Date: April 29, 2007 06:33 pm Title: Declaration
I just found this story thanks to LJ -- I've read a ton of Pam/Jim confrontations, and this one is one of the most plausible. I love that Pam finally lets Jim have it for his wild expectations. And that she digs deep to summon up the courage to say to Jim how she feels. Very true to character.
10 [Report This]Date: April 16, 2007 11:28 pm Title: Declaration
This chapter was really beautiful (even the last line- Pam's eyes glowing in the moonlight- what a great image!). I can picture the outdoor setting perfectly, and I think you hit exactly the right notes as far as their conversation, how much needed to be said, and how much could be understood. I'm a big fan of less angst is more when it comes to the conversation where Jim and Pam finally understand each other- and to me, this was practically perfect (very few tears, yay!). I also like seeing things from Jim's perspective- that's a nice touch. So, well done!
Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah, I'm all about less angst at this point! Glad you enjoyed it - thanks for reading. :D
Date: April 16, 2007 07:50 pm Title: Declaration
Sigh. Perfect. I am in love with Jim and Pam in love with each other. And your writing is fantastic. It's descriptive and minimalist at the same time. Some favorite lines:
It hits you then, for as long as you've known her, you've seen Pam exactly three ways: in work clothes (everyday), in jeans (twice), and in a blue dress (once and always).
You know this is it, you're done. Forever.
"How old are you?" She kisses you then, but it's more like teasing, and she pulls away, grinning triumphantly. "Wow..." you have a little trouble breathing, "so... old enough." So fabulous. I just loved every moment of it.
10 [Report This]Date: April 16, 2007 06:20 pm Title: Declaration
Oh wow, that was marvelous. All of it. Angry Pam was great, loving Pam was great, stunned Jim was great, hopeful Jim was great. Wonderful work.