Date: November 29, 2020 11:38 am Title: Chapter 7: Secondary Command
Hard to read. In a good way.
Author's Response: Thanks! I don't do that much angst all that often, so it's good to hear this was in a good way.
Date: March 24, 2019 05:42 pm Title: Chapter 7: Secondary Command
Pam's kind of a sassy badass here, and I like it. Her "or what" when he asks her if she's going to let him out of the room is fantastic. She's not letting him off the hook so easily at all.
And THEN she hits him with the "Is this what love looks like" and I'm cheering like Katy at a roller derby game because this is the Pam I love.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I feel like Pam deserved a chance to tell Jim these things, ya know?
1 [Report This]Date: March 15, 2019 11:42 am Title: Chapter 7: Secondary Command
That was an interesting confrontation in the Observation Dome to be sure. Good on Pam to call him out like that. It's quick and simple, but it seems to break down the bits of armor Jim had started to mentally put up around her.
Then I kind of get the feeling that things kind of shift when he takes her to secondary command. She's not saying a lot while he prattles on. It feels like in the show when Jim is showing Pam through his parents house right after he bought it. She's not really saying much and her expression is kind of unreadable.
Can't wait to see what you've got planned next. And yes I am glad of the plot moving a bit quicker. But it's also your story to write and you do introspection very well.
Author's Response:
Thanks! It's interesting that you and Coley both brought up the house, which was not my original intent, but which I can definitely see the parallels to now that I've gone back and both re-read my fic and re-watched that moment. Interested to see if you think Pam's reaction (which I'd already planned out) tracks for you or not.
And since I aimed this at 24k (which I probably won't hit, it'll go over, but still) this is going to pick up pace for sure now that I think the building blocks are in place.
Date: March 15, 2019 10:08 am Title: Chapter 7: Secondary Command
So I know I’m a few chapters behind in reviewing (surprise!) and this isn’t an official review but before I forget, I just needed you to know that the scene here with Jim describing the wedding space reminded me So Much of when he bought Pam a house and I don’t know if it was intentional or not but I love it and it’s got me feeling a couple of different ways.
Author's Response:
What's this official review nonsense? I value your opinions whenever you have them!
It's interesting that you and warrior4 both noted the house-buying element when I didn't actually intend it! But it meant I went back and watched that scene again so hooray. The main difference I see here is that house-Jim had already bought the house, and also had a like real responsibility to Pam not to do major life things without her OK (I'm not a huge fan of that moment even if Pam reacts OK). But I see what you mean about the moment. VERRRY similar...we'll just have to see how this Pam reacts.