1 [Report This]Date: November 29, 2020 03:35 am Title: Chapter 5: Primary Command
The line about him having realized in the last five seconds that he had no filter was quite funny, and Pam literally having to figure out how to make Coke is great. But honestly, mainly this chapter makes me feel more sympathetic to canon Jim for fleeing to Stamford within minutes. This is brutal.
Author's Response: Yeah, I think this Jim would have really appreciated having the chance to flee like that Jim did--but then we wouldn't have the happy ending!
Date: March 24, 2019 05:27 pm Title: Chapter 5: Primary Command
Can I just tell you how much I love Kelly here? The whole tangent about aging is fantastic.
Jim trying to figure out what to say to Pam...ugh, poor guy. He's so lost and he's trapped and it's brutal and is it weird that I want more of all of this?
Author's Response: Kelly was a lot of fun to write. Angsty Jim too ;) thanks for the review!
1 [Report This]Date: March 23, 2019 03:37 pm Title: Chapter 5: Primary Command
Comfect, see, the thing is I don’t understand sci-fi but I GET this and it’s so wonderful and not just because it’s Jam-centric (I’d really love to hear more about Kelly and Ryan in this universe, I can’t lie). And, oh my, that part where Jim is weighing out what to say to Pam was just perfection.
Author's Response: Oh, DC, how did you know exactly what I wanted to hear? That was really my goal, to write this SF but make it accessible to anyone who wanted to read Office JAM regardless of whether that's their jam (pardon the pun). Thanks for the feedback!
1 [Report This]Date: March 14, 2019 06:27 pm Title: Chapter 5: Primary Command
Ouch, poor Jim. Inside his head is a very tough place to be.
Author's Response: Yeah, but it's a lot of fun as a place to write from! Thanks for reading.
Date: March 12, 2019 06:05 pm Title: Chapter 5: Primary Command
Now that it's known this is more of an introspective type tale, this all works a lot better in that it's easier to know what to expect. Thanks for the heads up here at the end of this chapter and the thoughtful response to my last review.
Trying to unpack everything going on in Jim's head here is quite the task. Lots of fun call backs to the show that are fun to see added in. It's clear he's trying hard to put up mental armor when it comes to Pam. She's made her choice and he has to live with it. However he's also realizing just how abrupt his declaration was to her. We didn't see the immediate aftermath of Casino Night on the show. So here when everything is still so fresh and raw it all comes across as very believable. Even though the setting has changed quite a bit, you've still got everyone in character from how we saw them in the show. Good on you for that as it can be tough. Especially when one goes AU and the skies, or in this case the universe, is the limit in terms of how you can characterize everyone.
Well done as always.
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback! I always appreciate your thoughtful reviews. I do promise there will be a little more actual plot going forward, now that we've hopefully disentangled where their minds are (though you probably know by now from reading my other stories that I do tend to spend a lot of time in their heads).