8 [Report This]Date: June 28, 2008 08:00 pm Title: The Knock
This is so sweet, and not just because of licorice, jelly bellys, junior mints and ice cream! I don't think I've read anything where Roy broke up with Pam... good idea!
Date: June 17, 2008 10:14 am Title: The Knock
The paragraph that starts: "Her jeans were heavy and her toes squished in her shoes with each step she took, but she had made it here to his house, to him" is my favorite, and I love how it's bookended with, basically, 'Jim means safety and caring.'
The 'friend' thing of course would bring Jim's spirits down a bit. From your description, I think we'll see that turn around at some point here.
I love the Dwight/DNA bit. ;)
It's good you had Roy break things off. I do like stories where Pam figures out she should dump Roy, and I would hope in real life she would, but that's not the Pam we ever saw in Season 2. She only finally broke things off when "push came to shove," really. She had a confession from Jim, she had feelings, too, and her wedding to Roy was only a few days away.
So this is really more realistic; Roy dumps her, so she needs to react. Frumpy Old Beesly is more likely to react than to act.
Anyway, I'll go on. :)
Author's Response: Yeah, as much as I love to see Pam dump Roy, I always thought it would be more realistic if he dumped her, maybe because he found someone new? I don't know. I think they were both just stuck in that relationship, but if anyone was going to unstick him or herself, I'd bet it'd be Roy over Frumpy Old Beesly any day. Anyway, I'm glad you liked this, and I'm sorry I didn't respond to this review sooner. I still appreciated it. ;)
Date: June 16, 2008 01:12 pm Title: The Knock
I'm catching up on my reviewing, and I stumbled on this story of yours -- love it so far! You did a great job of setting a very atmospheric (that may not be a word, but by god, I've heard Nick Rhodes use it before) tone here. I finished this chapter, glanced over, and was surprised to see a brilliantly sunny day outside my window; I'd been so engulfed in the rainy Friday night....
Also love, of course, that Jim's just immediately there for her, and I'm dying to know what happened to make Roy break up with her. Hmmm....
Off to the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks for your review. You made my day and simultaneously spurred me to post the last chapter. Truth be told, I was probably channeling your angsty style a bit with this one, so I'm sincerely flattered that you liked it. Thanks again! Oh, and atmospheric is totally a word. At least it is if my vote counts for anything in the evolution of the English language.
10 [Report This]Date: June 13, 2008 08:49 am Title: The Knock
Nice!
I'm trying to gat around to read a little bit of everyone's stories on MTT. There are so many and I'm kinda new to this.
It never ceases to amaze me all the AU ideas people come up with.
I love your idea that Roy breaks up with Pam, can't wait to read more.
Plus I thought the way how you described Pam's shoes squishing with water was beautiful for some reason I found it to be pivital to set the scene of how wrecked she was. Cool!
Author's Response: Yes. There is definitely plenty of variety around here. I'm just glad you didn't think this was totally cliched. I almost didn't publish this because I was worried that everyone had told this story already, but I ended up liking my version enough to share it, so I'm glad you enjoyed it.
10 [Report This]Date: June 10, 2008 12:36 am Title: The Knock
Awww! I want a Jim! I want a sweet, funny, hot guy to get me Junior Mints when I'm sad!! I can't wait to see how this plays out. Reading on...
Author's Response: I want a Jim too. Like a lot. Instead I get to write about him, which is still pretty good I guess, but not nearly as good as the real thing. And of all the things Jim got, Junior Mints would be my favorite too! ;)
9 [Report This]Date: June 08, 2008 07:12 am Title: The Knock
Oh, it's like time-travel fic! I love going back so far and seeing different POVs. And Roy broke up with Pam?! And btw, nothing wrong with cliche :)
Author's Response: I like that description. It feels like time traveling for me too because it's like going back to last summer when I first wrote this. And I'm glad you don't mind the cliche. I obviously don't mind it either. ;)
Date: June 07, 2008 08:47 pm Title: The Knock
This sounds like a really good set up! I'm interested to see where you go from here :)
Author's Response: Thanks! I hope the rest of the story lives up to the set up. I'm warning you now, it's heavy on the fluff. Hope that's not a problem. ;)
Date: June 07, 2008 05:22 pm Title: The Knock
I can't believe you've been holding out on us for so long, Azlin! This is great. I've often wondered myself what would have happened if Roy broke up with Pam, so I can't wait to see where you take this. And you better live up to your promise of quick updates! :-)
Author's Response: It wasn't a conscious hold out, I promise. I honestly forgot all about this thing until I randomly came across it earlier today. I'm glad I found it, though, because I really like it! I'll do my best about the quick updates. I have a crazy week ahead of me, but the story is basically written already, so all it will need is some final revising.
Date: June 07, 2008 04:12 pm Title: The Knock
ROY broke up with PAM?!?! It's the most AU fic I've read yet ;p When are we? Early season 2?
Author's Response: I know! Crazy, right? But I wanted to try it anyway. And yes, early season 2--sometime before Jim's barbecue since Pam's never been over to his place before.
Date: June 07, 2008 01:40 pm Title: The Knock
I like the beginning of this. I always love to read these kind of stories and yours is also very well-written. And I loved the last line! So sweet! Looking forward to the rest of it.
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm so happy to hear that you liked it. I liked the last line too.
Date: June 07, 2008 01:35 pm Title: The Knock
I like it! Post the next chapter soon!
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! And I'll try my best. It just needs a tiny bit more tweaking.
Date: June 07, 2008 01:13 pm Title: The Knock
Wonderful start! Can't wait to see more!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked the first chapter! There should be more soon.
Date: June 07, 2008 12:47 pm Title: The Knock
Love it so far! Keep it up! Great idea!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you like the idea because I was worried that it was a little too cliche. Actually, I still think it's cliche, but I decided I don't care that much. ;)