Date: February 21, 2010 01:56 pm Title: Joke's on you
love love LOVE. and the jello... adorable and absolutely brilliant! i've been rewatching s2 and 3 lately so this was a perfect read. :)
Date: April 19, 2007 01:32 am Title: Joke's on you
I was going to quote a bunch of lines here and say how much I admired them, but that would be dissecting perfection. This is a seamless whole, complete and hilarious. I loved every word. I rarely actually sit at my computer and chuckle the way I did at this. I have not read so perfect a Jim or Karen in a long time. Kudos for a job well done. Can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Gah! I have melted from your awesome review. Thank you so much!
10 [Report This]Date: April 18, 2007 06:09 pm Title: Joke's on you
Hey, I've been reading fics on this site for a long time without ever registering, but this story forced me to register just so I could tell you how adorable Pam's myspace blog prank was. "My heart is all aflutter"....very funny! I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Author's Response: Wow, that is just...wow! Thank you so much!
Date: April 18, 2007 12:46 pm Title: Joke's on you
This story, ftw. Seriously! I love the Jim/Karen banter, and Karen's directness. And this: “I can’t.” How many questions could be answered with that phrase?
Sooo good. Can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: Thanks, Rowena!
Date: April 15, 2007 09:54 pm Title: Joke's on you
Sorry for jumping in again but I too, needed to say that the dialogue was spot on. Very much Jim and Karen. Dialogue can be very challenging, so pat yourself on the back for that.
Author's Response: Sweet--thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: April 15, 2007 05:22 pm Title: Joke's on you
You did an awesome job with the first two chapters! I can't wait to see what you do with the rest of it. The characterizations are spot-on, IMO. Especially Karen. I really enjoyed the dialogue between Karen and Jim in the break room.
Author's Response: Thank you! This is only the second fic I've written on The Office, because their writing is so good it's intimidating to try to emulate it. I'm glad I'm doing okay. :)
Date: April 15, 2007 02:38 pm Title: Joke's on you
I really liked this story. Especially the line you used twice: "It must be weird to say that to someone other than yourself." How true is that? Such a poignant line. Going right for the grief bone. Karen kind of knows how to hit it where it hurts.
I think you did a nice job with the Karen/Jim dialogue. The scene in the breakroom with Jim and Pam was cute, too. It's hard ... them dealing with this space between them, but I think after Jim's conversation with Karen a minute earlier, it almost made it easier to open up to her a little bit there. Anyway, can't wait to see what happens next!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the detailed review. I'm glad you're enjoying it. I'm enjoying writing it; I've missed Jim and Pam's easy camaraderie on the show, so it's nice to be able to write/read it in fic.
Date: April 15, 2007 09:45 am Title: Joke's on you
Excellent job! Great characterization. I could hear Jim in my head when I read what you had written. I can't wait to see where this goes next.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm really glad you're enjoying it. I am, too. :)
9 [Report This]Date: April 15, 2007 09:41 am Title: Joke's on you
LOL ! Loved Karen's last comment there!! I could really hear thier vocies in this story, well written! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it. I've got the next 3 chapters written, so I'll stick another one up soon. :)
Date: April 15, 2007 08:57 am Title: Joke's on you
Ooh, interesting start. And I think you accomplished making Karen not "too horrid" but frustrated... I really thought the beginning banter about the prank was very cute and sweet between her and Jim, and I understand why she'd get annoyed, but really: Jim pranking Pam in any way other than the adorableness of the Andy prank? Don't see it happening. Let it go, Karen!
Author's Response: Yep, exactly. I always felt like the Andy prank was more a way to get Andy to do embarrassing things for Jim and Pam's entertainment, rather than to actually prank Pam, because she picked up right away what was going on, as Jim knew she would. Because they know each other so well. Aww. :)
Date: April 15, 2007 08:41 am Title: Joke's on you
I always thought a really telling moment, re: Jim's true thoughts, was in The Convict, when Karen wants to join in his prank on Pam (well, really on Andy, but...) The way he instinctively recoiled and deflected her - like pranking was his thing with Pam, and it would be too painful to have Karen so blatantly usurp her role that way. For him too, I think. That's the feeling that came through in this chapter as well...Pam is off limits, and the way he says it, sums up so much. Looking forward to seeing what's next.
Author's Response: Yes, excellent example. And I wanted to give that a little more weight in my story, especially after The Negotiation. I just couldn't believe that Jim would really be that cold to Pam, so there had to be something else going on in his mind that we weren't privy to. Anyway, I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for the review!
Date: April 15, 2007 08:22 am Title: Joke's on you
OOOOOooo very interesting! I'm loving the premise and can't wait to see where you go from here!
Date: April 15, 2007 08:01 am Title: Joke's on you
Ooooo...Karen slamming Jim! That ending was great. I think Karen has been wanting to say that for a looooong time.
Author's Response: Hee--I think you're right.
Date: April 15, 2007 07:59 am Title: Joke's on you
I really liked this. Jim's reaction to hearing Pam was the target was spot-on.
My one quibble is that Karen saying “Such a dork,” seemed too Jim or Pam-like...
Some favorite parts were "mouthing “Minesweeper” again.", "I can't", and "Pam is off limits." Plus, it's just a really good concept in general.
I look forward to more.
Author's Response: Thanks for the comments, TLK. I agree with you about "Such a dork." I have a little more trouble getting a handle on Karen's dialogue than Jim's. :( But I'm glad you liked the rest!
Date: April 15, 2007 05:40 am Title: Joke's on you
This is really well written. You have captured the two character's voices perfectly, especially Jim's. It felt like I was hearing dialogue from the show here and there. Wonderful stuff. And I like how Karen never lets Jim off the hook. It may be the one good thing about their relationship. She at least forces him to deal with important issues. I look forward to seeing where you take this!
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! I'm glad I hit the dialogue. Thanks for the great review, Cousin Mose!
Date: April 15, 2007 04:59 am Title: Joke's on you
Loved this exchange: “Pam is off limits,” “It must be weird to say that to someone other than yourself.” Ouch.
Looking forward to the rest!
Date: April 15, 2007 04:52 am Title: Joke's on you
“I can’t.” How many questions could be answered with that phrase?
Ouch. Very nice. I like this. I like that Karen is trying to fix things the best she can, and that, far from being vindictive, she's simply blundering because she doesn't get it. Or, actually, she does get it, but is trying to re-arrange things in a way that fits. I don't know if I'm making sense, but your story does and I love it!
6 [Report This]Date: April 15, 2007 02:50 am Title: Joke's on you
That last line... ouch!
I can't wait to see where this goes!
Date: April 15, 2007 01:48 am Title: Joke's on you
OK, no, no, no, no, no, no: even Jim, who was mad at Pam in The Negotiation, with ugly hair and yucky shirts and paleness and no ability to even prank Dwight - even this Jim cannot possibly prank Pam Beesly. It doesn't work that way, because a) he is in LOVE WITH HER, DAMMIT, and b) it goes against everything they stand for. If in the next chapter Jim decides to do it again, I may have to disown this story, and believe me, I don't want to be doing that because this is an unbelievably intriguing start for a story.
I loved the Jim in the first part, because he's being all cute and Dwighty, and I loved him in the end, because that is the S2!Jim that he's been hiding away for so long, and I loved it must be weird to say that to someone other than yourself, because that was below the belt but completely true...
...and still it made me want to slap Karen. I want her to leave, even if I liked her [I mean, she's pretty, funny, and it's not her fault she loves Jim] at first, because she's not getting it, and...she has to leave, pronto. She was great at first, but NOW. now. now...
Can't wait for an update!! I'll be waiting. ;)
Author's Response: So, what you're saying is that you don't want Jim to prank Pam? I just wanted to be clear on that, because you were kind of wishy-washy there. ;)
Date: April 14, 2007 11:26 pm Title: Joke's on you
First Review! I just wanted to say how much I really enjoyed this chapter. It's really not Karen's fault that she fell for Jim, can anyone really blame her? I also really liked the bit about the spreadsheet - that seems so Karen. Please write more soon!
Author's Response: I absolutely cannot blame Karen for falling for Jim. Nope, not one bit. (That would be kind of hypocritical of me - hee!) And the spreadsheet thing was my way of commiserating with Karen's situation. I make spreadsheets ALL DAY at work, and I thought it just sounded like her. :) Thanks for reviewing!!
Date: April 14, 2007 11:18 pm Title: Joke's on you
Ha, you're right - it's not Karen's fault that Pam's the only one for Jim, but since it's that way, she should really just leave, and do it gracefully. Whoops, did I just betray my unbiased attitude? Sorry about that. Anyway, I really enjoyed this first chapter. I honestly don't think even this new Jim who was so cold to Pam the other week would be able to pull a prank on her with Karen. Definitely off-limits. And sure, I feel for Karen too, but... she's rather gigantically deluded and I think she really needs to wake up to the situation (as, by the way, does Jim). Maybe this'll help set her straight? Well, anyway, please write more!
Author's Response: Hee! Your secret's safe with me - I'll never tell anyone I suspect your Jam bias. ;) Thanks for the review! I have the next chapter written, but I like to stay one chapter ahead in writing vs. posting so I'll keep on truckin'. Glad you're enjoying it!