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Excellent job! The changes you made to this chapter were just wonderful, and I loved that you added a little bit about Marissa's boy worries in his journal entry too. That really ties the whole chapter together. This slayed me:

Any guy would be lucky to be with her...I'll have to make sure they know that.

You did such a great job of setting the stage of their life with children, and I hope we get to see some more chapters with the kids soon!!!

Author's Response: Hey!! I'm glad you liked the changes that I made. And I love having Jim and Pam with the kids...and more chapters to come with them as a family!! I can't wait to introduce the other kids a little more :) Look for another chapter soon! Thanks again!