1 [Report This]Date: June 28, 2018 04:31 pm Title: Distance: Pam
Razors pain you;
Rivers are damp;
Acids stain you;
And drugs cause cramp.
Guns aren’t lawful;
Nooses give;
Gas smells awful;
You might as well live.
10 [Report This]Date: July 05, 2009 08:19 pm Title: Distance: Pam
This was such a poignant chapter. I loved the metaphors you used. I think they worked perfectly and didn't feel at all cheesy or over done.
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad you liked it. I'm a sucker for metaphors, I have to admit.
8 [Report This]Date: July 05, 2009 07:14 pm Title: Distance: Pam
I'm new to MTT and just discovered this set of stories, I LOVE IT! SO well done, I can't wait to go back and read all the ones that have come before it. Amazing.
Author's Response: Thank you! Welcome to MTT. I'm glad you liked this. :)
9 [Report This]Date: July 05, 2009 05:51 pm Title: Distance: Pam
I was so psyched to see another update from you, this is one of my favorites; nicely done as usual.
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you very much. Glad you liked it.
Date: July 05, 2009 05:51 pm Title: Distance: Pam
Oh, I was so excited to see you had posted. As always, you pack an incredible punch with the fewest of words. And, as always, you tied in the poem perfectly with the vignette. So true that it must've been so much easier to have him physically distant than emotionally. This was beautiful.
Author's Response: Thank you. Sometimes when I'm going through them, I think about adding things but I usually always end up taking them out. Something about trying to put emotion into the fewest amount of words is a challenge I love taking on. Anywho, glad you liked it. :)
Date: July 05, 2009 09:46 am Title: Distance: Pam
Whew. That hurts...so good. This is where my heart first skipped a beat (and it's pretty early on):Like she hadn’t broken him. That just twists my heart. Then there's this:Their love, or whatever it was, was six feet under but he kept piling dirt on top of it anyway, like he wanted to make sure it was really dead. Ouch. Then you came in for the kill: When she gets home from work, she pretends that he’s still away. I'm dead. This was really great, carbondalien. Really. Great.
Author's Response: Thank you. This whole series seems to be about going in for the kill haha. If Dorothy wrote happy go lucky poems, this would all be so different... but I don't think I'd be inspired by that, so yay for Dorothy's penchant for being bummed out (bet I'm the first to say that haha). Glad you're still enjoying it. :)
10 [Report This]Date: July 05, 2009 09:36 am Title: Distance: Pam
So beautiful!
Author's Response: Thank you! :) I'm glad you liked it.
10 [Report This]Date: July 05, 2009 08:30 am Title: Distance: Pam
Ugh, so beautiful, so gut-wrenching - this chapter is written beautifully! I absolutely love all the poems you've chosen for each chapter :)
Author's Response: Thank you. :) I have to give a lot of credit to Dorothy. She's the boss.
10 [Report This]Date: July 05, 2009 07:06 am Title: Distance: Pam
Ugh. So good, yet so painful. This is what the majority of S3 felt like for me.
Author's Response: S3 gives me the most inspiration. Something about me and angst I guess. I'm glad you liked it! :)
Date: July 05, 2009 04:45 am Title: Distance: Pam
Oh ouch S3. You still kill me now. I am not sure if I ever took the time to tell you how much I'm enjoying this. If not - shame on me. If so - I'm telling you again. I hope you don't mind. :) This one in particular perfectly sums up what I think life was like for Pam back then. Wonderful job.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. S3 was quite the bucket of angst, but that's kind of my thing. I'm glad you're enjoying it. :)