8 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 12:32 pm Title: Thanksgiving 2002
She feels... well, to be honest, she feels trapped. And happy! And old. And overwhelmed. And happy, happy, happy, because of course! He wants to marry her.
Awesome. And this...
...now that she has more realistic expectations than she did at sixteen, he never lets her down.
And great last line.
Author's Response: Thanks!!! Funny how I hardly remember writing these... Just came out somehow!
7 [Report This]Date: October 25, 2006 07:15 pm Title: Thanksgiving 2002
I'm really looking forward to more! I enjoy the way you portray Roy - a delicate matter, to be sure - showing both the things he gets right and the things he doesn't. Well done!
Author's Response: Thanks Rose! And you're right - I think Roy is not a bad guy, he's just with the wrong girl.
10 [Report This]Date: October 25, 2006 01:21 pm Title: Thanksgiving 2002
Oh wow! Great emotion here. I love that she feels trapped. and then that bit with the smile that is forced and only her mum realizes... SO SO good. ;)
Author's Response: Thanks! And moms are great and terrible that way, aren't they? ;)
9 [Report This]Date: October 25, 2006 08:44 am Title: Thanksgiving 2002
It's what she and her sister call her good hostess face, the isn't-life-wonderful-everything's-fine-why-do-you-ask-and-gosh-I-feel-grand face. With a jolt, Pam realizes that her mother's expression is only a reflection of hers.
Wow. That's a perfect description of that expression- I can see it. I love how this is going so far. You've imagined something so achingly realistic here and painted it for all of us to share.
Author's Response: Thanks!!! I appreciate that :)
8 [Report This]Date: October 25, 2006 07:29 am Title: Thanksgiving 2002
Poor delusional Pam. Always telling herself things seem better than they are! But I like you referring to her mother's attitude to show where it comes from. One thing that needs touching up is the spacing - kinda hard to read this way.
Author's Response: Thanks, Par, and thanks for the tip! I think I fixed it - didn't realize that's what was happening :)