Date: June 30, 2007 03:11 am Title: I've had enough of this parade
I never liked Roy in the series. I totally believe that he would do something like this and that if Karen hadn't gotten her claws into Jim she'd have done the same thing too. I really want to see how you get to the Negotiation. What would send Roy after Jim here? Is he just dating Karen to get Pam back and something happens with Jam that makes that impossible? I can't wait.
Date: June 30, 2007 01:38 am Title: ...I Know You Will Be There With Me
Lame. Why couldn't Roy just be the normal guy he is. He was never anything horrible on the show. He was just the wrong guy for Pam and maybe an idiot. But you're making him out to be a complete asshole and it's kind of unbelieveable. You're just using this caricature of Roy to prop up Jim/Pam.
Author's Response: Umm... F-A-N-F-I-C... key word FICTION. Doesn't have to be realistic. It's called making things more dramatic for effect. Get over it.
10 [Report This]Date: June 29, 2007 09:25 pm Title: ...I Know You Will Be There With Me
Is it totally mean that I'm kind of hoping that Roy treats Karen totally the same way he treated Pam?
The ending could not be sweeter though. I like this!
Author's Response: No, it's not mean at all. It's karma.... for something she did in the "real" universe when this is AU. But still... she had the hots for Jim and that's just what she gets. so there. (yeah, I don't like Karen. Never did. Even before she got with Jim, I didn't like her at all. No offense, Rashida--I just didn't like her). :) Hopefully there will be more soon. Thanks for the comments!
9 [Report This]Date: June 27, 2007 11:31 am Title: Broken up it's only love
This is hysterical and angsty....a nice balance of the two!
Date: June 26, 2007 10:26 pm Title: And When I Need You...
Roy and Karen, excellent. I'm sure you'll find a good direction to take this one. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Date: June 26, 2007 09:16 pm Title: ... I Know It Will Be Next To Me
There's nothing wrong with fanfic fluff. If you want reality, open a window. I like the Jim/Pam banter, and I think it was a good choice to focus on them, not the chaos of the merger.
Date: June 25, 2007 10:05 pm Title: And when I see you, then I know
I always thought was incredibly sexy for a man to ask to kiss me first. Makes me tingle.
Date: June 25, 2007 10:00 pm Title: Broken up it's only love
I am really enjoying this. lt is filling in a lot of blanks.
10 [Report This]Date: June 24, 2007 08:51 pm Title: I've had enough of this parade
Wow this story has been a sleeper hit! I've been gone for the weekend and I come back and there are like twice as many reviews!
Yay!!! They're moving in together!!! I'm so excited!! It's so cute and you do a really great job of showing how excited they are and a little nervous (but not enough to make them hesitate) about moving in together. I like how Pam said it and Jim DIDNT say "are you sure?" But jumped right into "let's get a house!" Very sweet.
9 [Report This]Date: June 24, 2007 03:55 pm Title: We set apart
I'm really enjoying this! Very entertaining...especially the twist with The Merger where Jim is actually excited to go back to Scranton.
Also, I'm with Ozana. Send Karen packing!!
Date: June 24, 2007 03:41 pm Title: We set apart
I really like this. I know I said that before, but it is so very good. But, could we just skip the drama and send Karen to NYC? Puhleeze?
Author's Response: Yeah, I have a plan for that... I just need the time to write it out. ;-) Don't worry. Not too much drama with Karen. If anything, it's comical. You'll love it... (I hope!)
Date: June 24, 2007 11:40 am Title: We set apart
I am really interested in how the whole merger would go down with Pam & Jim together -- that's a really intriguing story.
I am starting to notice more typos in subsequent chapters, though. I'd recommend using spellcheck and a beta reader -- you can request one on the message boards here: http://mtt.just-once.net/mb/index.php?topic=6.0
Your writing shows a lot of promise, keep up the good work -- you are certainly entertaining us through the hiatus ;o)
Date: June 24, 2007 11:11 am Title: Another day...
I cannot wait to see when Pam & Jim realize they both know about Dwight & Angela!!! Hee!
Date: June 24, 2007 10:34 am Title: Lean on me, now
Wow, I know how Pam feels -- only we have to wait until freaking SEPTEMBER, she gets to see Jim again in only a week! Thanks for helping pass the time, receptionist!
Date: June 24, 2007 09:52 am Title: You will be there with me
Aww, coupley Pam & Jim are adorable. I hope we get to sse something like this next season!
8 [Report This]Date: June 23, 2007 06:52 pm Title: Broken up it's only love
"I don't think I can ever not be in love with you." Another beautiful line - this story is just full of them! Loved this chapter.
8 [Report This]Date: June 23, 2007 06:48 pm Title: We open up unfinished parts
"Although," he added bravely. "I think I liked the view at my desk in Scranton better."
"Pam was silent for a moment, hoping he couldn't hear her blush."
Two great lines - I really enjoyed this chapter, seeing (reading?) Pam getting her courage up to tell Jim.
Date: June 23, 2007 04:42 pm Title: ...Another year
Loved that you used a Fiddler on the Roof reference! Ha...by far, the best musical of all time and I can see Michael watching it and loving it too. Ha. Great job!
Date: June 23, 2007 10:09 am Title: Another day...
typo patrol: lingire (lingerie), Afterall (no matter how we say it, still 2 words), awkeard, professinal, Absoultely
I forgot to say last chapter, that I liked Karen's reaction to the fact Jim was seeing someone. (Mmmm.. suck-ah! (/Andy))
Good chapter! I loved Jim's initial (we'll be together in 30 years) email, although what he actually wrote was "safer". I thought you had Jan down pat (at least, before her big personality change on the show).
I really liked the emails most of all, and was happy that (unlike on the actual show) Jim had someone to tell that "Dwight got a hooker!"
Nice story, receptionist!
Date: June 23, 2007 09:45 am Title: Keep waking up without you here
typo patrol: sullent
Wow, what a GREAT chapter! I love everyone's reaction. Dwight's little piece is vintage Dwight. Just an awesome chapter!
Date: June 23, 2007 09:36 am Title: Lean on me, now
typo patrol: stopepd, jim
Nice chapter. I have the feeling, though, that they wouldn't have stopped with making out, kissing, cuddling, and napping. The genie was already out of the bottle (so to speak), and they won't see each other for a week. There would have been some "love in the afternoon"!
At first, when Jim put his bag next to the door at noon, I thought "Why would he leave at noon? Noooo." Then I saw he was just organized and getting it ready. I definitely think he would stay as long as he could, so I was glad he did!
Author's Response: Yeah, I thought about the "love in the aftrnoon," too, but... I thought, "ya know? Jim and Pam are different. They would have fun just hanging out. Even making out would still be a big thing for them. And this is still new, so even though they've already crossed that line, they would still be exhilarated to kiss and cuddle." But don't worry... there will be more when Pam sees him this next weekend. **wink**
Date: June 23, 2007 09:18 am Title: Just need to get closer, closer
typo patrol: Boonie and Clyde (Bonnie), actaully, frist, remebered
Aw, that was nice! I think Pam will have some gooood memories for the week. Plus, it's still only Saturday, right? I'm enjoying this.
Date: June 23, 2007 08:16 am Title: I'll never leave you
typo patrol: thoguht
Oh, nice chapter! Short, but verrry sweet!
I'll review the rest later - shower break! I'm enjoying your take on this!
Author's Response: Kev, I am just laughing my socks off here... thanks for all the typo-catching! Most of these I write at night, and then I just want to get them up, so I save the editing for later. But you telling me what to look for makes it so much easier! Thanks for all your comments! :)
Date: June 23, 2007 08:13 am Title: You will be there with me
Typo patrol: less that excited, jim's (capitalize), wtih, saem
Nice little bit about Roy seeing Pam's feelings for Jim more than Pam did!
Very nice chapter - I liked the little interchange with Mark at the end (so cute), and the wonderful/amazing. I'm sure Pam will come up with more adjectives as well.