10 [Report This]Date: February 17, 2009 09:29 pm Title: Hot Water
The ending was so sexy AND cute eek :)
10 [Report This]Date: November 12, 2007 06:46 pm Title: Hot Water
AHHH
you are an amazing writer!
by the way, this line from the last chapter literally made me lol: "Maybe Dwight will show up and announce that he wants Pam to be the mother of a new batch of thirsty Schrute babies."
9 [Report This]Date: June 22, 2007 10:06 am Title: Hot Water
Mmm.....hot breath on the cheek. *sigh*
Date: April 09, 2007 09:11 pm Title: Hot Water
The difficulty of this--the painfully slow steps, the way it's so hard for them to just talk, or even touch each other--has completely drawn me in. I can't wait to see how the conversation goes, but I know it'll be worth the wait.
Date: April 03, 2007 06:17 am Title: Hot Water
"It happens all the time; hands brush unintentionally. But this isn’t a brush. It’s a caress. She can tell because when she jumps their hands don’t immediately fall apart. They don’t. Because it’s not a simple accidental brush. It’s a purposeful embrace."
From this line I know this is going to be a great chapter. I love that you've used kiss and embrace with reference to their hands. It makes such a simple gesture exude all the passion that they have yet to show each other. And then you go on to talk about the hand holding on CN, which is such a special moment but mostly overlooked because of the kiss itself. But the way he holds her hands there, doesn't it just say bride and groom?
You did a great job with your description of his new apartment, showing how even his surroundings are different than they used to be. EVEN HIS FURNITURE EVOLVED.
'"I don’t. But you look pretty shook up, and I know that you like tea when you need to relax,” he says matter-of-factly.'
This is so Jim to be worried about her. This is why you should pick him Pam, pick him!
"Her stomach flipped when she heard the question, but Jim never responded. And what did the absence of a response mean? She feels like she’s being swallowed by her doubt and fear and confusion."
I think this is very honest in the way this would happen for them, but seriously do we need to print up shirts? He still loves you Beesly! And I adore the analogy to the amusement park with Roy, I know that feeling like it should be the calm part but it is somehow more terrifying. Beautifully done.
"She’s so sorry for not being brave and honest. For choosing Roy over him. But she can’t bring herself to say any of those answers, although she knows she should say them all."
WOW JUST WOW. I think that says it all right there.
And then he just stands in front of her, so hot! I mean I can see it clearly in mind my and I can just imagine the delicious tension. When he says that they need to talk, my stomach did the floppy thing! Awesome.
The fact that he forgot about the teabags, so JAM. And it was a good way to cut the tension.
I still need to review the next chapter, but I can't tell you how much I love this story. It is exciting and well done and doesn't feel recycled but seems fresh. On to the next chapter that had me smiling on my bad day!
Author's Response:
First of all-- when I saw your reviews, I was soooooo happy! Long reviews = love.
I was hoping I wasn't doing too much with the hand holding by calling it an embrace, so I'm glad you liked it. And yay for picking up on the fact that even his furniture evolved! Wasn't sure if that worked either. and YAY for stomach flipping! So glad that moment worked!
Date: April 01, 2007 11:14 pm Title: Hot Water
ooooooooooooh. i get it - hot water. hahaha!
i loved this, the build up. and that jim is in NO WAY letting her get out of it this time.
yeah for quick updates (hint hint)
Author's Response:
Heh. Yeah, I tried to be clever there :)
Thanks for the review :)
Date: April 01, 2007 02:40 pm Title: Hot Water
Holy tension, Batman! You are keeping us on our tiptoes. I am certainly looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Hah! Thank you! I'm glad that the tension is still there even though the physical danger is over.
Date: April 01, 2007 02:24 pm Title: Hot Water
1) I LOVE it! The tenderness and tension and greatness is just oozing out of this chatper shan! The ending? Jim behind you whispering in your ear? That's hot.
Sorry I couldn't get back to you in time - but next time I promise to be ready asap! Weekends are super busy for me and I worked so I didnt' get to it until just now... But I loved it soo so so much! I'm turning into Kelly. Seriously. Also did you mean something else in thsi part of the sentence (the bold part) like her?...
But thoughts of last May quickly retreat when she feels the phantom pressure of his chest against he back.
Author's Response:
Thanks WBJ! I fixed that last part. It was a silly typo :)
You should be getting an email from me tonight or tomorrow. I've been a busy fic-writer today!
Date: April 01, 2007 01:56 pm Title: Hot Water
All right, all right...talk already, get it out of your system. And then....
Glad you updated. Looking foward to Ch.7!
Author's Response: Ha! Well, I have some good news. Because I'm a terrible student, I've spend the past hour writing fic instead of my term papers. So I now have eight, that's right eight pages written for chapter seven. Almost done :)
Date: April 01, 2007 08:56 am Title: Hot Water
Another great chapter! Gotta love that sexual tension building ;) Love the part about her throwing up after the fair ride, it really really fit the moment perfectly. Can't wait for more! Good luck with finals :)
Author's Response:
Thanks DinkinFlicka! I'm glad that the UST is working, because I'm always so unsure when I write it. The fair ride part was based on a true story. I wasn't the one throwing up, but my sneakers were ruined. Heh.
Now how about more Jealousy?
Date: April 01, 2007 08:36 am Title: Hot Water
Gaaaaah. next installment fast please.
Author's Response: Hah! I hope that was a good "gaaaaah"! Thanks :)
Date: April 01, 2007 07:15 am Title: Hot Water
I have an affinity for Jim and Pam and hot cocoa anyway. This was the perfect amount of awkward and sweet. I can't wait to see what else you have in store.
Author's Response: Heh. Yeah, I went for the cocoa idea. There's just something about cocoa, isn't there? Thanks so much for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2007 06:56 am Title: Hot Water
Hey this is sooo good! I've been following the story forever! More please!!!!
Author's Response: You are a very faithful reader and reviewer :) Thanks so much for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2007 06:03 am Title: Hot Water
aiiiiigh!! Cliffhanger does NOT describe it. Shan, what are you trying to do to me!??? I can't write Squirrel when I'm all in knots like this!! ;-)
Can you give this girl a shake for me? She's missing SOO much good 'taking care of Jim' action!!!!
Other than killing me, very good!
Author's Response:
Oh nooooooooooooooo! If you can't write squirrel then I'll have to update asap ;-)
It was so tempting to have her clean him up, but I just felt like they were too awkward around each other for him to believably let her "tend to his wounds"
Date: April 01, 2007 05:49 am Title: Hot Water
wow. it took forever for this update. and it was worth the wait.
i loved how jim was thinking of pam with the tea. even when he is in pain, he thinks of pam.
you have pam's emotions down. i can totally just imagine her (well anyone) feeling all of those things. damn, i think tears started rolling down my cheeks. i will say because its early in the morning. yeah, thats it.watery eyes.
WHAT! You don't make cocoa with water. Seriously, its milk all the way. Thats practically blasephmy.
and of course, another cliffhanger.
shesh. you suck :P
Author's Response:
You are totally right about the milk. I don't know what I was thinking!
Isn't Jim just dreamy, even though he's been a jerk this season? He's always thinking of others (re: PAM) before himself. And I'm glad that you teared up, even if it was just because it was early ;-)
Date: April 01, 2007 01:19 am Title: Hot Water
I have a week of tests that take up a large percentage of our final year results, too, so actually even if you don't update so soon, I wouldn't be jumping in my seat or threatening to spam you because I'm pretty sure I know what you're going through. :P
I love this so much! You've got Pam down, every inch of her [I'm sure there's a TWSS in there somewhere] - I loved her thought process, because along with knowing what she's thinking of the situation and what happened in May, we've also got some good thoughts in there about Jim in general and there are, surely, some SQUEE!moments in there. ;) I loved her story about the roller coaster, how that relates to the dizziness after the ride is over - brilliant.
Also, I loved anything to do with the tea, because Jim being that amazing guy that Pam was stupid enough to let leave, despite the bruise and the unresolved tension, is completely in-character, and so much like the S2!Jim that I miss terribly. And I loved how he didn't have the tea and that completely dissolved all that tension.
I loved him pressing her a little against the counter, because I'm sorry, but that's just hot. :P And I loved she knows that he's aware of what he's doing to her, because wowee.
I've loved this entire story so far and I'm convinced I'm going to love the rest, so whatever you do I'm probably going to end up loving this story to bits. ;) I can't wait for an update!! [ - when it comes, that is.]
Author's Response:
You are like the best reviewer! I'm glad that you like my depiction of Pam's thoughts. I have a ridiculous amount of sympathy for her, although I'm nothing like her. I feel the need to justify her inaction, you know? And Jim, as much of a jerk he's been sometimes this season, still has some of S2 Jim in him, so the tea thing just felt right.
And finally, I'm so glad that the counter scene worked, because I can never tell if I'm writing UST well. Thank you so much for the detailed review!
Date: March 31, 2007 11:48 pm Title: Hot Water
GAAAAAAAAHHHHH!! Don't end it here! Help! I need more!
Love the way you eased the tension between them with the missing teabags. Humor is what bonds these two, the default connection between them! Thanks, and I cannot WAIT for the next chapter. Hurry! Please?
Author's Response: Haha! Thank you! You are very right about humor being what bonds them. I just couldn't write a completely serious scene between them. They are too adorable.
Date: March 31, 2007 11:37 pm Title: Hot Water
HOT cocoa.
That is all. (Okay, also: Keep up the good work!)
Author's Response: Ha! Thanks :)
Date: March 31, 2007 10:22 pm Title: Hot Water
OMG! Shan, PLEASE OH PLEASE say you don't have any more papers to write and you can concentrate on the next chapter of this!!!! Not that I'm not grateful for this one...but I NEED to know what happens now! Ugh...the tension. I LOVE IT!!!
Author's Response:
HA! Okay, wow! Thank you!
Well, this is my last week of classes before finals start, so naturally all of my term papers are due this week. Boo. But I'm determined to finish this up in the next two weeks (meaning finish all remaining chapters-- i think 2 more) because I'm leaving for Europe in two weeks and won't be able to write again until I get back a month later.
Date: March 31, 2007 09:57 pm Title: Hot Water
"She knows that he’s aware of what he’s doing to her." Wow. That's some sentence!!!
Good things come to those who wait, and this chapter is a good thing! When you get to the next one, I'll remind myself of where we are (no hardship there!) and then go forward.
I'm really enjoying the post-Cocktails fanfic in general, and this is certainly one of my favorites!
Author's Response: Thanks Kev! I'm sad because this is very soon going to be AU... Not that I don't want a new episode!
Date: March 31, 2007 09:41 pm Title: Hot Water
wow i hope you update soon. i really like this one a lot - i usually go for the fluff/angst - but this is like hard core drama - not too light and fluffy but still totally awesome - i hope you update soon, please, please, please!!!
Author's Response: Yay! Thank you! I'm happy to be your drama exception :)
Date: March 31, 2007 09:37 pm Title: Hot Water
I was just wondering tonight what happened to this fic! You are mean to leave us with this ending. The "second and third aid" and Jim not having teabags was awesome and so cute.
Author's Response: I know I'm mean! I actually felt pretty bad about it this time, which is saying something because I normally cackle over cliffhangers. I'm glad that the teabags thing worked, because it seemed cute to me but I wasn't sure it would translate well to others :)
Date: March 31, 2007 09:35 pm Title: Hot Water
ARGH! I happy and sad all at once. I love where this is going, but the suspense is killing me.
Your imagery is beautiful. I can picture every movement, every piece of this story because you tell it so perfectly! Well done! Cannot wait for more!
Author's Response:
Wow! First place reviewer! That was like warp speed :)
Thank you, and I'm sorry! Heh. Seriously, that was such a lovely compliment. I feel bad about the suspense. Just ask my betas. I felt bad about ending this chapter here.