10 [Report This]Date: April 26, 2007 03:39 pm Title: Interlude -- Jan
This story is amazing. It makes me want to write, and God knows I can't write to save my life. So something actually inspiring me to make a moron out of myself...that takes talent. Haha.
Update again soon!
Author's Response: Thanks for your comments.There are a lot of amazing writers on this site who inspired me to write. I woudn't sell yourself short so quickly. Thanks again!
Date: April 22, 2007 11:33 am Title: Interlude -- Jan
Awww, I love seeing the softer side of Jan. This was very sweet, with appropriate doses of funny as well :)
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!
Date: April 20, 2007 09:53 am Title: Interlude -- Jan
Trust me, I’m better than a shrink, just not as hip.
Excellent. These last two chapters have gotten better and better. Your voice here is so...calm and wise and gentle and good-humored. Divine. Really.
Author's Response: Thanks. I really appreciate your comments. As i've said, I totally ripped off God's voice from Wilton Barnhardt.
Date: April 20, 2007 09:48 am Title: Interlude -- Jan
This is great, although it took me about halfway through before I realized the italics were God's lines. I thought it was Jan talking to herself...
Hey, where can I sign up for the cloister program? It's sounding pretty good...
Author's Response:
Thanks for the feedback. I realize now, I should have pointed that out in the notes.
I know I need a vacation too. Thanks again for your review.
Date: April 20, 2007 09:29 am Title: Interlude -- Jan
I gotta say, I was excited to read Jan's thoughts with God, so even when I read the chapter title, I was like awesome.
Jan likes pink.... I would take those roses... I think they would be cool and unique. And finding deep navy blue flowers... heck, any time I get blue flowers, I just love em. Its like, nope, roses, they suck. But I got like blue carnations once and loved them.
I felt so sorry for that little line about Jan's mom (Gods response). Since I also lost a parent (not when I was 11, I was slightly older), any time with death of a parent just touches me like that.
But then I smiled when I learned how she lost her virginity.
I loved all of Jan's thoughts, esp that there really isn't Dr. Perry's. I really really am enjoying Jan recently, how she isn't just Jan, she has depth and everything.
Author's Response: I really have warmed up to Jan as well. Thanks, as always, for your excellent review.