Date: June 23, 2007 08:07 am Title: And when I need you, then I know
typo patrol: ddin't, teh, embraed, ahd, I;m
"so that she melted beneath his strong, long arms" - um, what? I seem to have drifted into dreamland for a moment.
I laughed at Jim's "jealous girlfriend" comment to Mark!
What a nice chapter! And there was only the teensiest bit of angst, and then it didn't end on an angsty note. That's the kind of angst I can handle!
Date: June 23, 2007 07:58 am Title: I know it will be next to me
Aww...good job! But, what? No typos? (Except in the end notes 'adn'.)
I never realized where Blue Jean Baby's name came from - now I know.
You know what? All of us who write fanfic want the reviews! Without exception, we all want someone to acknowledge the work!
Good job!
Date: June 23, 2007 07:52 am Title: And when I see you, then I know
typo patrol: givign
So nice that Jim was there! And it would be easy to do a long distance relationship from Scranton to Stamford, wouldn't it? (Worth it to date Jim!) Leave work on Friday, drive 2 1/2 hours, drive back Sunday night. Repeat weekly and alternate drivers! They could go on like that for a while, and then get engaged. Not that I've...thought about that at all.
Good chapter! I liked Pam recounting the events of her crazy day!
Date: June 23, 2007 07:44 am Title: Broken up it's only love
typo patrol: gormet should be gourmet;
I think it's so cute when Jim calls Pam "Bees" in fanfic. We haven't seen it on the show (yet!), but it seems very much like something that could happen. So adorable!
I love their discussion! You're nailing these discussions! I love how Pam is clear that she needs time, but she's also clear that she wants to be MTT. So nice!!
Great Future Dwight prank. I love when people come up with new pranks in fanfic. I couldn't, for the life of me, come up with a prank.
Good job!
Date: June 23, 2007 07:37 am Title: We open up unfinished parts
Little typos: actaully, depsondantly, acapella (should be 2 words), falcetto (s instead of c)
I love this whole conversation. You fit in the Beach Day speech beautifully! I also like how she switches to small(er) talk after her confession! Jim needs time to process this!
And, hooray, he'll call tonight!
Nice description of Andy, and I liked how you slipped Call of Duty in at the beginning.
Date: June 23, 2007 07:30 am Title: I'm thinking of the words to say
There are a few little typos (I don't know if you like typos pointed out or not - some do, some don't...) shaked should be shook, and 'Pam saw the immediate change in expression in Roy's changed.'
I really like how Pam and Roy's discussion went. Pam was so calm, and she knew what she had to do. Your description of Pam moving into the apartment and taking some time to think about what to do about Jim was so nice!
I love that Pam called Jim at his work number to make sure he'd answer. I'll bet her heart was pounding in addition to it being hard to breathe!
And, hurray, I waited so long to start this story, that I have a lot of chapters ahead of me! No waiting!
Date: June 23, 2007 07:23 am Title: I've had enough of this parade
I liked Pam starting and erasing the email, and your description of Pam feelings here.
8 [Report This]Date: June 22, 2007 07:58 pm Title: I'm thinking of the words to say
Now this is how it should have gone on the show. Look at all the angst it would have saved. Really enjoying this!
Date: June 22, 2007 02:53 pm Title: Keep waking up without you here
I am really enjoying this story! More please!
10 [Report This]Date: June 22, 2007 12:44 pm Title: Keep waking up without you here
Hi! I've been reading this all along and have been lovin' it! This is how it shoulda happened darn it!!! How can two people be so comfortable and so nervous around each other at the same time... I'll never know. Keep 'em coming :)
10 [Report This]Date: June 22, 2007 07:16 am Title: Keep waking up without you here
love it.
Date: June 22, 2007 05:53 am Title: Keep waking up without you here
i like it. i love the little emails. update soon.
Date: June 21, 2007 11:33 pm Title: We open up unfinished parts
God I wish she would have told him sooner than later...maybe that hoebag karen wouldn't have been in the picture (I guess I have to keep reading to find out)
Date: June 21, 2007 11:25 pm Title: I've had enough of this parade
Wow I loved this. I'm new to your story so I'm going to read it all right now:) I really like her internal monologue. After watching Casino Night tonight this fic is just so lovely and painful(in a good way) to read....I'm off to read more
Date: June 21, 2007 11:34 am Title: You will be there with me
i like this fic a lot. excited to see how jim treats pam durring the game.
Date: June 21, 2007 08:18 am Title: You will be there with me
I waited till I read all of this to comment. I love it. Keep it coming.
Date: June 01, 2007 06:25 am Title: I know it will be next to me
This story was really sweet. The karaoke at the end was hilarious, and I loved how you worked her exact words from the beach into her phone call with Jim.
I'd love to read more in this AU if you're inclined to write it!
Great job. Keep writing! You're giving me something to look forward to while we're missing new eps over the summer!
Author's Response: Thanks for the comments! I am inclined to write it, but time and ideas are two things I'm rather short on, so we'll see... ;) Thanks again! I will definitely keep writing... :)
Date: May 31, 2007 07:26 pm Title: We open up unfinished parts
hmmmm i want to know wherethis is going!!! keep it comin
Date: May 31, 2007 07:04 pm Title: I'm thinking of the words to say
It's good that you're a comment whore, because I'm a little bit of a whore for this story. Can't wait. :-)