8 [Report This]Date: May 02, 2009 04:09 pm Title: Ballade at Thirty-five: Pam
"She fumbles through the conversation like a drunk through a sobriety test."
What a great line. This was lovely in its angst-ness, and I liked the callback to Pam twisting her ring in the parking lot last night.
PS Sorry to hear about your computer and losing your flash drive.
Author's Response: Thank you. :) The sobriety test line was a last minute addition, but I have to say I think it's my favorite. I'm glad you liked it.
10 [Report This]Date: May 01, 2009 11:12 pm Title: Ballade at Thirty-five: Pam
I was excited to see this continued. I sent you an email awhile ago about these stories, but I finally created an account to review. I LOVE Dottie, so bringing her poems into the Office leaves me satisfied and smiling. This one is great- sad, but great.
I have to say my favorite is "Unfortunate Coincidence, Second Love, and But Not Forgoten" because I love those poems.
Some really short ones that I love are Prophetic Soul (Dwight or Andy/Erin), Godspeed (Michael/Holly after he found out about AJ), For Unknown Lady or The Lady's Reward (Don't know who for, just really love these), Men (this one kind of reminds me of Jim/Karen, only Karen being the 'Men'), Experience (this one could be Jim/Pam- for he was all three men at one time or another,) Cheating the Fiddler or On Being a Woman (for Ryan/Kelly, Ryan being the 'Woman'), Distance... Maybe you could work one or two in
*Wishful thinking*
Keep it up! Can not wait for more!!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad there's a fellow Dorothy fan out there who's enjoying this. I was toying with "Distance," "Godspeed" and "Experience" before the whole flash drive/computer fiasco, so those are probably going to crop up at some point (probably soon, as they're the ones who offer me most inspiration at the moment). I've also been thinking about "Frustration" for the way Michael feels about Toby haha. Or "Lullaby" from Karen to Pam, especially the last two lines. Definitely "Mortal Enemy" from Karen to Pam. Gah! So many good choices. Gotta love Dottie!
Anywho, thanks for reviewing. :)
Date: May 01, 2009 07:23 am Title: Ballade at Thirty-five: Pam
Woot! I'm so glad to see you back writing but very sorry to hear about the computer woes. That sucks. Anyway, I enjoyed this one, as always.
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. :) Hopefully writing this will get me back on track!
Date: May 01, 2009 07:17 am Title: Ballade at Thirty-five: Pam
Really enjoyed this, carbondalien. So glad you're back. Sorry to hear about your technical woes :( Loved this: In the mornings, she leaves the dreams on the pillow and goes into work. And it looks like he’s maybe having similar dreams at night, but they never talk about it. Great take on Casino Night.
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. :) And it's good to be back! These technological woes have made me feel like somebody's punching me in the grief bone. Stupid technology! *shakes fist angrily at the stupid computer*
Date: May 01, 2009 05:32 am Title: Ballade at Thirty-five: Pam
I've been wondering where you were and hoping you'd update this story. So, to hear this ... Arrgh!!! I can't believe you lost everything you've written! I am so, so sorry to hear that. Obviously, you can recover everything you've posted here. Did you have a lot of other work too?
Good luck recovering the memories and moving on with the things you had planned. As always, I enjoyed this chapter. I like how aware you've made Pam that she has fallen in love with Jim. I like the pacing of the language, like:
They pretend that things like wedding dates and plane tickets don’t exist. It’s awkward and uncomfortable and she hates it and she thinks she loves him and she can’t help it and she doesn’t know what to do.
It kind of rushes along like a freight train that she can't stop.
Once again, good luck!
Author's Response: I had a bunch of stories on the flash drive. Obviously I still have the ideas but some of them were agonizing to get down on "paper" so I was writing snippets here and there. And in some cases, I lost stories that were up to chapter eight and beyond. Those ones are the most frustrating because they were hard to get started (not to mention one that required research) and I was happy with where they were going. It just sucks, pretty much. I'm graduating college in a few weeks and I've been packing up, so I'm hopinghopinghoping that maybe the flash drive was just packed somewhere it shouldn't have been. But as of right now I'm assuming the worst and starting from scratch. Bleh.
Anyway! I'm happy you liked this one and the rushed along effect of Pam's thought process. I was trying to do that purposely, so I'm glad it came across the right way.