1 [Report This]Date: September 26, 2020 03:42 pm Title: Mortal Enemy: Jim/Karen, Pam
"She doesn’t know if she’s ever seen two people be so connected to each other while trying to remain so far apart" is just a really insightful line.
10 [Report This]Date: May 10, 2009 06:45 am Title: Mortal Enemy: Jim/Karen, Pam
These are amazing!
10 [Report This]Date: May 06, 2009 08:47 pm Title: Mortal Enemy: Jim/Karen, Pam
Being this is so well written I can feel the tension, see the facial and body expressions, and hear the words rounding in their heads. I love this one, it's one of my new favorites of the group! Well done and please, please keep it up!
Author's Response: Glad you liked it. :) I will definitely keep this going. I don't think I'll have to worry about running out of DP poems. ;)
Date: May 06, 2009 04:18 am Title: Mortal Enemy: Jim/Karen, Pam
Awesome! I especially love your Pam. I think you've got the angst down to a T! (But the fluff bits are awesome too!) I think chapter 3 has been my favorite so far. Keep it up! :)
Author's Response: Thanks. :) I love writing Pam. Too bad for her I usually end up writing something angsty. I'm glad you liked it!
Date: May 05, 2009 04:52 pm Title: Mortal Enemy: Jim/Karen, Pam
You surely pack a lotta picture into a few words, carbondalien! You bring in a whole world - her guy friends, interactions with the other office-mates, Karen's prior relationships - all while focusing on this uncomfortable menage a trois.
Great connection to the Parker poem. Not an ounce of fat in the whole thing. I just love your writing.
Author's Response: Thank you. :) I try to keep things slim. It's easier for me to play around with words when there's not that many of them around. I'm glad that it's effective because sometimes I'm tempted to just start throwing sentences around... but if it ain't broke, don't fix it.
10 [Report This]Date: May 05, 2009 04:12 pm Title: Mortal Enemy: Jim/Karen, Pam
This is my new favorite chapter! (I have a feeling I will be saying that a lot though with each knew segment you post!) This whole thing is so well done and the poems fit so perfectly, this was a really great idea and you've written it very well!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. This was definitely the poem I was looking forward to most, so I'm happy it's going over well. :)
Date: May 05, 2009 03:57 pm Title: Mortal Enemy: Jim/Karen, Pam
Oh carbondalien, I love all of these but you've really outdone yourself on this one. Perfect body language and I'm going to pick out the same line Nan did, because it's beyond awesome:
She doesn’t know if she’s ever seen two people be so connected to each other while trying to remain so far apart That describes season 3 Jam about as well as any one sentence I've ever read. Brava.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. :) This one has been in my head for a while, so I had plenty of time to think about details and such. I'm glad it all came through.
10 [Report This]Date: May 05, 2009 02:20 pm Title: Mortal Enemy: Jim/Karen, Pam
Oooo, the angst! Great one, carbondalien. The poem is perfectly suited for the scenario you've set.
She doesn’t know if she’s ever seen two people be so connected to each other while trying to remain so far apart. Youch. Good one.
Author's Response: Thank you. I've had this poem in my back pocket for a while now, so I'm happy I finally got to use it. Glad you liked it. :)