Date: December 22, 2017 03:55 pm Title: "Halloween"
I thought it was very clear.
Pam was as usual wearing the blinders provided by her ring and of course the issue of being inside the situation leaving her incapable of really seeing what was going on.
It’s great to read her outsiders opinion on Scranton’s situation with NC though. I think you are writing her very fair. Of course she may be a bit bias ;)
Author's Response: Yeah, she's got an interesting perspective, doesn't she? I'm glad it's coming through for you the way it is for me when I write it!
Date: December 22, 2017 10:53 am Title: "Halloween"
I was about to comment on how I loved the parallels but you had already done that in your end note ;) Can’t wait to see more!
Author's Response: Great minds think alike ;)
Date: December 22, 2017 09:34 am Title: "Halloween"
First, let me say I LOVE this story and look forward reading each new chapter. Their dialogue is very sweet and their voices are TRUE!
HOWEVER
as of several chapters ago, I just could no longer believe that they didn't know their true identities. For a little while I figured that Jim knew, but Pam was still clueless, but as of this chapter, I am convinced that they both know. At first, that was very distracting and frustrating to me. But now I just think they're both lapsing into denial because they're both afraid of revealing the truth . . . that it will pop this safe bubble they've created.
So that's my theory and I'm stickin' to it! :) Keep 'em coming!
Author's Response:
I can totally see that! I'm working on the assumption that the denial (after what is three/ten years in their lives, not a month as we're seeing it) is so deep that this will all eventually click into place but it hasn't yet. Like, Jim feels the walls closing in around him because "it's happening again" not because he realizes they're the same. But yes, it does require quite deep denial, from whichever angle...I may play around with what happens if I come over to your theory. Certainly you'll see Pam and Jim work through it when they do find out (which is soon, though not yet).
And thanks so much for reading.
1 [Report This]Date: December 21, 2017 10:08 pm Title: "Halloween"
I like the end of 24, seems like Pam is totally projecting!
And the story is really immersive too, checking up on this story everyday, it feels like I'm living vicariously through these chats. :)
Also, just a thought, it would be really cool to see the timestamps on the IMs... but that would look too cluttered. Maybe at the end, this story could be adapted into images like NobleLandMermaid's Expressions in Emoticons, but with timestamps included? It would be sweet to see the hesitant pauses each of them take even in sending short messages. :D
Author's Response:
I was hoping that would be the effect of the posting schedule; I'm glad to know it's working for you.
I would totally love to put timestamps on these, but I do think that in the simple graphical format here it would be just added clutter. But maybe as you say after it's all over...because you're right, there are definitely some pauses in here that aren't otherwise marked. If I wasn't very committed in-story to this being over AOL/AIM, I'd use the Gchat system, where only pauses longer than a minute or so are explicitly marked. But that would be immersion-breaking for me.
Thanks for reading!