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Reviewer: takemyhandx Signed [Report This]
Date: April 21, 2007 11:54 am Title: What a Week for Jim Halpert.

Yay I love juicy!! =)

Reviewer: desert island Signed [Report This]
Date: April 21, 2007 11:36 am Title: What a Week for Jim Halpert.

Pam is so strong in this. It is nice to see her like that. And to see Karen being so mature and understanding.
Nice work.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: April 21, 2007 10:04 am Title: What a Week for Jim Halpert.

I like when Pam says Do you honestly think, that I would be Okay with you wanting me now, after you rejected me a few months agoand I deserve to be loved for me, not because I’m the mother of your child and because you’re suddenly single”.  Those are certainly really good points!  I like her solution of a 3-bedroom, then it could work out over time or not, but there's time and space to sort it out.

Well played. (/Dwight) 

Reviewer: Brunette Signed [Report This]
Date: April 21, 2007 09:20 am Title: What a Week for Jim Halpert.

wow! Congratulations, fasterthansnakes, you have just become my favorite author. Between Emma, A Fool's Bargain, the amazing Jackson, and now this beautiful and touching story, I am truly amazed by your story-telling. And, as a fellow hardworking grad-student, I am also in awe of how you find the time to be creative!

Reviewer: the_squirrel Signed [Report This]
Date: April 20, 2007 06:17 pm Title: Telling the Truth is Harder Than It Looks.

i love this story. i didnt think i would but it has grown on me. i cant wait for the rest.

Reviewer: takemyhandx Signed [Report This]
Date: April 20, 2007 01:35 pm Title: Telling the Truth is Harder Than It Looks.

OMG please have Karen leave Jim and PLEASE let Adele be OK!! AH

Reviewer: PamPongChamp Signed [Report This]
Date: April 20, 2007 09:41 am Title: Telling the Truth is Harder Than It Looks.

Get out Karen! go! be fancy and rich, we dont want you in Pennysylvania anyway!!

gee I love this story, can't wait for more! 

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: April 20, 2007 07:16 am Title: Telling the Truth is Harder Than It Looks.

I really like how you didn't have Karen just going off in a huff (That's it!  Here's your ring back!), which is an easy way to do it (and probably how I would have). I also like how Mrs. Halpert was so supportive of Karen and of everyone, really.

If anything, I'm more interested in this story than I was before! 

Reviewer: lapdogdesign Signed [Report This]
Date: April 20, 2007 07:04 am Title: Telling the Truth is Harder Than It Looks.

I wanted to tell you how much I loved this part: “I just, I know that he won’t want to ever leave this town now. He has too much tying him here, and this isn’t what I wanted out of my life, selling paper in Pennsylvania. I had dreams and I thought he could be a part of the life I always wanted, but I’m afraid I can’t be a part of the life he’s going to want to live.”

Not because I'm a hardcore JAM shipper, but really because I loved that Karen looked at the situation kind of dispassionately, in regard to what she wants, and what Jim is sure to want, and how much compromise is too much? Plus, I can't see Karen staying in Scranton longterm, no matter what universe it is, so this turn of events is very believable to me.

 

You're a med student and you do all this awesome writing? I'm REALLY impressed. Can't wait for the next chapter! 

Reviewer: JinRain Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 19, 2007 09:26 pm Title: Grace Kelley and an iPod

I am SO sucked into this one! It's great!

Reviewer: invis Signed [Report This]
Date: April 19, 2007 07:59 pm Title: Grace Kelley and an iPod

Okay, so, I am actually teary right now, and that never happens to me.  But I could just see that video in my head, and it's so easy to imagine how that would make Jim feel, and...gah!  So good!

Reviewer: uncgirl Signed [Report This]
Date: April 19, 2007 07:27 pm Title: Grace Kelley and an iPod

Of course I'm still reading and I think you did really well explaining this.  I have been enjoying this story and I'm happy that you updated.   Please don't make us wait so long for the next one.......   :-)

Reviewer: lapdogdesign Signed [Report This]
Date: April 19, 2007 05:04 pm Title: Grace Kelley and an iPod

Jim getting to know his daughter via an iPod is ingenious, really! And I didn't think Pam's explanation was confusing at all. Given the info that she had, I would have made the same assumption she did. And to think that assumption took her into a miserable marriage with Roy? How sad.

I'm really digging this, just as I do all your stories. More, please!

Reviewer: PamPongChamp Signed [Report This]
Date: April 19, 2007 05:01 pm Title: Grace Kelley and an iPod

ok she explained...but I need details baby! I don't think we'll be deprived though :)

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: April 19, 2007 03:33 pm Title: Grace Kelley and an iPod

Yes, now it's all clear!  Thanks.

Very interesting! 

Reviewer: rulesofjinx Signed [Report This]
Date: April 13, 2007 10:58 am Title: When the Truth Kills

my heart just shattered into a million little pieces. oh goodness... poor jim. it's not his fault!! roy's just crazy! oh please tell me adele's ok??? you are gonna keep going with this yeah?

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: April 10, 2007 02:36 pm Title: When the Truth Kills

Wow.  Totally still with you.  Coming along for the ride.

Ooh, ooh, can Jim ditch Karen?  Pretty please?  Or vice-versa; I'm not picky. 

Reviewer: lostfox555 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 06, 2007 11:17 pm Title: When the Truth Kills

Totally with you. Totally excited for updates.

Reviewer: Tasha the Cookie Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 06, 2007 09:27 pm Title: When the Truth Kills

Ack! Great, but short! I'm still here, and waiting. =)

Reviewer: lapdogdesign Signed [Report This]
Date: April 06, 2007 08:31 pm Title: When the Truth Kills

Good lord.

Poor, poor Pam. Poor everyone, really.

Yeah, you still got me! Can't wait to see where you are taking us. Update soon, please! 

Reviewer: invis Signed [Report This]
Date: April 06, 2007 06:57 pm Title: When the Truth Kills

Still with you, but I'm a little confused with the pronouns...  Like, okay, in this line:

“I knew that I had to stop him, to stall him, because even though Roy told me that he had no intention of shooting him, Roy was too unpredictable drunk, so I stood in front of him and wouldn’t let him leave.”

Pam is talking about Roy intending to shoot Jim, right?  And she's speaking to Jim, so why does she say "him" (the "him" I bolded)?  There's another instance in this paragraph:

“Then he started getting even madder thinking that I was defending him, and I guess…I don’t know why maybe Roy heard something but he started saying that maybe he was in the house…that maybe I was still seeing him. I tried to convince Roy that he wasn’t here but then…Oh God…”

Maybe I'm just reading it wrong, but that didn't make sense to me.  But other than that I'm still loving the story.  :) 



Author's Response:

sorry if it's confusing the premise is that Pam doesn't want Karen to know who Adele's real father is so she keeps his name ambigious. What happened is that Roy doesn't intend to shoot Jim but he's taking the gun to go scare him. Pam defends Jim which makes Roy even madder, then Roy hears a noise in the house and he starts thinking Jim is in the house (remember he's really drunk) and then Roy hears a crash and he fires in the direction of the crash accidentally.

It was confusing I know, sorry. Thanks so much for reading!!!!

Reviewer: office_romance Signed [Report This]
Date: April 06, 2007 06:39 pm Title: Prologue

OMG!!! You HAVE to keep writing!!!!!! This is so good!!!! And hurry!!!! Please!!!!!!!

Reviewer: bloomsgirl Signed [Report This]
Date: April 06, 2007 05:28 pm Title: When the Truth Kills

So. Freaking. Amazing. I can't even say anything else. Keep going, I will definately be waiting by my computer for each chapter. Wow. :P

Reviewer: takemyhandx Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 06, 2007 03:58 pm Title: When the Truth Kills

Yes, crazy. But, yea, very very very good. I need some LONGER CHAPTERS HERE!!! I love this! So so sad, that poor Adele.

Reviewer: oypoodle Signed [Report This]
Date: April 06, 2007 03:54 pm Title: Prologue

its so not something that would ever happen. but its so excellent. ah. continue. please.

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