9 [Report This]Date: July 28, 2006 10:09 pm Title: Chapter 1
I'm so glad I finally got a chance to start reading this. Excellent so far. To answer the question posed at TWoP, I wouldn't change it if I were you. Wonderful!
10 [Report This]Date: July 28, 2006 04:16 pm Title: Chapter 13
Wow. That's it, just wow.
10 [Report This]Date: July 28, 2006 03:28 pm Title: Chapter 12
I had such a blast reading this chapter! The banter was very well written.
10 [Report This]Date: July 28, 2006 08:18 am Title: Chapter 7
What a powerful, emotional chapter! I'm sad that I've already made it this far...it means less to read in the future.
10 [Report This]Date: July 28, 2006 07:51 am Title: Chapter 13
Lord.
I thought I'd just read the first couple of chapters and finish it later...but couldn't stop until the end. Not only steamy, but the dialogue is really well done, and that's not easy to pull off with these characters. Really great read.
Author's Response: Listen, I am so impressed with your stuff that I take this as an enormous, enormous compliment - thank you so much!
10 [Report This]Date: July 28, 2006 01:03 am Title: Chapter 3
I'm not yet finished with the story, only on Ch. 3, but I couldn't resist telling how beautiful it's been so far. The emotions, the descriptions, everything is wonderful. The first chapter was a slow build up, but it set the mood for such an emotional punch you delivered in these last two. Alright, that's all I'll say, I want to get to the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I've been considering chopping it into a much shorter version - almost like a three chapter deal with just a chapter of backstory/here's what happened after the kiss, and then right to the last two chapters, because I'm afraid that a lot of people might (understandably) lose interest after the first chapter -- and I really love the last two! :o) But at the same time, one of the reasons I like the last two is that there's such a buildup to them - a long, rambling buildup, but a buildup nonetheless. :o) So I really appreciate your comment! And working on next chapter - having lots o'fun, too. :o)
10 [Report This]Date: July 27, 2006 07:53 pm Title: Chapter 5
Poor, poor Jim. I love the detail you've put into his thoughts here. Such a pleasure to read.
I'll finish the rest tomorrow, hopefully not a work...
10 [Report This]Date: July 27, 2006 05:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
I read this story in one sitting - fantastic! I do hope you continue this universe. I'd love to see what happens in the future with them. One teenie tiny pet peeve though? Maybe you could post your author's notes at the end? I just get soooo into the story, then I click the next chapter and your notes bring me back to real life. And we don't acknowledge real life in fanficville. :)
9 [Report This]Date: July 27, 2006 05:14 pm Title: Chapter 13
More, please!
10 [Report This]Date: July 27, 2006 05:10 pm Title: Chapter 3
It was interesting to read Jim's POV of what transpired after the initial kiss. Still as heartbreaking (and as well written).
Date: July 27, 2006 03:49 pm Title: Chapter 2
Amazing. I'm in awe of what you've written in this chapter. So much detail, so much angst...yet the Pam you wrote here gave me hope for a potential happy ending. I'm gripped, totally.
Date: July 27, 2006 03:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
I've been saving this story for when I'd have time to read in almost uninterrupted (I love long stories!), but I couldn't resist peaking at it, and now I'm hooked. You brought back Casino Night so faithfully, and your Jim was so angsty, so believable...
8 [Report This]Date: July 27, 2006 01:50 pm Title: Chapter 2
Because I am a glutton for Jim/Pam stuff, I love reading separate chapters for each point of view...BUT I think it might make for a stronger story if the chapters were combined with some kind of omniscient point of view so that we could get glimpses into what both Pam and Jim are thinking. That way you could avoid having the same dialogue written out twice. I'm enjoying this as-is, though!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the feedback - and yes, you're right. I actually cut out a few chapters because so much of it does get repetitive. I liked the idea, for some reason, of seeing it from one point of view and then another, but you're right - omniscient would be much more effective. Thank you again for the feedback - hope you like the rest of the story!
10 [Report This]Date: July 27, 2006 01:00 pm Title: Chapter 7
Really great job with the confrontation between Roy and Pam. Very heartbreaking and in character.
8 [Report This]Date: July 27, 2006 09:28 am Title: Chapter 13
Wow, you obviously put A LOT of work into this. I'm not a big fan of angsty but you did a great job of capturing all of those intense emotions. The tension between them when they finally started to date with "rules" was unbearably good. Of course, the last chapter was perfect and hhhooottt!
Author's Response: Thank you! I had lots of fun making up the various rules. :o) Oh and by the way, I love your name - Bono DOES rock!
10 [Report This]Date: July 27, 2006 04:44 am Title: Chapter 13
Okay, I warned you in the beginning....I am now officially stalking you because of the total and complete perfection of your story. I really am, now, your number one fan!
10 [Report This]Date: July 27, 2006 04:05 am Title: Chapter 13
Okay, I warned you in the beginning....I am now officially stalking you because of the total and complete perfection of your story. I really am, now, your number one fan!
Author's Response: You are too sweet - I appreciate your feedback, honestly! (And I'm glad you didn't stick with it only to go, wha...? at the end.) :o)
10 [Report This]Date: July 27, 2006 02:25 am Title: Chapter 13
I just read the whole story and just about died a dozen times. So well written! Great job, and thanks for the hours of entertainment!
Author's Response: Thank YOU for the feedback!
10 [Report This]Date: July 27, 2006 02:16 am Title: Chapter 13
Just read the last chapter. Amazing. Just... amazing.
And "Love Will Come Through" is such a beautiful song. I was excited when they listened to "Sing" on the show.
Author's Response: I had never heard it until I watched some of the videos people did. In the longer version of this story (believe it or not!), I wrote in an unseen moment where Jim has it on in the car on their way to Rite Aid, and tries to turn it off but she stops him. She insists on listening to it (b/c she's never heard it), hears the lyrics, and there's this big tense...uh oh kind of moment, wherein she realizes the significance of the song to him. I also worked in "Chasing Cars" by Snow Patrol in the long version as well, but cut it out, too. (Jim heard it on the plane home from Australia; Pam heard it in the mall - sadness ensues, till the end when they realize it's ultimately a hopeful song.) Okay, I'm going to SHUT UP now. :o) Thanks for the feedback!
Date: July 27, 2006 02:04 am Title: Chapter 13
Wow. Just...wow. I think this story attained a level of perfection I'm not even sure the show could pull off.
I hope you continue to write (and share!), because this was just fantastic. And if I may be so bold as to make a suggestion? I'd love to see this "weekend of sex" fleshed out (pun intended). 'Cause...damn.
Author's Response: Ah me...well, you'll be happy to know that I'm bound and determined to flesh out (hee) the weekend of sex thing - not just write a weekend of all out smut (though the thought is lovely), but try to capture the way their first "real" weekend together will unfold. (So of course, there will be laughs and silliness and lots of sex.) :o)
10 [Report This]Date: July 26, 2006 09:59 pm Title: Chapter 13
All I can say is WOW. This story has been so good, so deliciously long (TWSS) and this chapter was so darn hot! I have just loved it. And did I say how hot this chapter was? Sigh....
Author's Response: TWSS! :o) THank you thank you thank you! It was fun to write, trust me.
10 [Report This]Date: July 26, 2006 06:46 pm Title: Chapter 2
Oh, and I thought that it was very interesting that she made the call to her mother from Jim's desk as well. Not too many people emphasize that. =]
Author's Response: Mmm-hmm - it's one of those little things that I didn't notice when I saw the finale the first time (of course, by that point I hadn't breathed since the confession scene, so I was a bit oxygen deprived), but I love it that other people here pointed it out. Nice touch on the part of the writers, definitely.
10 [Report This]Date: July 26, 2006 06:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is your first foray into fanfic? Are you kidding me? You're just fantastic at it, so keep it coming! The first chapter; your analysis of their words and the tones that they say them with is amazing. I noticed all of those subtle things as well. The writers do a fantastic job with subtext, and you're very intuitive. I love this.
Author's Response: It really is! Thanks for the feedback - I really love trying to get on paper (so to speak) the kinds of subtle nuances that are so brilliant between these two - I don't think i even come close, but it's fun to try. :o)
10 [Report This]Date: July 26, 2006 04:54 pm Title: Chapter 3
I think you should apologize to my boss because I won't be getting any work done today. I must only read this fic! ;)
Author's Response: Yay! (And send your boss my deepest, most sincere apologies. But he/she should understand that NOTHING is more important than Jim and Pam. Period.) :o) Seriously - thanks so much; I'm really glad you're enjoying it!
10 [Report This]Date: July 26, 2006 04:32 pm Title: Chapter 13
This story rocks my world!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Seriously - I love the feedback. :o)