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Reviewer: albie_ Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 01, 2008 08:34 pm Title: the Dundies ruined my life

Wow, that was such a powerful chapter. Once again, I really enjoy how you are playing Pam and Jim, almost living in this idealistic world, with the real world taunting them just outside. I'm curious how the next chapter goes. Pam is still nursing her own wounds, so once Pam realizes that Jim is alive and well and simply...left, well... I'm not envisioning rainbows ;) Though I really look forward to more.

If i could give one critique, you've mentioned several times how involved the office was with Jim's loss and you've further demonstrated in this chapter how they all tried to take care of him in some way. Given that, I'm finding it really hard to believe that Pam has heard nothing about Jim and the death of his wife, or Jim and his period of depression. While there is tact and I'm sure most would not say anything intentionally, we all know that there is gossip and Michael without the best censor button. It just seems like a lot of time has passed at this point for Pam to still be so much in the dark about Jim's life. 



Author's Response: First of all thanks for reading. Don't worry I have this in the back of my mind, and just a small spoiler for an upcoming chapter: Someone else does spill the beans about Megan to Pam thinking that she knew. But remember Pam has only been at work for about 3 1/2 months.

Reviewer: MaiaDawn Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: April 01, 2008 08:22 pm Title: the Dundies ruined my life

Oh yikes, If I were Pam, I know for a fact I would not be able to handle the fact that Jim doesn't return very well!  How heart breaking!

I am loving this story.  Angsty, but just the right amount of angst.  I hope Jim tells Pam soon.  She deserves the right to know...

Reviewer: JamesMichael Signed [Report This]
Date: April 01, 2008 07:07 pm Title: the Dundies ruined my life

Jesus! The angst just never stops in this story - it was all going so well, but it's not like I didn't see it coming... I actually feel more sorry for Pam... can't wait to see how you figure this little mess out... keep em' coming!

Reviewer: NanReg Signed [Report This]
Date: April 01, 2008 07:03 pm Title: the Dundies ruined my life

So happy you updated--and such a wonderfully long chapter!  This story has really gotten under my skin for some reason.  I'm feeling anxious.  I hope you can update again soon! 

Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: April 01, 2008 06:57 pm Title: the Dundies ruined my life

Long chapter but I loved every word.  Oh Jim what are we going to do with you. 

Reviewer: khand3stooges Signed [Report This]
Date: April 01, 2008 06:50 pm Title: stains of our past

I knew something was going to make Jim back off.  I hope Pam can understand and help him through this.  I'm looking forward to more soon!

Reviewer: bee sly Signed [Report This]
Date: April 01, 2008 06:36 pm Title: the Dundies ruined my life

oh snap! You leave it right there! Things were getting sooo good! Oh no, I feel some angst commin on. Oh, boy here we go...that's what she said!

Reviewer: Cheeb Signed [Report This]
Date: April 01, 2008 06:31 pm Title: the Dundies ruined my life

I was wondering where you've been italianfood. So glad this chapter was a long one and explained how Jim's wife died, the way their marriage was and why he feels so guilty. I hope Pam can help him move on (if she forgives him for not going back to her house). The lunch date was quite the shocker (but in a nice way). Another excellent chapter!

How's the update on your other story going? No pressure. :)

Author's Response: I'm writing dunder hall right now. Sorry for the long delay, I took a mini vacation. Not really, I've just had a wee bit of writers block. But now that it's over we can get back to quicker updates. woohoo.

Reviewer: hamrensel Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 01, 2008 05:23 pm Title: the Dundies ruined my life

No!  Jim was finally starting to be happy with Pam.  He can't ignore her after they made love.  I hope made his brother has a talk with him or made he opens up with Pam and he sees that he can be happy.  I love your story.  I can't wait for the next chapter.

Reviewer: iwantphillyjim Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28, 2008 07:02 pm Title: they don't know how to do normal

i really love this story, great chapter, i love jim grabbing pam's hand and saving her from her family...grea writing.

Reviewer: Crystalized Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28, 2008 03:15 pm Title: they don't know how to do normal

I really love Jim and Pam's dynamic in this chapter. I also appreciate that some things were revealed but not nearly all, just a glimpse. Thanks for another great chap and I want to sock Sarah in the nose!

Reviewer: hamrensel Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 28, 2008 02:01 pm Title: they don't know how to do normal

I'm loving this story.  I feel bad for Jim and Pam.  But at least they have each other.  "oblivious to the one thing that would halt what they had just started" wait what?  They are really starting to get along and move on.  They go back to just being just friends right?

Reviewer: dancer288 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28, 2008 01:40 pm Title: they don't know how to do normal

aww...so cute...can't wait for more!!

Reviewer: JamesMichael Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28, 2008 11:26 am Title: they don't know how to do normal

Nice chapter, with Jim meeting the rents and the whole confrontation... but I can defo sense an obstacle right around the corner - can't wait to see what happens... I bet it'll be REAL angsty! Keep em' coming

Reviewer: Daoust Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28, 2008 11:08 am Title: they don't know how to do normal

Hooray for this great story! Thanks a bunch. Can't wait for it to continue. 

Reviewer: bee sly Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28, 2008 10:00 am Title: they don't know how to do normal

I LOVE this story! I find it to be very realistic and am glad that it went a biot longer than planned! I love the dynamic relationship between Jim,Pam, and Franny. Still curious when Jim will tell Pam about Megan. Can't wait for more!

Reviewer: albie_ Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28, 2008 09:58 am Title: they don't know how to do normal

I'm really enjoying this story. I love how you are showing their growing relationship as something they are almost unaware of, yet deeply comfortable with and dependent on. I really liked Jim in this chapter. I hope we get some more of his POV soon, I'm curious what his thoughts are on all this change around him and of course, when he realizes he forgot Megan's bday. All in all, look forward to more!

Reviewer: Cheeb Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28, 2008 09:19 am Title: they don't know how to do normal

What a nice way to start the weekend! A new nice long chapter. I'm so glad Jim stood up to Pam's family. Excellent!

Reviewer: malaz85 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28, 2008 09:10 am Title: they don't know how to do normal

If you don't update soon, I will cry. Seriously, I am in love with this story, and reading it makes me very happy. Update faster, please! :)

Reviewer: czarag00 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28, 2008 09:09 am Title: they don't know how to do normal

I love this story and can't wait for another update!

 

<3 

Reviewer: NanReg Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28, 2008 08:52 am Title: they don't know how to do normal

Truly enjoying this, italianfood.  I love this little family you've created.  Also, I happen to love long chapters, so feel free... 

Reviewer: iwantphillyjim Signed [Report This]
Date: March 27, 2008 09:31 pm Title: stains of our past

i just reviewed Dunder hall and mentioned this story, but i had to review here too, i am really loving this also, it is so sweet, i love the characters of jim and pam and i just love any story about them, especially AU, funny huh? thi is a great story, i would say it is definitely my second fave!

Reviewer: JamesMichael Signed [Report This]
Date: March 27, 2008 03:49 am Title: stains of our past

another quality chapter - it's all so subtle without being too angsty, a perfect slow burning fuse... although I am wondering about Jim's dead wife... I'm sure you'll play it out beautifully - keep up the good work!

Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: March 24, 2008 06:49 pm Title: some people might call us a family

Jim is just too cute with Franny.  I'm glad the Toby date didn't go well right from the start. 

Reviewer: Cheeb Signed [Report This]
Date: March 23, 2008 10:58 pm Title: some people might call us a family

Sneaky! When you ended chapter 4 you promised a date in the next chapter and dumb me assumed it would be Jim and Pam! Glad she didn't enjoy the date with Toby. I am loving that these two are getting along so well and everything seems so natural and comfortable for them to hang out together. Franny and Jim just tug at my heartstrings. Great job, each and every chapter.

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