Date: April 17, 2007 06:30 pm Title: Fallout
Man, this fight is SO satisfying. That he's been punishing her since that night is such a great insight.
Date: April 16, 2007 06:26 pm Title: Fallout
This chapter is amazing. I've seen Pam say similar things in other fanfics, but often (not always) she says too much, or too eloquently. Or, she has a whole paragraph or two to say before Jim speaks. You've done this very realistically.
Also, my heart was kinda pounding reading this. It was angsty in the very best way possible.
This line: "...she says the word ‘engaged' like you've never heard it before, like you should have looked it up in the dictionary before you came into the kitchen" is just incredibly good.
Author's Response: Yeah, I'm a huge believer in the fact that Pam's not suddenly going to have every word available to her at the moment she tells Jim how she feels. Greg and the gang may prove her wrong, but eloquence at times like that, don't really seem to suit her.
I liked that line too, it stuck out to me as I reread.
Thanks for all the reviews.
Date: April 16, 2007 05:56 pm Title: Fallout
You make some really good points in here about Pam's frustration; he shouldn't be mad at her for doing just what he would have done in the same situation. Great job reading the characters and making them seem real; keep it up! --CH
Date: April 15, 2007 11:45 pm Title: Fallout
Go Pam!!! Thank you for finally letting her break! Write fast!
Date: April 15, 2007 09:47 pm Title: Fallout
Snap. Jim just got owned by Pam, and I loved every minute of it. Seriously, as mad as I was that Pam didn't just leave Roy right then and there on Casino Nights, she makes such good points in this piece that for once I'm thinking "That's right! Tell 'em girl!" Very very well done, you rock :)
Date: April 15, 2007 08:55 pm Title: Fallout
I may have already commented on this, but I'm reading it again so I wanted to say (or re-say) "Wow." This exchange is great:
"Should I even ask where his motivation came from?"
"The French." She says simply.
"Ah," you reply, somehow knowing exactly what she means.
"Well, I guess..." You step away, pointing stupidly at your lunch bag, like it will finish the sentence for you.
And this is just...perfect:
"You don't get to punish me anymore." Her voice is steady, quiet. Strong. And you realize, if she wasn't ripping you inside out... again, you'd be proud of her. Just...perfect. I can't get it to un-italicize. I don't freakin' know why. Sorry.
Date: April 15, 2007 08:08 pm Title: Fallout
And that is the fight that I have been waiting for. Can't wait for more.