to say that I am so proud that a fellow elf is such a kick ass Office fan fic writer. New chapter soon, I hope?? :)
Sarah / stampsgal
Author's Response: Ha! Thanks Sarah! Hopefully I'll be able to send the chapter to my betas this weekend!
Date: March 21, 2007 01:27 pm Title: Mosquitoes
Just wanted to add one more thing: that line of yours about their palms kissing reminded me of Romeo and Juliet: "palm to palm is holy palmers' kiss"
That's from their first meeting, and in a sense this is Jim and Pam's first meeting on honest ground. Such a brilliant shout-out. I congratulate you!
Author's Response: Seriously GOLD STAR! One of my betas suggested that I have them brush hands, and I immediately thought of this scene from R&J. Wow. Kudos for getting the reference. I did not think anyone would!
Date: March 21, 2007 12:33 pm Title: Mosquitoes
haha ok I messed up and thought this was only 4 chapters! So yeah I can't wait for chapter 6 because I really like chapter 5....so yeah chapter 6....
Date: March 21, 2007 12:31 pm Title: Mosquitoes
Okay this may sound weird but this is the best way to describe this fic, it's like razor blades slowly being pushed through your veins. The pain in these four chapters is phenominal I literally sit and read feeling ever single moment of awkwardness, rage, and at certain moments relief. You have managed to get me really honestly feel like I'm sitting on the front lawn and can just see every emotion. This is an amazing piece of fiction and how you write it makes me want to live in it. I can't wait for chapter 5 because I feel like thats when the tension may disolve a little bit, and I feel like this fic is in me now and every time I think about it part of me tenses up. A beautiful peice of work and I'm literally on the edge of my seat waiting for the next installment.
Author's Response: Oooh, razor blades! ouch! I mean, seriously it's an awesome compliment. Thank you very much!
10 [Report This]Date: March 21, 2007 11:01 am Title: Mosquitoes
Wow....What took me so long to check this story out ???How did I miss it ??!! I am so excited to see the outcome. Yay!! I found another story I love :) Amazing.
Author's Response: haha! Well, I'm glad you found it! I think there are going to be at least two more chapters, so you won't get the total outcome in the next chapter, but... soon :)
Date: March 20, 2007 09:48 pm Title: Mosquitoes
Oh I am so freaking hooked! I refreshed the page every two minutes waiting for your story and when it finally came, I almost fell off my bed squeeing with excitement. So so so good.
Author's Response: Oh, wow! Be careful! I don't want you to hurt yourself! And I feel sort of guilty because I took so long to get chapter five out. I'm reeeeally going to try to get the next one written faster.
10 [Report This]Date: March 20, 2007 06:28 pm Title: Mosquitoes
Michael, please tell me this doesn’t in any way involve… man parts,
Oh, dear God. I just LOST it on that line. No, whoops, lost it again:
I think she’s a necrophiliac
And again:
monogrammed relationship
And you encapsulate Karen so beautifully with:
Sometimes you just need to swat the mosquito.
And then back to the funny:
“Is that your mailbox in the middle of the road?”
I love how you go from anxious to serious to funny and back again, just yanking me all over the place, and it is so great! You are SO into Karen's head here. And you have pinned Michael to a T! Just so well done, so well characterized. I congratulate you! Can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: Hee! Yay for chapter one reviews! That chapter was so fun for me. I have to get Michael back in here at some point, because he is just beyond hilarious to write. I hope you enjoy the rest of it!
Date: March 20, 2007 06:15 pm Title: Mosquitoes
I can't think of anything more than Caveman-like monosyllables like "more" and "now". You get the idea. ;) I can't wait to hear what they have to say to each other.
Author's Response: Ha! Awesome. Caveman-like speech is good enough for me. I'm actually really excited to write the next chapter. As much as I love writing Karen, I love writing Jim/Pam soooo much more
Date: March 16, 2007 10:54 am Title: Mosquitoes
ah i'm so scared!!! what will happen next?? oh, and you did a great job of describing what you think karen was feeling at the time. i enjoyed this.
Author's Response: Oh no! You're scared! Well, I'm really trying to get chapter 5 done, but I think I broke my brain. But you'll probably like the enxt chapter, becuase it's a lot of Karen :)
10 [Report This]Date: March 14, 2007 08:09 pm Title: Mosquitoes
So, I think I am in love with this story. Really great. Please, more! I'm on the edge of my..er..computer chair! So suspenseful, really. Great job.
Author's Response: Hee! Thanks! I'm definitely going to try to finish my first draft tonight :)
10 [Report This]Date: March 12, 2007 10:26 pm Title: Mosquitoes
This fic is officially my new addiction. I need another chapter like I need air. Definitely going down as one of my all-time favourites.
Author's Response: Oh, yay! I am incredibly happy to hear that! I like to encourage addictive behaviors in people :)