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Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: January 10, 2008 01:24 pm Title: A Boat on the River Seine

Very nicely done

Author's Response: Thanks gotkona. Appreciate it.

Reviewer: Becky215 Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: January 10, 2008 01:10 pm Title: A Boat on the River Seine

I'm loving this, Colette!! My mom likes to tell stories from when she was pregnant, and a favorite tale on the list includes the times she'd take a nap but wake up to catch my foot or elbow pressing against her belly. I almost tried to write that same image in one of my stories, but I couldn't pull it off. You've captured it brilliantly in this story, and as usual, I can't wait for more! --CH

Author's Response: Pleased this sounded realistic...everyone's experience is a bit different, but I think there are some universals - like how weird it is to feel this whole other person, poking you from the inside ;-) Anyway, glad you enjoyed, but that's all she wrote ;-) The next  chapter would have to be actual baby fic and I bow to the experts there. Thanks much for reading and reviewing, Becky.

Reviewer: katiej Signed [Report This]
Date: January 10, 2008 01:05 pm Title: A Boat on the River Seine

I was sad to see this end. It was good.


Author's Response: Thank you, katiej. Glad you liked it.

Reviewer: NeverEnoughJam Signed [Report This]
Date: January 08, 2008 09:31 pm Title: Sweet Things, Salty Things

‘Is it going to be an homage to that night we spent at Dwight’s place?’ Jim asked...

 

‘Maybe,’ she retorted. ‘But with less Mose.’

 

LOL! Wonderful! 

 

‘Oh, I’m sorry…can I help you?’

 

Ooo! Bad Jim. In a good way... 

 

I anxiously await the next installment! 



Author's Response: Who doesn't like Bad!Jim? Pleased you're still enjoying...next (final) installment is almost soup - maybe later today. Thanks, as always!

Reviewer: NeverEnoughJam Signed [Report This]
Date: January 08, 2008 09:25 pm Title: Alien Solar System

when his lips closed innocently around her nipple.

Innocently? Really? :D 

lightening rod

Because I love you, I will point out that I think you meant "lightning". 

Pammy Mammy

I can totally see Michael saying this. And Cranky!Pam clobbering him with the fax machine. 



Author's Response: Well, innocently as in not being rough/intending to inflict pain. Otherwise...hell, no. And glad to hear that sounded Michael-ish to you. But, I have to say, I worry a bit when his dialogue comes easily to me, lol. Many thanks again, NEJ! (And thanks for the spelling catch too - must fix that. A major TWSS just occurred to me along those lines - but, I'll spare you.)

Reviewer: NeverEnoughJam Signed [Report This]
Date: January 08, 2008 09:20 pm Title: Anything

He felt like an island beneath her, the current breaking all around them.

Love that line. How DO you so consistently come up with these marvellous images?



Author's Response: Well, I'm glad you think so, NEJ...now if only I could use that power for good ;-) Thanks!

Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: January 08, 2008 06:27 am Title: Sweet Things, Salty Things

You have the pregnancy emotions down perfect, along with the hormones. ;)

Author's Response: Thanks, gotkona. Glad you think this is accurate...with a side of Jim ;-)

Reviewer: xoxoxo Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: January 07, 2008 01:18 pm Title: Sweet Things, Salty Things

Did I tell you I loved this?   I did?  Well I'm telling you again.

Thanks for this lovely glimpse of hot and bothered pregnant Pam.   And Jim as her own virtual Disney World.

:)



Author's Response: Could you please stop repeating yourself? (Not.) Glad to keep you entertained...maybe next time, I'll have him dress in a mouse suit...or, maybe not. The glasses, however, are apparently a keeper. Thanks for all the encouragement, as always xoxoxo!

Reviewer: bitterpill Signed [Report This]
Date: January 07, 2008 09:52 am Title: Sweet Things, Salty Things

Jim wasn't the only one rewarded in this chapter!  Just perfect and hot and sweet and hot.....and, did I mention hot?  A romp with Jim would appear to be the best cure for insomnia:)  I'm sure medical journals would back you up on this.  Really great chapter.

Author's Response: Well, I'd personally volunteer to be a guinea pig, if the New England Journal of Medicine wants to do that study. Sweet and hot (wait, did you say hot?) is wonderful praise, especially from someone who knows a thing or two about writing  that herself...thanks much, bitterpill!

Reviewer: NanReg Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: January 07, 2008 06:36 am Title: Sweet Things, Salty Things

Whew!  I'm (nearly) speechless.  Funny and sexy, an unbeatable combination.

Author's Response: Glad I hit the right combo for you (did I mention it comes with a choice of soup or egg roll?)  And happy to hear you're still enjoying, NanReg - thanks much!

Reviewer: LoveFool Signed [Report This]
Date: January 06, 2008 10:24 pm Title: Sweet Things, Salty Things

Oh that is excellent....it looked like Paris -- I'll BET it did. I bet it freaking looked like HEAVEN for God's sake. lol. This was such a fun read.  Thank goodness Jim finally got to reap some pregnancy benefits. My favorite line was "the jig was up." I about died at that for some reason. Good stuff!


Author's Response: 'Pregnancy Benefits' - ha! That would have been a great chapter title.  I have to admit, I liked the 'jig is up' line myself...and not just cause of the shameful double entendre. I'm always tickled to hear you're enjoying - thanks so much LoveFool!

Reviewer: secondrink Signed [Report This]
Date: January 06, 2008 08:38 pm Title: Sweet Things, Salty Things

Um, Jim in reading glasses?  I'm kind of intrigued, in an I-love-nerds way.  Sadly, all I can imagine is Dwim :(  Good chapter none-the-less! (Apparently, I also love hyphens)

Author's Response: I cannot lie-  love me a nerd. I even thought Dwim was adorable. Glad the chapter still worked for you, secondrink and many thanks!

Reviewer: Annabel Winslow Signed [Report This]
Date: January 06, 2008 08:33 pm Title: Sweet Things, Salty Things

Oh Lordy... Coincidentally, am in middle of my second trimester as you are writing this.  Boy howdy, do you have this right, with the sweet and the salty and the other cravings.  And boys wearing glasses is the living end of sexy, pregnant or not.  This story is so steamy and fun... I love how Pam's yearning for a place she's never been seems to be resolving into realization that the present is a new country, too.  So lovely, as always, Colette!

Author's Response: What a lovely way to put it - kind of a whole new territory, that she's just getting comfortable inhabiting. In another story (Ordinary Life), I had Jim thinking of Pam as a place, so kind of a similar idea. Pleased to hear you felt the heat and share the boys in glasses lurve. Thanks so much Annabel! And how great that you have a bambino(a) on the way - congratulations!

Reviewer: Beeswax Signed [Report This]
Date: January 06, 2008 04:46 pm Title: Sweet Things, Salty Things

Wowsa!  Those second trimester hormones can be interesting.

Great chapter, Colette!



Author's Response: Glad you thought so, Beeswax! It was fun to write. Thanks so much for following this!

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: January 06, 2008 04:28 pm Title: Sweet Things, Salty Things

Sassy lassie, Miss Pam!  And you know there is something wrong with the girl if she couldn't get excited looking at Mr. Lanky Pants.  So glad she's back.

'The jig' wasn't all that was up. Heh. I can just imagine grown-up looking Jim with his glasses trying to be all intellectual and stuff -- in his boxer-briefs?  Yeah, right!  Like those are going to stay on for long.  Sorry, I'm writing my own smut here.

Just want to attest to the power of increased prenatal blood flow and how good the sleep is afterward for a woman who can't get comfortable and isn't supposed to sleep on her back.  Or her stomach.  Or take a sleeping pill.  Oy. 



Author's Response: Seriously, wouldn't pregnancy be a lot more bearable with Mr. Lanky Pants at your beck and call? Was wondering if anyone would note the 'jig is up' double entendre...clearly, I forgot who I was dealing with, lol. Thanks for all the cheerleading, Lisa -you are an enabler par excellence!

Reviewer: Sweetpea Signed [Report This]
Date: January 06, 2008 03:41 pm Title: Sweet Things, Salty Things

Lord have mercy, what can you do to torture me next, Colette?  You did the towel and the shaving thing.  The boxer briefs (thank you).  Now you give me bare feet - what is it about bare feet and a ratty old tee shirt?  Stubble?  Check.  But then you had to go and pull out the big guns.  READING F. GLASSES.  Stick a fork in me, I'm done. 

But wait!  There's more!

'This is almost too easy,’ he sighed, coming up for air, his chin resting on her newly rounded belly while she recovered.

Wow.  Ahem.  Thank you.  But you weren't satisfied (and smiling) with that, were you, you vixen?

‘Oh, I’m sorry…can I help you?’ he asked, as if just noticing what she was doing. ‘Lose something down there?’  

Mm, that’s okay,’ she grinned back at him, never stilling her hand. ‘I think I already found it… kind of hard to miss.’

‘Nice,’ he actually blushed. ‘It’s just that attitude that got us into this mess in the first place.’

Sweet, salty, funny, and so, so sexy, Colette.  YAY for hormones and YAY for a new chapter!!

 



Author's Response: Wow, those reading glasses seem to be the ticket. (While I don't imagine them looking like Brevin's, can I admit that even that image kind of does it for me? And no, I don't just mean the shower one.) YAY back at you, for being so encouraging - and indulging my utterly shameful attitude about that lad. And, you're correct - I'm not satisfied, cause I'm in the middle of one more chapter. Thanks a bunch, Sweetpea - tickled that you're liking this!

Reviewer: thirtypercent Signed [Report This]
Date: January 06, 2008 03:33 pm Title: Sweet Things, Salty Things

Hee.  I grinned like a maniac through most of this.  Especially at this line:

‘Lose something down there?’

Hee, hee.  Sorry, I don't seem to have much in the way of actual words at the moment. Oh wait, but also this line:

She pressed her lips to the warm spot where his hair brushed his collar, lingering there for a second so she could feel his pulse beating beneath his skin.  

So warm and sweet and intimate. 

I'm curious how the never-been-to-Paris storyline will play out, but I also know that even if it's difficult, they'll be able to get through it together.  What's that?  These aren't real people?  Psh.  But I'm pretty sure we have similarish views on the strength of their relationship, so, yeah, I hope so at least.... ;)



Author's Response: They're not real?!? Wait a minute...anyway, glad to hear I've turned you into a maniac (needed the company ;-) And warm, sweet and intimate are music to my ears. Thanks for that, thirtypercent - hope the next (final?) chapter won't disappoint.

Reviewer: time4moxie Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: January 06, 2008 03:02 pm Title: Sweet Things, Salty Things

I wish either of my pregnancies had been a quarter that exciting.  ;-)  and I could totally picture a farm scene mural with Mose sketching in somewhere, ala Where's Waldo..

Very nice, with your usual spin of vivid imagery.  Even mundane things get good treatment with you.  



Author's Response: Ha - I like the Mose=Waldo motif. And thanks a lot, Mox...what can I say? I'm a mundane kind of girl ;-)

Reviewer: EverybodyHurts Signed [Report This]
Date: January 06, 2008 02:52 pm Title: Sweet Things, Salty Things

Just wanted to add that "And God, he looked good," should become our default comment for new pics in the Treehouse thread. :)



Author's Response: Fine by me...but we can't cut a deal on that until the writers' strike is settled ;-) Seriously, it's all about degrees of good, isn't it? Is it me, or does that lad never look truly bad?

Reviewer: EverybodyHurts Signed [Report This]
Date: January 06, 2008 02:42 pm Title: Sweet Things, Salty Things

You are really just trying to kill us, aren't you colette?  Lying on the bed, reading a book, tanned, in the infamous boxer briefs with reading glasses!  Really?  Reading glasses?  *EH dies imagining it*

Love horny, hormonal Pam.  And we've seen that intense "I wish you would" gaze before from her, hmm?

Wonderful chapter.  Yay for feeling better!



Author's Response: You are so on to me, EH...it's all a diabolical plan: death by reading glasses. In fact, I'm writing you this from beyond the grave ;-) And, yes indeed...I think Pam 'wishes he'd do' a lot of things at this point (and lucky her, I bet he will.) So glad you're enjoying - and much thanks for the kind words!

Reviewer: Sweetpea Signed [Report This]
Date: January 06, 2008 06:53 am Title: Alien Solar System

if he could get his hands on it, he’d rub it.

This made me laugh out loud, colette.  Perfect way to describe his desperate attempts to do whatever it takes.  And I really, really love annoyed, irritated crankypants Pam!  You hit just the right note with her in this chapter and the swing from annoyance to dismay at her own words and actions to being struck by how much she loves him.  Not that I've ever been on THAT mood swing, ahem, but it sure sounds right to me.  :)  And if it's wrong that I'm waiting not so patiently for the juicy stuff then I just don't wanna be right. 

 



Author's Response: Hee! Glad you liked that line (I kind of laughed at it too.) Also that this rung true for you - those early weeks can be a bit schizzy re: moods. (I, of course, was a total joy throughout. Not.) But, I'm almost done with the next chapter and Pam is in a much better mood. Yup. Let's put it that way. So, hopefully, your patience will be rewarded. Plus, after waking up to your lovely Allentown finale, I feel like I owe you one. Thanks, Sweetpea - will try not to keep you waiting ;-)

Reviewer: MoraDae Signed [Report This]
Date: January 04, 2008 06:13 pm Title: Alien Solar System

Having four children myself I can totally relate to this story and am really enjoying it. If you have never been pregnant you are doing an uncanny job of writing about it (I don't know your background). :o)

The only thing that bothers me a little (and of course this is only a matter of opinion) is the impression left by the Paris comments, that once you've had kids your life is over and you can't do something like that anymore. Of course having kids can put it on hold, a short time for some or a long time for others. My mom had me when she was 20 (28 years ago) and 2 other kids after me and since she hit her 40s has been to Europe (including Paris) twice, Mexico several times, Israel, Egypt, and Central America. She waited until her kids were grown but it still happened for her. But she probably thought at 20 that it would never happen, so I of course understand why Pam may be thinking that. Sorry if this makes so sense. It's just kind of what I thought of when I read this.

Looking forward to more, I always enjoy your writing.

Author's Response:

First, glad you're enjoying this, MoraDae. 

And yes, I have kids - teenagers. I also totally agree - life doesn't end with kids, including traveling. In fact, I've traveled pretty extensively with mine over the years and I grew up going to Europe with my own parents from the time I was quite young. So absolutely - even if you wait until they're grown, like your mom did - children don't necessarily preclude any of that.

I think here though, for Pam, Paris isn't just a literal place she'd like to visit (though she does want that too) It's sort of symbolic of all the things she wants in life (e.g., to finish school, be an artist, hell - drive a convertible, lol) that she fears she'll have to give up. Especially since it's only been the last couple of years (when the fic takes place) that she's begun to figure out what those things even are, or that she'd entitled to want things for herself like that at all. She doesn't yet see how she can balance that 'self' and motherhood. 

Plus - and this is huge, I think - she's seeing through the filter of 1st trimester hormones at this point in the fic, and that can be pretty intense. Anxiety, sheer exhaustion, morning sickness - it all amplifies her fears/doubts.

But don't feel too bad for her - she also has Jim, lol. No, seriously, most women I know (myself included) felt alot better during the 2nd trimester, so not to worry - Pam will pick up. Plus, do you think Jim would let her give up on everything she wants? Hell, no! So, hang in there - and don't be too sure she'd not getting to actual Paris, either.;-)

Thanks again and stay tuned! 

Reviewer: I_Still_Believe Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: January 03, 2008 09:21 pm Title: Alien Solar System

Just read both chapters and they're wonderful! This story is off to a great start and I can't wait to see where you go with it! I hope Pam makes it to Paris one day!

Author's Response: So pleased you're enjoying, I_Still_Believe! And don't worry, I can say - from personal experience - that Paris is easy as pie (as tart aux fraises?) with a baby in tow. Or, better yet - that's why Thor made grandparents ;-) Thanks so much!

Reviewer: bitterpill Signed [Report This]
Date: January 03, 2008 04:34 pm Title: Alien Solar System

Poor Pam!  Poor Jim!  Lucky me for having this story to enjoy!  I'd be lying if I said I wasn't ready for the next chapter LIKE NOW, but this really is a wonderful read and you have their voices just right.  Great Michael voice, too.



Author's Response: Not to worry, bitterpill...2nd trimester is going to be a piece of cake after this. It's in the oven, should be ready soon (gotta go ice the smutcake now ;-) Thanks much - always relieved to hear when the voices sound right!

Reviewer: NanReg Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: January 03, 2008 07:17 am Title: Alien Solar System

I'm grinning, Colette.  Thanks for the chuckles and another great chapter.



Author's Response: Glad you're enjoying, NanReg. And thanks for being such a dedicated reviewer too! Much appreciated ;-)

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