I think you have a good start so far! I like the idea of putting Pam at an art supply shop, and that even though she's closer to her field of interest, it's still retail and she still wants so much more. And Angela would totally get water at a bar then interrupt Jim and Pam. XD

I do have a few suggestions on the writing side of things, just some things I appreciated learning when I was a younger writer (way back in the day now ;-) ) but I'll refrain from posting here unless you don't mind, otherwise I'm happy to send them to you in a message ;-)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading. I would love some suggestions, as the only real writing experience I have is essays for school, I don't mind you posting them here, or you can message me, on tumblr or otherwise (if you have another way) my url is dmthisis-pam. Again Thank you you so much for reading and the feedback<3