Date: January 04, 2012 09:25 pm Title: Regrets
I'm enjoying your story. I don't suppose I could talk you into longer chapters? :).
Thanks for the very quick update?
Author's Response: Thanks for keeping up to dat with the story and reviewing again. I promjse you that chapters will get considerably longer with future updates. Chapters 1-4 are basically introduction to the characters and exposition. Chapters 5-8 is where the story really starts to pick up the pace, these chapters will be longer since the entire cast of characters are back together. I will try to incorporate humorous subplots with Dwight and Michael mixed in with the Jim and Pam drama. Again I would love for you to continue reviewing. Update coming soon.
Date: January 04, 2012 04:59 pm Title: Regrets
Hi there! Welcome to MTT. :)
I have some suggestions for your formatting. When you're writing dialogue, you want to start each person's lines as a separate paragraph. It's easier to read, and gives the reader pauses so they can get a sense of each character's voice.
Grammatical note: periods should be on the inside of a quotation mark ."
Hope that's helpful! :)
Author's Response: Thank you sooooo much!!!!
9 [Report This]Date: December 25, 2011 12:27 pm Title: Regrets
Poor Pam. Jim is single too, right? Maybe divorced? I know (hope I'm right) what's going to happen, but I can't wait for the ride! Keep writing!
And merry Christmas/Happy Holidayd!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing and I love your optimism towards the characters! But I have to warn you that as a long time reader I know how many stories go and I am trying to make mine unique. This does not mean it's going to have a sad ending but it will be different then what your expecting. Please keep reviewing! Update coming VERY soon.
9 [Report This]Date: December 25, 2011 10:06 am Title: Regrets
I like it and it rings true that Jim might just have vanished. If I had been Jim, I would never have stayed in the D-M system, looking instead to get as far away as possible from Pam and all the memories she conjured up. I'll be eager to see where you go with this
Author's Response: Your right I found that it would be more realistic for Jim to distance himself as much as possible from Pam. I plan on updating soon. Next Chapter will be Jim's point of view on the events that occurred and where he is in life now. I would love for you to keep reviewing.