1 [Report This]Date: October 10, 2020 10:12 pm Title: Chapter 16
I'm not crying. YOU'RE crying.
Date: January 28, 2019 07:16 pm Title: Chapter 16
Man, I’ve been an awful reviewer lately but I really do love this story so so much.
Pizza I can probably do though :) you come to MV before summer and I’ll get you some Gios!
Date: January 28, 2019 04:43 pm Title: Chapter 16
What kind of pizza?
This was really beautifully done! I love the fact that you not only describe Pam's confusion. You manage to transmit it through your words, and in one chapter you manage to show the rollercoaster that her own emotions and memories are.
And Jim. Oh gawd, I just want to hug him and tell him it's going to be ok. But Pam did it great, so there.
Thanks so, so much!
Date: January 28, 2019 03:53 pm Title: Chapter 16
I love this story a lot, and this chapter fits in very well. Even if you're not 100% proud of it, there's a couple really great points I noticed:
"It was the week he had started working at Dunder Mifflin." This explains so much about your Melissa plotline and also Pam's behavior that week as reported in canon, so nicely done.
And Jim's reaction to her I can't and her noticing his reaction are both very well done too. It's very touching. Looking forward to whatever you were setting up here.
Date: January 28, 2019 03:48 pm Title: Chapter 16
You consider this a filler chapter? Really? The depth of emotions here are far too widespread and complex to call this a filler chapter. For example, one can almost see Jim's heart about to shatter there near the end when Pam starts off that sentence with, "I can't." I mean seriously, this is a great chapter for this story.
Part of life is dealing with all the ups and downs. It may be a bit unfortunate that Pam has to re-live some of the downs, but she'll also get to re-live all the ups as well.
"I can't remember being with you Jim, but I can feel it." All this while I've been kind of picturing this kind of wide chasm separating Pam from her memories of Jim. There have been times where there have been bridging attempts. Until now though, they've come close to fixing a line across to re-build a bridge to Jim but none has really stood up. Now though, at least for me with that sentence of Pam's, there's a thin, but solid cable across that chasm. Something that will stick and stay secure. Something both Jim and Pam can build on to bring themselves back to each other.
A filler chapter? Far be it from me to put words into the mouth of an author, but personally I don't see this as such. Great job as always.