Date: August 20, 2007 12:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
I absolutely loved this story. The inner monologues of both Jim and Pam are pitch perfect. Great job!
Date: April 29, 2007 10:46 am Title: Chapter 1
"listening to the sounds of Roy getting the kids ready for school, in a house with a terrace…" Haha. Pam was really kidding herself. At best, Roy is a "help get the kids ready for school" kind of guy. At best, and I kind of even doubt that.
"Their whole lives were set." Thud. I mean, um, every girl's dream! Swoon!
"Pam just worried that taking a 9-to-5 office job would make her life seem even more routine, and would crush her already waning energy for drawing." What a great line.
"next to a maroon Corolla" - Pam, just jump in the Corolla. Step toward the light. Or is it, "just jump the guy who owns the Corolla?" One of those things.
FNB, you did a great job with this. I'm really glad there's more to come; you have a way of bringing Pam's inner life to light.
Author's Response: Thanks! I love your penname, by the way. Maybe she should jump the guy who owns the Corolla IN the Corolla...yes that's the one!!
Yes, I was trying to come up with the most idealized version of Roy possible, because that MUST be what Pam was thinking of being engaged to him all those years.
My next chapter is going to delve into Jim's inner life...this will probably be much trickier, but hopefully I will not disappoint!
Date: April 29, 2007 12:17 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, this is gonna be good. I can tell. I love how you have them parking next to Jim's car on Pam's first day at D-M. Foreshadowing! Woo!
Author's Response: How perfect that you are my first reviewer! Thanks a lot. I'm working on a similar Jim-centric chapter for some time in the next couple days.