Date: June 06, 2007 04:09 pm Title: Come Away with Me
Aww... the 'day after' shyness/butterflies thing is adorable. Great observation!
Author's Response:
Thanks! There will be more to this story...so keep reading!
9 [Report This]Date: June 06, 2007 03:55 pm Title: Come Away with Me
Not sure how fast I was, but... yay!!!
So, even though butterflies in her stomach means exactly what it does, butterflies always makes me think of CSI... so, you get mad double props for a (probably) very unitentional mention of CSI in an Office Story.
This was totally odd, so, when Pam entered her apartment, I was just like, picturing the scene with a dog running up to her... really no idea where that came from, since no where in the show has it ever implied Pam has a dog, likes dogs, etc... it just flew into my head.
“Is tomorrow going to be completely awkward between us?”
So, this reminds me of The Secret, when they joke about what it is going to be like after Jim's secret was reveled. And so... maybe it was supposed to be less funny than that, but I pictured it as sort of a funny joking, but real kinda line.
Rain is just awesome when it is awesome rain... do you like rain? I think I had a conversation with REbecca about rain and how she doesn't like it, but I could be getting a Rebecca/Becka conversation confused. So I hope you love rain also, because yeah... because Rain is awesome!!! I mean, seriously, cuddling up in comfy pajamas, a warm comforter, and a teddy bear next to a rainy stormy window (but not so stormy it is like scary, just stormy enough to make you feel alive)... is so wonderful.
I love that Michael kicks Ryan out, and then says that Ryan did it! And Phyllis calls him on it!!! And Shut It... is it bad that shut it now comes out of my mouth. And TWSS... and I think I am saying Wow in a very Jim fashion?
Oooh, I can't wait for more... darn you!!
If any story had to push my weird Ghost!Baby story off the top place, I am totally glad it was this one (and not a bad story)
Author's Response:
Wow..such a long review and quick timing on the TWoP. Wow. YOu're good.
Yes, I LOVE rain. Can't you tell. There are a few of my stories where rain is present. I just love it.
I hope this chapter flies well. I'm a little nervous...but the ending is good. So, keep with it and telling people to read it! Thanks Jess.
Becka
Date: June 04, 2007 03:41 pm Title: The Nearness of You
totally a kiss. all that pent up sexual frustration and no kiss? gay!
Author's Response:
Haha. Thanks. I agree..gay. Haha.
Thanks for reading!
Date: June 01, 2007 06:09 pm Title: The Nearness of You
I know what I want; MORE MORE MORE!!! You really left us hanging there! This is a great chapter. I say keep going! Please!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review and input! I did leave it a little open ended. So, thanks for letting me know what you thought! Oh, and thanks for being consistent and faithful in your comments and reading! You're great!
Date: June 01, 2007 06:56 am Title: The Nearness of You
I think this story could survive as long as you want it to. IMO, leaving it there is kind of cruel =)! Maybe that's what you were going for, but I would love to see some "aftermath" - more chapters, whatever they might be!
Author's Response: Thanks for you input! Yeah, I agree...it's cruel. So, I'm working on a few more chapters...and if they live up to my expectations, then I'll post them. They're still a work in progress...so no garuntees. Welp, Thanks again. I apprecaite your input and review!
Date: May 31, 2007 08:02 pm Title: The Nearness of You
Wow Pam has soooo much more selfrestraint than i would have had....loved the chapter, definitely evoked the feeling of the song
I'd say continue, but only becuase I've loved the story so far, but if you wanted to end it there, it was a great way to end it
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I'm glad that you got the feeling of the song through this chapter too. I listened to that song and knew I had to incorporate it some way. It's too good to pass up. So, I'm still deciding on whether or not to continue, so keep looking for updates. Thanks agian for reading and reviewing all the chapters!
7 [Report This]Date: May 31, 2007 06:44 pm Title: One Word
So my vote is to continue to the kiss! You know they want to! Thanks for sharing this story
Author's Response: Thanks! Keep looking for updates...I'm not sure if I'm going to continue as of yet...so, just be patient. ha. I'll be posting soon if I am continuing. Thanks again.
Date: May 31, 2007 05:53 pm Title: One Word
Yay for Norah Jones!! You know that this chapter is pretty much amazing and I've already told you this ten fold but I love how you made a simple hug seem so gratifying and amazing!!
On the issue of continuing: I guess you could leave it here if you don't have any more inspiration or desire to continue. But if you do, I say onward! This isn't necessarily just a first date fic, right? I mean.... it is, but it can still show the aftermath and whatnot. Their first date isn't the end, it's just the beginning! Yay for Jam. Anyways, I love this, you know it, and I e-mailed you.... so check it! :)
Author's Response:
Yay for NORAH! I love her and she inspires me to write sappy stuff. Yay for her!
Okay, thanks for the beta and reviewing it. Oh, and recc'ing it over at TWoP! YEAh! So, I'll be chatting with you about continuing. I just sent you the beginning of the next chapter...so, let me know what you think...
Date: May 31, 2007 05:43 pm Title: The Nearness of You
Yeah, keep going. The story doesn't feel like it's finished.
Author's Response: Thanks! I appreciate the input. If I continue, I'll be posting within a few days. So, keep an eye out. Thanks again for reviewing!
Date: May 31, 2007 05:27 pm Title: The Nearness of You
I was just about to take a shower. I had this email for a bit, I kept seeing new email, new email, and I wanted to check, but my mom was hijacking my computer and it was torture, cause I didn't even know what the email was... and then I saw it was that, and I was like, all she was doing was deleting emails... she made me wait for THAT
"Just the essence of him made her heart flutter and feel light."
Just reading about that sentence makes my heart flutter and to me just having to stop for a moment to just 1)be insanely jealous 2)daydream
That is one wet hug.... I had a wet hug today... no where near romantic. I was babysitting, and Claire got dunked (she is three), in an effort to try to make her less scared of the water (normally she is okay with it, but today she was being a frady cat), and so I lifted her up outta the water, and comforted her. So, I was SOAKED...
Hum, I am torn. I, of course, will read anything more if you write it... but this story is about the first date, and that was kinda ended. And I also want more Scarlet Letter. But, I do want to read more about what your takes on the aftermath of The Job, not just the date... so, yeah, that didn't help at all.
Now I am going to take a shower... because The Office is on in 30 minutes.
Author's Response: Thanks for the input and the review! And, the rec over there at TWoP! wow. you're good. Thanks for reading! Talk to you soon.
Date: May 30, 2007 02:34 pm Title: Train Wreck
Yowza... babysitting for 8 hours and 20 minutes. 4 days a week and 12 more weeks. INSANE. Why did I sign up for this.... I may go crazy before the week is out :D...
So sorry I didn't get to this as fast today, but that craziness is well... crazy. Seriosly. 35 hours a week... 13 weeks of the summer. NO COMPUTER FOR THAT TIME? I must be crazy. Crazy I was crazy once, they locked me in a room with padded walls... I died in that room, they buried me in the ground. There are worms in the ground. Worms make me crazy. Crazy... you get the idea.
Dwight and Angela kissing... that makes me shiver and well, my face looks like i just ate something sour and disgusting. those crazy two.
Pranking Dwight... is it odd that I think that is just so sweet. I mean, pranks ARE what brought those two crazy kids together in the first place.
No... no... make them kiss. make them kiss in the rain. seriously, most romantic thing EVER is kissing in the rain. make them woman, make them!!! No woman! they need to kiss!!!
Fine, I guess I won't hate you forever (yeah, like that would even be possible), because even though I want them to go just make out in the rain, I guess it is a little much for a first date...
I am off to try to relax. Because seriously, exhausted mentally and physically, and i have no friggin idea how i am going to keep this up....
Author's Response:
Wow. What a long review. Okay, first off...poor you. I'm soo sorry.
Secondly, thanks for reviewing and reading. And, forgive me...there will be more to this story so don't fret. Just be prepared...the next part is one of my favorites...Thanks again!
Date: May 30, 2007 01:36 pm Title: Train Wreck
Aww, Fancy New Beesley would have kissed Jim. Or at least grabbed on to both hands, or something! Or "Oh, it's raining, do you want to sit in my car for a minute?"
My suggestion is there's some physical contact. It doesn't have to be smutty or anything, but there has to be something!
Author's Response: Yeah, she probably would have....but, not in this part of the story. So, hold on...more chapters on the way. Keep on reading and reviewing. I appreciate it!
Date: May 30, 2007 11:25 am Title: Train Wreck
Noooooooo Pam should have kissed him! Oh, the heartbreak! Who am I kidding, I LOVE heartbreak, that is why I read these things and watch The Office in the first place. I love the new prank on Dwight. Just please tell me Pam will follow Jim home and plant one on him?
Author's Response: Haha. I know, I should have made them kiss..but, seriously...its a very nervous first date. But, trust me, read next chapter when I get it up sometime this evening or tomorrow. It will explain.
Date: May 30, 2007 09:23 am Title: Train Wreck
Noooooo Jim! You should have kissed her! What are you doing? He's gonna chase after her, I know it!!!
Great story, BeckySue.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing. Your enthusiasm for this story makes me excited! I like when someone else is as excited as I am to find out the rest of this story. The next chapter will be up tonight or tomorrow...and let me just tell you, it's my favorite chapter by far.
Date: May 30, 2007 08:37 am Title: Train Wreck
Oh, my god, babe. This can NOT be the end of the date. PLEASE.
Author's Response: I'll be posting another chapter either this evening or tomorrow morning. Keep looking for updates. You won't be left with just that....there's more.
Date: May 30, 2007 08:20 am Title: Train Wreck
Loving this so far. Can we please have a drenched Jim (or Pam) showing up at the other's door for a heated make out session (or more) under the guise of not wanting the date to end? Pretty please?
Author's Response: Ha. You know, I've already written the next chapter and I'm really excited for that one to be posted (probably tomorrow morning or this evening). I'm not gonna give anything away...but, you might not be too disappointed with it. :) Keep reading and reviewing.
Date: May 30, 2007 07:55 am Title: It's Not Over
HA!
I knew they would get busted for being out in the park too late. The whole time I was thinking, "Don't those places close at dark?"
But on a serious note, I love their conversation as the date continues. It kind of makes me sad that we won't get to see any of this in canon.
Author's Response:
You're the only one to think that...I knew that the lake beach and parks closed around nine because I live in a lake town...but, most people didn't know that. Good catch.
Thanks for reading...I wish this could be canon too.
Date: May 30, 2007 06:21 am Title: Train Wreck
Reporting for reviewing duty! Just a little side note: where you changed Pam's blog to a "diary" the next sentence it still says journal. ;)
OMG you already know how I feel about this, but the next chapter is seriously..... wow. There are no words. Well I'm sure there are but I can't articulate right now. I'll be able to send it back to you tonight. But wowza! I love the choice you made here without the kiss and the whole Dwight/Jim interaction? Priceless!!
Author's Response: Thanks for telling me! Talk to you soon. Oh, and thanks for reading and reviewing...again and again!
Date: May 29, 2007 02:57 pm Title: One Word
Haha... well, I may not be as quick next time, since tomorrow I start working 8 hours a day (8 hours straight... no computer... dammit, why didn't i think this through)....
oh no!!!
Author's Response: Well, I'll try to get the next chapter up ASAP so you can be the first to read, review, and rec it over at TWoP again. Did I tell you how cool that was for you to have already recc'ed it by the time I got there? It was cool. THanks for the support!
Date: May 29, 2007 09:35 am Title: One Word
Great story! I am really enjoying it. I'm MORE THAN READY for the next chapter. har har har. My fanfic inspired humour is so lame.
Author's Response:
Thanks for being excited for the next chapter! I'm pumped too. It's gonna be a good one, too. So, keep reading and reviewing. I really do appreciate it! Thanks!
Date: May 29, 2007 07:02 am Title: One Word
I am enjoying this storyline. I like how you are able to capture Jim and Pam's "essence". Please keep writing!
Author's Response: Thanks for the compliment. Alot of people have said that I've captured them well in this story. I'm very honored to have you bring it back to my attention! Haha. Thanks!
Date: May 29, 2007 06:55 am Title: It's Not Over
Nice! I like the first date talk and how Jim and Pam wait until they're in the car and then burst out laughing. That's so real to life.
Author's Response: Ha. I liked that little touch to the story too. This happened to me this weekend. I ran into a friend and something happened where it caused me and my other friend to want to just run and hide in a hole. So, when we get to my car, I unlock it, hurry up and jump in, and even before i get the door shut, I snort so hard it makes the back of my throat hurt! We both just busted up as soon as we got in the car. Jim and Pam would be those people to do that too. I'm glad you liked it. hehe.
Date: May 29, 2007 06:53 am Title: It's Not Over
Ha I love that they were able to spend time togethter just by themselves and thier sandcastle convo was super cute. I wish Pam had just gone all FNB and grabbed his hand when they were walking, but still super cute....and I can just imagine their faces when the officer yelled his name.
Can't wait for more
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing. You're review has really brought the whole FNB thing to my attention. She probably should have but considering they are on new territory, she's probably just a littler nervous. Thanks agian for reading and reviewing.
Date: May 29, 2007 06:51 am Title: Two Words
Nice! I especially like the "in ten years" discussion, that Pam asked why he was here and not in NY, and the discussion with Karen that was really calm. (I hope we'll see it went calmly...)
Author's Response: Thanks for your kind thoughts on this story. It's so nice to see people point out particular parts that are there favorites... it makes me enjoy it so much more! Thanks again!
Date: May 29, 2007 06:42 am Title: It's Not Over
I really like this story, very sweet. Very much what I would expect between the two. More...
Author's Response: Thank you for your kind comment. I appreciate you reading and reviewing. I will be writing more tonight...so, keep a look out for an update this week!