Date: September 22, 2010 01:32 pm Title: Chapter 3
I got very excited to see you had updated. I'm sad Pam is "stuck" but love how she hears Jim. Can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Thanks khand3stooges, the next chapter should be up soon! Writing the 5th chapter at the moment.
Date: September 19, 2010 03:19 pm Title: Chapter 3
Awww. It's like sleeping beauty waking up from her deep sleep :) Hoping we're on our way to some happy, Dani!
Author's Response: Thanks NanReg! You'll see some happy moments in the next chapter which it should be up soon!
Date: September 17, 2010 11:16 pm Title: Chapter 3
i knew this was going to end like this from the beggining and more and more as it got to the end of the page..but one always hopes for it to not leave u on the hiatus =/ all thats left to do is wait for the update..pleasee hurry!!!
ps. loved the dr. mcdreamy reference
Author's Response: Thank you so much dmbd! I'm glad you liked it! I'm currently writing the next chapter, it's almost done. =)
PS I'm glad you like the mcdreamy reference too =)
10 [Report This]Date: September 17, 2010 08:57 pm Title: Chapter 3
Oh my goodness, is she awake? I just love the way you wrote Pam in this chapter, Dani. She can hear, but can't respond; she has emotions and senses, yet they are known only to her brain, not someone else. What a powerful and different way of writing a coma. I've never seen anything like this, I'm really impressed! Also, I wanted to say that you're writing has improved so much since I read your work for the first time. It wasn't bad to begin with, but I feel that you have a better sense of how to make it flow, and use words in a way that is powerful. I'm really impressed! Great job, and this was a beautiful chapter. I'm really looking forwards to the next update, I want to see if she's actually up and if she'll have her current situation come back to her - the fact that she's never said she loves Jim out loud before, and she'd been driving to see him when she had the accident. Send me an email if you want some beta'ing help! But I think you've got it covered w/ the lovely Danielle and Jess!
Author's Response: Aw thank you so much Claire! I really appreciate the review, it definitely means alot! I think my writing had defintely improved more than any of my stories, the reader's reviews, the suggestions and the comments really gives me a sense of push to improve more of my writing. I wouldn't have done this story without Danielle, Jess, and you! You guys have been such a great help! =) I'm really glad that you enjoyed this chapter! The next chapter is now being written at the moment and is almost done.
10 [Report This]Date: September 17, 2010 11:52 am Title: Chapter 3
I really love the intensity at the end of this chapter, not knowing for a second if she was walking toward the bright light or back to Jim. I felt so bad for him and got a really good sense of his desperation. I also liked how we got to see that Pam really could hear him. Good touch with the iPod, I liked that he's still sentimental after what he went through on Casino Night. Looking forward to the next chapter :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much Danielle for your help! I'm glad this chapter turned out to be okay after all the struggle I had due to writer's block for this chapter, thought more ideas but then it wouldn't work, and fixed the chapter around more so the story can flow a little bit easier and have a little bit of suspense or intensity like Pam's dream during the coma. I thought of an idea with Jim's Ipod, instead of Jim talking to Pam or praying for her to wake up because one, I didn't think that Jim's a religious kind of person and two, I thought-- how should I say this? That was an "old fashion" way by talking or praying, if that makes sense to you (if not you can PM me or email me). I tried to come up with new another way to wake her up by Jim putting the iPod earbud right next to her ear so she could find her way back by listening to the music.