10 [Report This]Date: June 27, 2007 03:54 pm Title: Once upon a time...
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When she came to work the next Monday, she half-expected to see him at his desk.
She didn't.
* * *
When she didn't get married after all, she thought she might hear from him.
She didn't.
* * *
When she heard he'd been promoted, she thought she might call him.
She didn't."
Well, that will just break your heart in half right there.
Wow.
WOW.
Author's Response: Thanks, Stilla! And welcome to MTT :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 05, 2006 04:38 pm Title: Once upon a time...
Wonderful!!! The structure & pacing & language you used here really did a great job of fitting the tone of the two stories together.
The asides between the grandpa/granddaughter are adorable, and so spot-on to the book. And I adored the "sneaky kind of pretty" line! Aww, Jim - of course he notices her sneaky prettiness. I also loved the repeating "She didn't" phrases there at the end. That section in particular was so sad and powerful in its simplicity.
Author's Response: Yay, thanks, Shroom! Glad you liked that end bit :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 30, 2006 05:34 pm Title: Once upon a time...
I just love the interaction between the grandpa and his granddaughter - it adds such a sweet element to the story. And the line "sneaky kind of pretty" was brillant! (and how sweet that your husband left you a review and said the same thing about you.....awwwww.)
Author's Response: Thanks, kaystar! And, yeah, Dave rocks ;)
Date: September 30, 2006 12:19 pm Title: Once upon a time...
He would just do what she asked and smile, and say, simply,
"As you wish."
And each time, Pam wondered if maybe she had the wrong boyfriend.
Awww! That was the bit that convinced me I'm going to love this story.
Author's Response: Great! Thanks, Semby ;)
Date: September 29, 2006 07:24 pm Title: Once upon a time...
By the time she got tricked into Michael's awful contest, Pam had decided that Jim was gone for good.
Ooooo!!! You tease, you!
*Sigh* Jim just makes the bestest Wesley. I am loving this!
Author's Response: Heehee! And he does, doesn't he? Now imagine him in that black pirate shirt. Did your head just explode? Sweet dreams ;)
10 [Report This]Date: September 29, 2006 03:45 pm Title: Once upon a time...
Sadly, I barely remember the movie, but no matter...this stands on its own. Fun and lyrical and such a nice distraction. Like the rhythm of the language too.
Author's Response: Thanks, Colette! That means a lot ;)
Date: September 29, 2006 03:37 pm Title: Once upon a time...
Oh, this is fabitty fab fab! It's so simple and beautiful...like Pam :-)
Author's Response: Thanks, McGigi!
Date: September 29, 2006 01:42 pm Title: Once upon a time...
Charming and sweet and magical. Perfect!
Author's Response: Thanks, bitterpill! :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 29, 2006 10:41 am Title: Once upon a time...
This is simply amazing - just amazing. Jim's "as you wish" when he let go of her hands....guh. And their goodbye was also so bittersweet. You are AWESOME. You have yet to write something that doesn't just either hit me hard in the gut or make me squee with delight. Can't wait for the rest of this!
Author's Response: Rock on, thanks, girl7!
Date: September 29, 2006 10:10 am Title: Once upon a time...
You Rock! Pam is not the only person i know who is a sneaky kind ofpretty. Great line. Love Ya.
Author's Response: Whee - Thanks, babe! Love you too ;)
10 [Report This]Date: September 29, 2006 08:40 am Title: Once upon a time...
So cute! I love the girl and the grandpa (Ryan?) and since Princess Bride is like the awesomest movie (and book) ever...yeah, this rocks.
Author's Response: Thanks, Lissa! :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 29, 2006 06:42 am Title: Once upon a time...
Wow I love this and how you it wrote it ina Princess Bride fashion.
Author's Response: Thanks, gotkona! It helps that I just watched Princess Bride in order to map the story. So it's still fresh :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 29, 2006 05:56 am Title: Once upon a time...
Wow, I really really love this already, and I'm pleasantly surprised at how well the two stories mesh together! And describing Pam as a sneaky kind of pretty. Wow, I can't even review coherently, just know that it's great!
Author's Response: Ha, thanks, pennylane! I wasn't sure at first where I was going to begin the story, till I remembered PB starts with a kiss - then it was obvious :)
Date: September 29, 2006 05:19 am Title: Once upon a time...
You have managed to meld the styles of The Office and The Princess Bride perfectly together. I am just so impressed. This is shaping up to be a wonderful, wonderful story! :)
Author's Response: Thanks, Gen! :)
Date: September 29, 2006 05:01 am Title: Once upon a time...
OK. You manage to have the tone of the show, and the tone of the book/movie down perfectly. How do you do that? This is sooo wonderful already.
Author's Response: Thanks, Lis! I'm glad it sounds right both ways. :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 29, 2006 04:53 am Title: Once upon a time...
I love you. This was fantastic! The way you work in the little breaks works so well--loved the one about how Pam was crazy to turn Jim down twice.
And even just seeing Jim say "As you wish" gave me the shivers :)
Author's Response: Glad you like those breaks! I know a few gals who'd like to hear Jim say that on the show. Thanks, yippee :)
Date: September 29, 2006 04:07 am Title: Once upon a time...
OMG. I did not think it was possible to love this story more.
But I think I just might. :)
It's off to a most spectacular start.
Author's Response: Excellent, thanks, Krissy! ;)
10 [Report This]Date: September 28, 2006 10:39 pm Title: Once upon a time...
The "As you wish" after the kiss: it truly sums up Jim's attitude there (I never would have thought the two stories would mesh so perfectly!). I think you've precisely captured what he really meant by his "ok:" that he truly cares about Pam's happiness more than his own.
Author's Response: When I rewatched the kiss and the okay, I saw his little smile (hadn't seen that the first time), and realized the same thing: "As you wish." Thanks, neptune! ;)