10 [Report This]Date: March 13, 2010 02:12 pm Title: Chapter 4
Hey Mel - I so understand the need to use the bones of the show, but incorporate what you want to have happened - I feel that way too, but sadly, I don't have the skills to put into writing. I'm just glad that there are those out there that do have those skills, like yourself. You are quickly becoming one of my favorite authors - please keep posting - love how you're so good at updating quickly.
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much, kam! I hope I'm doing the show and the story justice, because the storyline with Jim and Pam is so beautiful, and I only wanna ... tweak it a little, move it in a different direction for consideration's sake, you know? I'll try to live up to that "updating quickly" thing with another chapter by the end of this week.
Date: March 13, 2010 12:22 pm Title: Chapter 4
Yep, another FINE chapter! I hope you are going to let us see Pam's sketch of Jim. I think you're capturing the hesitation between them as they rekindle their relationship perfectly. Looking forward to the next one!
Author's Response: I will try to slip Pam's sketch of Jimbo somewhere in the next chapter, definitely. Just gotta think of the perfect thing. Thank you so much for reviewing!!
Date: March 13, 2010 11:30 am Title: Chapter 4
That was so sweet that they were happy for a little minute. But keep going and I hope that Jim (NOT KAREN) show up! Don't ditch Pam! Don't ditch Pam! Is what's chanting through my mind. Then again, it would be kind of cool for Jim and Karen to break up before or at the art show, but that could bew kind of awkward.
Okay, I'll stop plotting/writing your story for your and wait to see what you come up with. I can't wait, this story is great so far!
Date: March 13, 2010 09:02 am Title: Chapter 4
Very c ute indeed. I love where you are going with this, and I loved Angela at the end :)
Author's Response: I like to close my chapters neatly, and when I wrote about Jim thinking of his interactions with Pam as a 'game he doesn't know the name to' ... I remembered it DOES have a name: Pam Pong. ;) I'm so happy I'm making the right moves! Thank you for all your kind reviews.
Date: March 13, 2010 08:13 am Title: Chapter 4
I'm always happy to see your updates. More soon, please. :)
Author's Response: I promise it's on its way, haha. I already have the art show designed in my brain. Just a matter of getting it down before it goes away!
8 [Report This]Date: March 13, 2010 07:51 am Title: Chapter 4
Really enjoying this story andthe careful and thoughtful interactions between Jim and Pam. Looking forward to the art show and yes, even more angst :)
Author's Response: Angst is so fun to read an write, which makes season 3 a feast for writers. ;D Thank you kindly for reviewing!
Date: March 13, 2010 06:50 am Title: Chapter 4
It’s like running a play on the court; all motions and memorization for a game that he doesn’t know the name to. It's always been that, hasn't it?
“Hey,” he greets, feeling like a buffoon and thinking that Karen’s probably staring daggers behind him. He sees Pam’s gaze flicker briefly beyond his shoulder, and he knows it, now. I can envision that so clearly--all of this, really.
Pam looks delighted, and his heart skips a beat like picking up a game of hopscotch. I can't recall having read hopscotch referenced before. I really like it for some reason.
Excellent job at conveying a nervous, anxious, joyful mood here, Mel.
Author's Response: I really liked the hopscotch line, too. It kinda seems like a good description of the sudden jumping of the heart like in Jim's sitch. Thank you again for your awesome reviews, I'm so pleased you're enjoying this. :D
Date: March 13, 2010 06:02 am Title: Chapter 4
I just opened this, thinking I'd read a chapter or two, and ended up reading the whole story (so far.) Your writing is so well worded, the small character moments are so sharply observed, that this really has a sense of...not sure of the word...presence? Their states of mind at that conflicted point in time are really palpable. Even Karen makes sense, lol. Anyway, I don't have time at the moment to go into particular passages (or be very articulate, apparently ;-) but I'm really liking this and looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!! That's so flattering, especially since I'm a huuuge fan of your writing on here. I'm really happy tha everything is coming across so well, so again, thank you. :)