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Reviewer: ExtremelyGruntled Signed [Report This]
Date: March 24, 2008 05:31 am Title: Silence

Yay for an update!  I really love this story.

BTW, I hope it's okay to point this out, but you have a little continuity error - Pam already told Jim about Karen confronting her in Chapter 3.  I know this because I've read this story a LOT.  ;)



Author's Response: I recognized that as well and tried to make it seem clear that this wasn't completely new to Jim - but I'll go back and see if I can make it better.  Thanks for the input - I really do appreciate it!  (and thanks for reading it so much!!!!!!)  

Reviewer: support_the_rabid Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: March 23, 2008 09:18 pm Title: Fugue

Whew! That was tense! I thought Karen might hurt someone.

I like the reveal that Jim told Pam he was dating someone just to see what her reaction would be. That's an interesting take on the situation at that time.

Great job!

Reviewer: EverybodyHurts Signed [Report This]
Date: March 23, 2008 08:20 pm Title: Fugue

Wow, Mox, of all the times Jim and Pam have had "talks" in fic, I don't ever think Karen has been right there to add her view of things.  Great job!  Ok, now she's gone.  Time for the fun to begin.

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: March 23, 2008 08:12 pm Title: Fugue

AWK-WARD!!  Whoa, that is one screwed up triangle, no?  Trying not to get hurt is kind of like playing not to lose.  Doesn't work so great, does it? 

I'm glad they're all being honest with themselves and each other finally.  (Bring on S4!!) 

Reviewer: the_squirrel Signed [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2008 10:33 pm Title: Obbligato

what a freaking cliffhanger.

Reviewer: redziggy Signed [Report This]
Date: March 11, 2008 06:02 pm Title: Obbligato

Holy Crap!!! I just started reading this fic and I really love it. Its a great twist and I'm on the edge of my seat waiting for updates! I can't wait to read more!!!

Reviewer: belsum Signed [Report This]
Date: March 11, 2008 10:18 am Title: Obbligato

Oh my fucking god.  Of course it's Pam!  Argh!

Still, I continue to like how you're portraying Karen.  And giving her the Angel and Demon friends is a nice touch.

Reviewer: belsum Signed [Report This]
Date: March 11, 2008 09:59 am Title: Rubato

Shut down!  And after that sweetness with the hand-holding.  I love how something so junior high can be so major for them.  And you continue to rock the IM conversations.  YAY!

Reviewer: belsum Signed [Report This]
Date: March 11, 2008 08:29 am Title: Counterpoint

I really like how kindly and realistically you're treating Karen's character.  She is a smart, cool broad and this is a helluva thing.  It's nice to see her affected by something as small as where a car is parked.  I'm looking forward to the final confrontation.

Reviewer: support_the_rabid Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: March 11, 2008 06:20 am Title: Obbligato

Ai yi yi!!! That is a cliffhanger if I ever saw one! Looking forward to more. It seems like the drawing out of the breakup is about the cruelest way to do it...
I love the way you've written Pam so noble - it completely makes sense that she'd be concerned about Karen's feelings. Can't wait for more!

Reviewer: StarShine Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 10, 2008 10:01 am Title: Obbligato

oh. sh*t.

 PLEASE UPDATE!!! QUICKLY!!!

Reviewer: DunderSnob Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 09, 2008 05:31 pm Title: Obbligato

OOOHHHH!!! This is going to get really good!! Not that it wasn't good to begin with, but....OOOOOOHHHH. I see shit and I see a fan nearby!!

Reviewer: NanReg Signed [Report This]
Date: March 09, 2008 03:12 pm Title: Obbligato

Oh no!  Oh sh*t!  Oh bother!  What next, Moxie?  Huh?  Huh?  I'm dying! 

Reviewer: WalkInLove Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 09, 2008 02:39 pm Title: Obbligato

Like EverybodyHurts, I agree with lisahoo, hurry up with that snow shoveling!  You already know who much you rock my socks, but it never hurts to hear it again, yes?  I knew Pam was going to show up at some point but it still made me suck in my breath.  Poor Jim didn't even get it out of his mouth yet!  Cannot wait to read how the confrontation plays between the three of them.  Excellent job, as always1

Reviewer: nandance Signed [Report This]
Date: March 09, 2008 01:49 pm Title: Obbligato

Uh oh. What an AWESOME ending to the chapter! God this is going to be awkward! Can't wait for the update

Reviewer: deerinthepark Signed [Report This]
Date: March 09, 2008 01:49 pm Title: Obbligato

The edge of my seat?  Yeah, I'm on it ;)

Reviewer: JennInTheCity Signed [Report This]
Date: March 09, 2008 01:46 pm Title: Obbligato

Oh damn! This is awesome! Great update! I love that Karen's on IM with her friends (I would totally do the same thing!) while on the phone with Jim. Can't wait to see what happens when Pam enters the Thunderdome ;)

Reviewer: EverybodyHurts Signed [Report This]
Date: March 09, 2008 01:44 pm Title: Obbligato

Oh crap...and the awkwardness ensues.  I agree with lisa.  Minimal shoveling...just enough to escape, then back to this story, pronto!

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: March 09, 2008 01:40 pm Title: Obbligato

OMG, Moxie!  Get that driveway cleared and then stay inside and write Ch 7 pronto! 

And good for Jim for at least attempting to rip the band-aid off.  Ouch. 

Reviewer: I_Still_Believe Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 09, 2008 01:34 pm Title: Obbligato

Oh NO! Please update soon! I'm on the edge of my seat here!
This chapter was excellent. You write angst to perfection!

Reviewer: JamLover101 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 09, 2008 01:28 pm Title: Obbligato

Oh shoot! Now that is awkward.

Reviewer: StarShine Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 06, 2008 01:45 pm Title: Silence

Have I not reviewed this yet? I'm sorry, I'm slacking off in my praise. I REALLY love this story so far.. especially that last chapter... yeah, it's gonna be hard going to the movies with certain people now.. *sigh* I want a Jim.

Anyways, fantastic tale you're weaving here. More please! ^_^ 

Reviewer: ISayOye Signed [Report This]
Date: March 05, 2008 11:11 pm Title: Rubato

I really thought that Pam was going to have Jim spend his free afternoon hunting down Karen or something. I really want to see Zodiac now.

Reviewer: JennInTheCity Signed [Report This]
Date: March 05, 2008 09:31 pm Title: Rubato

Fabulous tension between them - I love it! I just hope Jim and Karen can get things squared away soon. They both need it!

Reviewer: batman29 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 05, 2008 08:13 pm Title: Rubato

excellent!  please continue!  looking forward to the next chapter.

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