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Reviewer: kaystar Signed [Report This]
Date: August 01, 2006 03:54 pm Title: Chapter 4

"Pam didn’t want him, and even if she did….well, it was just too late now." After the fun he is having with Andi, I'm afraid Jim might be right! But if he doesn't tell her about Pam I think the next chapter(s) should be very interesting.

Reviewer: Kath0321 Anonymous 10 [Report This]
Date: August 01, 2006 02:49 pm Title: Chapter 1

Ouch. I think my heart just broke a little. Reading this was tough. How am I going to watch Jim with another girl. Ugh. I can't WAIT for your next chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you! If you want happy, fluffy, smutty Jam, read chapters 12 & 13 of "What Happens Tomorrow." :o) Thanks again for the feedback - oh, and I love your site!

Reviewer: Elmo Signed [Report This]
Date: August 01, 2006 02:26 pm Title: Chapter 1

You're sooooo cruel... ;) Please, I beg you, make it better for Pam soon !!!

Author's Response: I'm sorry! Yeah, well...I'm working on it. (Although the one thing I did enjoy was writing about a woman who would worship the ground Jim walks on -- cause god knows, he deserves it....)

Reviewer: Colette Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: August 01, 2006 01:46 pm Title: Chapter 3

Very sweet scene - and nice to see someone appreciating Jim in the manner to which he ought to be accustomed..looking forward to seeing how this unfolds. (BTW, so far the 'smut' factor seems pretty mild, so no need to worry....though smut never worries me at all!)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yes, that's what I was going for: someone who was the antithesis of Pam just in the sense that she really does appreciate him and tells him so. That's the only way I could realistically see him getting involved with someone else so soon. And yes, the smut factor is very low on this one so far.

Reviewer: kaystar Signed [Report This]
Date: August 01, 2006 01:24 pm Title: Chapter 3

Wow. I was prepared not to like this chapter, but you wrote it so well, I did. Jim deserves to be happy, even with someone else (I keep telling myself!) Still breaks my heart though. Very romantic love scene.

Author's Response: Yay! Thank you so much! It was hard to just invent a character like that; I didn't know what to do to make her likeable, but not too much like Pam. As for the love scene - yeah, figured we could excuse him if the girl came on to him in his own bed. I mean, what else could he have done?? :o)

Reviewer: princesslisa Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: August 01, 2006 09:42 am Title: Chapter 1

Really great job.

Author's Response: Thanks so much!

Reviewer: kaystar Signed [Report This]
Date: August 01, 2006 08:15 am Title: Chapter 2

Wonderful chapter. You have Pam's voice down just perfectly. I even felt sad for poor Roy. Thanks for updating so quickly, I can't wait to read more.

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for the review! I've gotten sidetracked, posting some other stuff I've written, but I'll get back to this one eventually.

Reviewer: ExReceptionist Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: August 01, 2006 06:32 am Title: Chapter 1

OMG! This is so heartbreaking, but so great!

"She blinked several times, hoping the tears wouldn’t fall, then shaking her head when they finally did, pulling back when Jim reached a hand out to touch her cheek. Oh, the look on his face when she’d done that, when she’d shrunk away from his touch even though it was the last thing she wanted to do…." For some reason this part just really undid me. Loved the interaction with Phyllis. She's a fave. Please keep going!



Author's Response: Thank you so much! I have to admit, I'm not liking this story as much as my other one, because I'm forcing myself to be more short and to the point in this one (I get the sense from the lack of response to the other one that people were turned off by the length of it), but.... I'm glad to hear that you like it! :o) I've added chapter two, will likely add a few more over the course of the day....

Reviewer: Par5 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 01, 2006 06:28 am Title: Chapter 1

Poor Jim! You're making me feel his pain.

Reviewer: yippee Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: August 01, 2006 06:10 am Title: Chapter 1

so good in an incredibly heartbreaking way. i could really see all of this happening for them. can't wait to see how you write out the rest of this.

Reviewer: OldSchoolDool Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 01, 2006 05:53 am Title: Chapter 1

That was absolutely heartbreaking. Please, please, please continue

Reviewer: kaystar Signed [Report This]
Date: August 01, 2006 05:49 am Title: Chapter 1

I love, love love this story. I can picture Casino Night ending just as you described. Great job, can't wait to read more.

Reviewer: xoxoxo Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: August 01, 2006 05:19 am Title: Chapter 1

This is painfully good. Emphasis on the "painful". :(

Please write more so it can become painfully happy. :)

Author's Response: Wow, that was fast! :o) Thank you so much. Yeah, I'll write more - I'm finding that I'm utterly incapable of being short and to the point. Thanks for the feedback --

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