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Reviewer: JRAddict Signed [Report This]
Date: March 31, 2007 07:59 am Title: The Saddest Man in the Stadium

Ha!  I like Lisa's take charge attitude...can't wait to see if it works!

Author's Response: Thanks! Stay tuned...

Reviewer: Colette Signed [Report This]
Date: March 31, 2007 05:01 am Title: The Saddest Man in the Stadium

I have a particular soft spot for stories that deal with Pam as an artist - was glad to find one that does it so in depth. Really liked how Jim is so desperate to support her, but floundering around, not quite getting how to be the support she needs. His frustration/love for her really comes thru here, as does her struggle to become herself...she could be absolutely anyone she wanted if she would just be his wife. Great line - sums up so much. Lots of other great lines/details too...really looking forward to your next update!

Author's Response: Thanks Colette! Your praise means a lot. I have a plan for the conclusion of the story that I kind of like in terms of Pam figuring out herself and her art; I'll be curious for your take. Thnaks for the review!

Reviewer: lapdogdesign Signed [Report This]
Date: March 30, 2007 10:05 pm Title: The Saddest Man in the Stadium

Yay for Lisa's interference! And yes we've certainly dealt with this issue in my household. Heck, they've written whole books about it. Generally, women get upset and want/need a sympathetic ear and emotional support. Men see a problem that needs solving. These two different viewpoints just end up making both parties frustrated. 

Can't wait to see what happens when Pam and Jim finally talk this through. (Hopefully with some hot makeup sex -- which we all know you can do well -- followed by a successful art debut for Pam!)



Author's Response: Thanks so much for your comments....I wouldn't completely rule out the possibility of makeup sex. Yes, we men like to solve problems more than we like talking about them.

Reviewer: xoxoxo Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: March 30, 2007 09:47 pm Title: The Saddest Man in the Stadium

 the church of baseball failed him.

Seriously?   That is my church of choice.  Even though I root for the hated Yankees.

So realistic and I love that they have someone from outside their relationship telling them to cut through the bullshit.   God knows they could use that on the show.

Great job.



Author's Response: It's my church too, though I prefer a different denomination. Gratifying it seems realistic, as I fight a tendency to idealize things a bit. And I'm all for a bullshit cutting catlayst. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: fasterthansnakes Signed [Report This]
Date: March 30, 2007 09:45 pm Title: Art as a Spectator Sport

oh wow. somehow I can't imagine someone as docile as Pam (you have to be pretty self-effacing to live with roy for ten years) being such a bitch to Jim. I would never put up with that kind of crap and I know my husband wouldn't either. But for the sake of the story it's great :) more please

Author's Response: Hmmm...The Pam of this story is pretty far transformed from who she was with Roy, and the next chapter might shed a little light on where she was coming from. Also, at least in my book, calling someone's mom and telling her they need help would be a pretty significant violation. New chapter is coming tomorrow (Sunday). I'm a fan of your work, by the way.

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: March 30, 2007 08:47 pm Title: The Saddest Man in the Stadium

Love 'the church of baseball'.  That is just awesome.

And can we write Lisa in to the show?  BTW, I volunteer to be the wise (but only slightly) older woman who smacks some sense into those two. 

And I can totally relate to Pam -- poor HooHusband has a heck of a time when I have a show or I am entertaining and get stressed out getting ready.  He gets like a deer in headlights wanting to know what the heck to do with himself, alternately trying to stay out of the cross-fire and jumping in to help.  It is a pretty sucky position to be in.



Author's Response: Thanks for your reviews. I've been known to worship at the church of baseball myself. If the Hoohusband ever figures it out, have him let the rest of us know.

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: March 30, 2007 08:40 pm Title: Pam's Occasional Lack of Music

This is a really rich area of relationships to explore -- and it is really interesting to see from the guy's point of view.  I know it can be tough to see someone you love go through a tough time and just allow them to go through it, while all the time wanting to 'fix it', or even to 'fix' that other person.  I'm glad you are exploring this part of Pam & Jim's relationship.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the thoughtful comments...I know in my relationships I've sometimes felt like was with two dfferent people, the stressed out sad verson of which I could never figure out how to deal with, so this is a little autobiographical.

Reviewer: Weetzie Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 30, 2007 07:59 pm Title: The Saddest Man in the Stadium

Um... we totally need a "Lisa" on the show right now. She could get things all sorted out. I'm loving this story, by the way! (Your stuff is always good:)

Author's Response: Thanks! It would be nice if someone could give those two a little shove on the show, I agree.

Reviewer: Joni24 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 29, 2007 03:17 pm Title: Pam's Occasional Lack of Music

Ah! What's going to happen next? This is great! I love reading happy JAM fics! Update soon!

Author's Response: Thanks. I've got several more chapters planned...there will be more jam sunshine, I predict.

Reviewer: kth201 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 29, 2007 12:58 pm Title: Pam's Occasional Lack of Music

Ah! What? What happens? Where's the music? What's wrong with Pam? I need to know!

Author's Response: Sorry, I had written all that I could stand to write without posting.  More coming soon.  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: lena76 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 29, 2007 06:42 am Title: Art as a Spectator Sport

Whew.....That first chapter had me fanning myself..very HOT !! I like how you fit Pam's art into the story...awesome...I think it's sweet that Jim watches Pam paint.....aw..... I enjoy your writing style very much...keep up the great work !!!!!! You so Rock Brokenloon ;)



Author's Response: Thanks lena!  Very gratifying to hear that the steam worked as intended and that I Rock.  More to come.

Reviewer: time4moxie Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 29, 2007 05:34 am Title: Pam's Occasional Lack of Music

I love the insight in Pam and Jim's one troublesome spot - clearly it's an issue that both need to work on.  Great idea for a story - I really like it. :-)

Author's Response: Thanks moxie!  I just might go into a little more depth in that area...I think it is a realistic sort of struggle that they might have, and that many couple have in some way. 

Reviewer: LoveFool Signed [Report This]
Date: March 29, 2007 12:03 am Title: Pam's Occasional Lack of Music

Brokenloon I've just discovered this and totally loving it! It's just so nice to see them together and how Pam's arts fits in to their lives...I think I'll go read the 2nd art show now. I think I did it out of order. lol. Love it though!

Author's Response: Lovefool!!!  So glad you like it...I was actually going to contact you and see if it was okay to borrow from your universe a bit for the later chapters.  I'm of course a huge fan of yours; I hope you get a small fraction of the enjoyment from this that I've gotten from your work.

Reviewer: falldownmore Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28, 2007 10:59 pm Title: Pam's Occasional Lack of Music

why would you leave it THERE!? now i'm all curious and crap! GOSH! you'd better hurry up and things because i can't wait to see what's going on!

Author's Response:

The next chapter is written in my head, so hopefully it won't be long.  Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28, 2007 09:17 pm Title: Pam's Occasional Lack of Music

Maybe Pam is just PAM-M-S-ing.  Well, Dwight would think so anyway.

I loved this line: he became almost giddy with relief and told her with great sincerity and passion that she could be absolutely whoever she wanted if she would just be his wife. So sweet. And I can certainly imagine, after all they've been through, that Jim would be a bit scared that Pam's going to change her mind about him and them!

I look forward to more.



Author's Response: Thanks!  After taking a bit of a beating for years, I can definitely imagine Jim as being unable to believe his good fortune will last. 

Reviewer: uncgirl Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28, 2007 09:13 pm Title: You're Telling Me You Slept with Willie Nelson?

I love this flash back and flash forward.  And the steam in the first part, GUH!  WOW!  Well done with it. 

And I wanted to tell you that I think your writing style is great and getting better every time you post. Good job.  Keep it coming I need happy married JAM.



Author's Response: Glad to hear the steam worked.  I've been taking more time with this one and perhaps am learning by reading better writers, so I was hoping the writing was a little better.  Thanks as always.  Hang in for a little bumpy part next.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28, 2007 09:09 pm Title: You're Telling Me You Slept with Willie Nelson?

You've really given Lisa life.  I like how Jim can only take a certain amount of her.  So many ancillary characters in stories are so one-note.  They're perfect and good and everybody likes them, or they're just evil.  And, while those characters can also be fun, it's nice to see someone with their good points and their bad points.

I like this line: “Don’t waste your time painting bullshit.” Did you make that up, or is it commonly said? 



Author's Response: There is more Lisa to come.  I'm sure that line has been said by some art teacher somewhere, but in this case it is just what I imagined this character frequently saying.  

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28, 2007 09:01 pm Title: Art as a Spectator Sport

Wow.  That was fun (or, "thanks for the lovely smut" she said very quietly). 

Your writing style is so nice and flowing.  I really enjoyed the descriptions of Pam painting.  I also liked the life you've painted for them - Pam working part time at D-M for some money and the ability to hang out with Jim, etc. 



Author's Response: Thanks TLK...I'm glad to hear the writing flows, as I sometimes feel it flows much less well than some others here at mtt.   

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