Date: January 21, 2008 12:09 am Title: Chapter 2 - Fun Run
I'm really enjoying this! LOL the stripper knew Ben Franklin? That's hilarious.
Date: January 11, 2008 05:59 am Title: Chapter 2 - Fun Run
I really liked how you worked Kevin's super stealthy spy moves into this. He was one of my favorite parts of Fun Run.
10 [Report This]Date: January 09, 2008 09:32 pm Title: Chapter 2 - Fun Run
This is really making me smile-- the whole way through. It's cool to imagine some of these little scenes actually happening. Great job with the characterization as well! I hope you continue :)
7 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2008 08:22 pm Title: Chapter 2 - Fun Run
I enjoyed the backstory about Kevin being a diversion. I thought Pam giving Jim the finger was a little OOC for her, but that's just me.
Date: December 02, 2007 07:42 am Title: Chapter 2 - Fun Run
I LOVED THIS!! Great take on how everything unfolded from their private perspective...can't wait to read more!!
Date: December 01, 2007 02:10 pm Title: Chapter 2 - Fun Run
Aww cute!!!!! I love this story
Author's Response:
I was going for cute, hoping to cut things off just this side of precious. Thanks so much for reviewing!
Date: December 01, 2007 01:33 pm Title: Chapter 2 - Fun Run
Very nice! There's one little typo here: "he had blown in big time", and naturally Ben Franklin's name wasn't Skip, it was... Gordon (all right, I had to look it up, but I knew he said it! He looks more like a Gordon than a Skip or a Ben, really.)
It's nice to see all of this. It's like seeing more of the episode that we didn't get to see, and adding in some Jim and Pam stuff before and after work!
I love how Kevin was just a diversion, and the little snippets of the other characters besides Jim and Pam. This is just a lot of fun - thanks for writing it!
Author's Response: Hey. Thanks for the corrections. I have to admit I still have trouble watching Season 3 with the whole Jim and Pam separation thing. To me, Ben Franklin was kind of a low point. But I really appreciate you letting me know and I have made the changes you pointed out. Thanks for reviewing!
Date: December 01, 2007 01:05 pm Title: Chapter 2 - Fun Run
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this is just adorable ! why can't there be guys like Jim out there in the world ?! (:
Author's Response: I'm glad that you liked this bit. Sorry you can't find your Jim. If it's any consolation, I'm still looking for a girl like Pam.