Date: May 31, 2007 02:12 am Title: Chapter 7 - Supply Closet Love, by Single Tear
Nice move with the fish earring, Jim.
Date: May 31, 2007 02:09 am Title: Chapter 6 - An Invitation, by Post-it Thief
Whoa! You TEASE! In the last chapter Jim tossed her on the bed, and in this one she walks him to the door? Wah!
I love how you had Pam doing her "Still me, Michael" thing when she transfers Jan's call to Michael. I love it when she's his buffer zone.
Angela and Dwight in the supply closet? Oh, tell me you've written a story about that! :D
Is there some arcane thing going on with periods in this story? This chapter has no periods at the end of dialogue sentences. I think there's a clue here...
Author's Response: Yikes, no, I believe strongly in proper punctuation. Formatting fix on the way. Thanks for the head's up.
Date: May 31, 2007 02:04 am Title: Chapter 5 - Scarborough Fair, by Pan
You need to fix your formatting; the lack of a space after each period is distracting. Otherwise, this is fine work.
Toe to toe in Pam's kitchen! That is the sweetest, most Jam moment in this story. I loved it. And his "Booty music?" is funny.
Author's Response: Thank you for the head's up. The first several chapters were "migrated" from another site after we decided this was a better place for the story.
Date: May 30, 2007 02:24 pm Title: Chapter 10 - So Much Beauty, So Little Time, by Pan
Oh, just wonderful! And, um, Pam? Turtleneck tomorrow, babe.
I have the feeling that Jim and Pam would have a lot of good "oh's" when they get together.
Really nice 1st and 2nd date story!
Date: May 30, 2007 02:16 pm Title: Chapter 9 - Best Laid Plans, by Jake
Oh, this is just great! I started to laugh just before Pam did. What a wonderful comedy of errors, but all that matters is that they're together. Just... great.
Date: May 30, 2007 02:12 pm Title: Chapter 8 - The Conference Room, by Brian
Or I could make him my butler. - Because then he could have bacon in the morning.
Angela and Dwight approached at the same time, glanced at one another and, as they were about to enter, he turned abruptly toward the ficus tree and began inspecting its leaves as she went in and took a seat.
Smooth, Jim thought. How had he ever missed that relationship? - What a wonderful bit this is! It's so perfectly Dwight and Angela trying not to be obvious, and yeah, how did people not figure that out!
I love the Dundie, and the last line! Jim's bed would be much more comfy than the supply closet also.
Date: May 30, 2007 02:06 pm Title: Chapter 7 - Supply Closet Love, by Single Tear
Ha. The end of this had me laughing, too. I love Dwight knowing he'd be rewarded for finding the earring.
My one complaint is the tickling. Roy tickled Pam, so I would think it'd be the very last thing Jim would want to do. Plus it's kind of a power thing... I think Pam would be likely to squirm away and say "Don't! Roy used to do that and I hated it!" (Talk about your turn-offs.)
Question: How was Jim able to walk right out of that supply closet without at least holding his jacket in front of him? Inquiring minds want to know.
Author's Response:
Hey, thanks for the comment! Yeah, I thought about how Roy tickled Pam in Hot Girl but went with it anyway because 1) Pam was enjoying it 2) it established that she is ticklish and 3) I just don't see how Roy could've "ruined" tickling for her. I'm sure she doesn't enjoy the thought of having sex with Roy either, but that doesn't mean she can't enjoy it with Jim ;-)
And to answer your question: Nothing kills the mood faster than the sound of Dwight's voice. (Unless, of course, you're Angela)
Thanks again for the comment!
Date: May 30, 2007 02:00 pm Title: Chapter 6 - An Invitation, by Post-it Thief
Wonderful! I especially like Pam's addition to the note (although even the initial note is very cute) and Michael coming in looking all frazzled.
Date: May 30, 2007 01:55 pm Title: Chapter 5 - Scarborough Fair, by Pan
Wooo! Lovely. I love how Pam just goes for it and surprises Jim.
Date: May 30, 2007 01:52 pm Title: Chapter 4 - Life in a Shoebox, by Jake
There's no place like home, which they've found in each other. Nice.
Date: May 30, 2007 01:49 pm Title: Chapter 3 - Pam's Place, by Single Tear
Ha! It's all good, but the last line is wonderful.
Date: May 30, 2007 01:46 pm Title: Chapter 2 - The Ride, by Single Tear
It seems they're both thinking along the same lines at the moment, and trying to stop themselves! I love Pam's “Oh no, I’m not thinking." Ha!
Really nice job.
Date: May 30, 2007 01:43 pm Title: Chapter 1 - The Date, by Brian
Nice story! I love how they can talk about anything here. This is how I would hope it would be: "Despite having so much to hash out, neither tip-toed around anything, whether it was Roy and Karen or the thousand hopeful moments since he’d returned to Scranton that had ended with words unspoken and opportunities missed." Lovely! Thanks, Brian.
Date: May 30, 2007 09:37 am Title: Chapter 10 - So Much Beauty, So Little Time, by Pan
I am loving this story! You guys have nailed the sweetness and the humor and added just the right amount of spice....I'm also impressed at the continuity of your writing style, which is hard to achieve on a group effort like this.
Can't wait for more!
Date: May 30, 2007 09:09 am Title: Chapter 10 - So Much Beauty, So Little Time, by Pan
Wow. Smutalicious. Well done.
Date: May 30, 2007 08:32 am Title: Chapter 10 - So Much Beauty, So Little Time, by Pan
Holy.
God.
I love you, Northern Attack-ers!
All parts beautiful so far, but Pan, you did NOT let us down with this, and it's just an amazing way to be so good and yet - perfectly smutty.
You guys are just MAKING my summer.
Date: May 30, 2007 04:24 am Title: Chapter 9 - Best Laid Plans, by Jake
Hibbity dibbity, here we COME!!! Great chapter!
Date: May 29, 2007 10:28 pm Title: Chapter 1 - The Date, by Brian
We rock, basically. Great work guys!
10 [Report This]Date: May 29, 2007 09:09 pm Title: Chapter 1 - The Date, by Brian
Keep up the good work, guys!
Date: May 29, 2007 08:30 pm Title: Chapter 1 - The Date, by Brian
Great Job, Northern Attackers! Way to represent!
Date: May 29, 2007 08:02 pm Title: Chapter 1 - The Date, by Brian
Umm... why, why does this story only have three reviews???
I LOVE IT!!!
It's great that the date didn't work out as planned, and it flows very very well, really well for a round robin! Update soon!
9 [Report This]Date: May 29, 2007 07:57 pm Title: Chapter 9 - Best Laid Plans, by Jake
I really like this. I'm also loving the quick updates! I'm also liking where this story is going.
Also - I get the feeling that someone is messing with Jim - flat tire, cancelled reservation...hmmm....
More please!
Date: May 29, 2007 05:53 pm Title: Chapter 8 - The Conference Room, by Brian
Hello? Where are the NA'ers singing this stories praises? This story rocks my socks. I promise to contribute to it, someday. But so far, so great. Keep it up. NorthernAttack represent!!!
(I feel the need to clarify that I'm not gay, after that post.)
Date: May 29, 2007 11:39 am Title: Chapter 8 - The Conference Room, by Brian
"This will be a quickie. That's what she said...And then she moved in and ruined my life." That is a GREAT Michael line. Love it. This fic is pretty fun, I have to say...and the fact that you posted a whole bunch of chapters at once? You get a cookie for that. Thank you :)