10 [Report This]Date: January 11, 2009 08:49 pm Title: Second Love: Pam/Roy
(She thinks that would be the only electric company she would really need.)
As Kevin would say, Nice.
Reading on!
8 [Report This]Date: October 28, 2008 07:33 pm Title: Second Love: Pam/Roy
Wow. This is my favorite so far - you did an awesome job bringing the story to life to tie in with the poem.
"...but she wonders what the hands on her sketchpad would feel like if they came to life, slid up her body and tangled in the mess of her hair. (She thinks that would be the only electric company she would really need.)"
Wonderful line.
Author's Response: In this one I tried to be more literal with the poem, just to see how it would turn out. Glad you thought it was a success. :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 27, 2008 01:12 pm Title: Second Love: Pam/Roy
I really enjoyed this, carbondalien. The poem was so perfectly suited to this scenario.
They're the hands of her Monday through Friday man... Her "Monday through Friday man"--how perfect. LOOOOOVE that.
...she's memorized every curve of them and knows just that one spot that quirks up first before a smile. How thrilling! I wonder if she recognizes that spot on Roy. If she ever has, I suspect she's forgotten.
She feels a bit of guilt rise in her stomach, so she closes her eyes and reaches across the table to give him a quick kiss. Oh, Pam. Such an easy way out ; )
These are the lips she knows intimately, but they aren't the ones she's kissing. Naughty girl.
Author's Response: I'm really glad you're enjoying these. Thanks for the support! :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 27, 2008 01:00 pm Title: Second Love: Pam/Roy
This is WONDERFUL!! You have done a beautiful job of melding your vignette with the poem. And what a great phrase: her Monday through Friday man.
I love that you've chosen NOT to write your vignette as a bed/sex scene but at the breakfast table with Pam's drawing Jim's hands and lips from memory. How wistfully she brushes her fingers over the drawings and wonders how it would be do touch him for real. I also like how simply you present Roy's being "tolerant in his security" by laughing off the fact that Pam wasn't listening.
I haven't read Dorothy Parker's poems, but I'm sure hoping there are a LOT of 'em!
Author's Response: Dorothy Parker has about a bazillion poems and I've gone through to select the ones that inspire me in the Office way. And I've still got plenty left! :) I'm glad you're enjoying this. It never even occurred to me to make this an in-bed sort of scene - I just think it's more interesting to find something deeper in the moments that seem so simple (but may not be).