10 [Report This]Date: May 21, 2007 09:51 pm Title: Bitterness
I love the angst! I am hooked to this little jam-gem!
Date: May 21, 2007 08:23 pm Title: Desperation
Everything doesn't have to be light and fluffy! If something's interesting and different (which this certainly is), I'm happy to read it! I like this: She felt emotionally fragile and she knew that he had seen it when he stared her in the eyes.
Author's Response: I just realized I haven't responded to any comments that you've left! I would just like to say thank you to all the comments that you have left, and I'm glad that you're enjoying the story! :)
Date: May 21, 2007 01:49 pm Title: Interrogation
Ohhh! I can't wait to see what happens next!!
Date: May 21, 2007 12:00 pm Title: Interrogation
Poor Karen. :(
I can't believe she forgave him for that either! Her heart needs a bandaid.
And Jim needs to stop thinking about Little Jim for a moment, maybe.
Also, the gratuitous use of the f word? LOVE it.
Author's Response: HAHA! I'm glad that you enjoy the gratuitous usage of the 'f' word. :) I don't usually do it (in stories...or real life!) but I couldn't resist since I'm writing a "darker" story here. I wanted to twist around the personalities of Jim and Pam (and Karen) a bit. I figure they like to swear frequently.
I'm glad that you like it though! :)
Date: May 21, 2007 11:03 am Title: Interrogation
Very interesting! I love that Karen caught him in the lie, and how he was surprised she would think he'd slept with Pam, when that was his intent. Although, if he had slept with Pam, presumably he wouldn't be back so soon... (Hmm. Wham, bam, thank you, Pam?)
Date: May 20, 2007 10:14 pm Title: Bitterness
He'll be back, ooh!
Dark is interesting, I think. I like this so far.
Date: May 20, 2007 08:07 pm Title: Bitterness
Oh you are into something good here! I like this a lot! I can not wait until he comes back!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad that you like it so much! :)
10 [Report This]Date: May 20, 2007 02:44 pm Title: Bitterness
"He'll be back." Ack! Update soon!
So many lovely passages... "the skirt of her dress seems to leap to her upper thighs and he can’t help but think that the skirt wants her to get laid as well." Hee. ... "It feels as if the Berlin Wall is being constructed between the two of them. West side of the sofa and East side of the sofa." Heh--and, so sad! Simultaneous funny and angst, v. nice. ... "As he stands up an arm goes around her waist to keep her from falling over under the weight of her world." Love that it is the weight of "her" world, specifically--poignant twist on the phrase.
Author's Response:
Thank you, thank you! :)
I hope that you enjoy the future chapters just as much!