1 [Report This]Date: March 03, 2022 04:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very steamy, and I love the use of the ensemble here!
Date: February 08, 2019 08:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
Interesting Jim-Dwight interaction.
7 [Report This]Date: July 30, 2009 01:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
i liked it, but the end was TOTALLY out of character for jim (and dwight). jim bragging about sex in the office? high-fiving dwight? not jim at all.
Date: July 09, 2009 08:07 am Title: Chapter 1
Nice to read another's take on what might happen between Jim and Pam during a snow storm!
8 [Report This]Date: July 06, 2009 10:04 am Title: Chapter 1
Despite them not being in-character at times, I still think this was a fun read. I think it's fun to play with the characters and sometimes have them do things they normally wouldn't. It was a fun read and the high-five at the end was cute. That line about Pam not being a virgin has always cracked me up and it's fun that you put it in this story. Nice job.
Date: July 06, 2009 08:04 am Title: Chapter 1
Sexy and fun--two things I enjoy in a fic :) Also, I happen to be a big fan of voyeuristic naughtiness ; )
Date: July 05, 2009 07:41 pm Title: Chapter 1
There were certain passages of this fic that I enjoyed, for instance:
There were worse careers. He glanced around the office, the empty desks. There were worse co-workers.
Well whatever, little Miss Judgmental had a skeleton or two in the closet. Or more likely a bone or two on somebody's desk.
But for the most part I found Jim, Pam and Dwight to be out of character. I personally don't believe Jim and Pam would ever have sex in the office during the middle of a work day while their co-workers were present. Also, after Jim and Pam left the closet, Jim seemed wildly out of character. He seemed more like Roy than himself. I also noticed some spelling and punctuation errors that you'll want to go back and correct.
Author's Response: I am not being dismissive of your comments, just to clarify. I agree, they wouldn't do that. And yeah, they're hardly in-character. But then I do have to say this was written with a mind on being more wacked-out situational comedy than anything, and sometimes I just have to stretch the characters a little. On re-read (again), I see Jim as being possessed by Jack Frost on Viagra.
8 [Report This]Date: July 05, 2009 07:25 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hot. So hot. Loved the end and the high-five with Jim and Dwight. Great job :)
10 [Report This]Date: July 05, 2009 07:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
Amazing! Not only completely hot, but I love the little Dwight and Jim moment. Fantastic story!
Date: July 05, 2009 04:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
Bwahahaahahaha. Thanks for the best laugh I've had all day with that little twist in the end.
10 [Report This]Date: July 05, 2009 03:50 pm Title: Chapter 1
this was fantastic.
i love the end. although i'm not sure angela would condone dwight's approval. :)
Author's Response: Angela's (dis)approval doesn't carry the weight it used to, I think. :) Thanks.
10 [Report This]Date: July 05, 2009 03:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
hahahahahah (:
10 [Report This]Date: July 05, 2009 11:01 am Title: Chapter 1
That was awesome! The ending had me laughing :)
Author's Response: Just what I was hoping for. Happy you enjoyed it. :)
Date: July 05, 2009 10:34 am Title: Chapter 1
It smelled like the interior of the copier, which Pam was already fairly intimate with.: lol :)
Finally a fic that works that line in! For that line to have been Dwight's first comment, he obviously spent a fair amount of time thinking about it. Thanks for using it! There were some killer lines in here, glad you made good use of your long weekend writing this :)
Author's Response: I've been trying to think of something it would fit in, and this was probably the least nefarious way I came up with. :) And so many times we see the characters taking simple joy in things, I am sure Dwight was so pleased that he was right about that he didn't even care that they probably left the supplies in complete disorder. Glad you enjoyed it.
8 [Report This]Date: July 05, 2009 09:54 am Title: Chapter 1
I really liked the idea for this fic and naughty Jim doing Pam in a suply closet is totally hot. I also loved how you used the line from the show "You know she's not a virgin." I thought that was a really nice touch.
My only piece of advice would be to have sent it to a beta first. There were a few spelling mistakes and things that put me off, like 'One ling finger hooked into the elastic of her pantie leg' - It just made me lol a little and took away from the story.
Author's Response: Well that is just horribly embarrassing, and I've gone back over it to fix mistakes. I blame my text editor--it seemed to think 'ling' was a word. Glad you enjoyed it otherwise (seriously, I was shame-faced, and couldn't read any other reviews until I fixed it up a bit).