Date: November 29, 2020 11:51 am Title: Chapter 8: A Corridor
Very in character for Pam, in her astonishment and confusion, to default to banter. And the brief recognition that what she wants from Jim is going to hurt her is a hard moment.
This Kelly dialogue is just perfectly Kelly. Self-obsessed, mildly insulting, meandering, well adapted to the sci-fi universe they're living in, with an underlying touch of kindness. "I wanna live in the event of a crash and all but do you really call this living?" is genius.
In a weird way, this version of the story is actually pretty kindly to Pam. Her sometimes-frustrating insistence on preserving a relationship with Roy that's clearly not working makes much more sense in this scenario where she can easily rewrite the truth without being confronted with it. Interested to see what happens when he wakes up and she can't do it anymore.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you picked up on the way the setting interacts with how we're used to seeing Pam behave but changes how it comes through. I was hoping that would work!
Date: March 24, 2019 05:47 pm Title: Chapter 8: A Corridor
"They could still do this. She could give him an opening, and he could run right through it, and they could be a team." You constantly put out little gems like this and I'm just so impressed with them every time. I love your takes on Jim and Pam and even in space, it's no different!
Kelly continues to be perfectly in character - I hear all of it in her voice.
But now we're going to wake Roy up early? UGH. Do we have to? You're lucky I trust you or I'd be more upset about this.
I'm still a terrible person though, because I'm kind of hoping something bad happens during the waking up process. *shrugs*
Author's Response:
I want Roy gone, so we have to get through Roy being here. The ciiiiiircle of life...
1 [Report This]Date: March 16, 2019 08:29 am Title: Chapter 8: A Corridor
Seems like Jim and Pam are getting back onto, well maybe not an even keel, but less rocky to be sure. It's amazing what a little direct communication can do. It's helped Pam remember some of the things she doesn't like about Roy. As well as think about the great things about Jim.
"Not being with Roy was something she really didn't know..." Great line there, but yet this Pam does know what it's like to not be with Roy. While he's been down there frozen she's had the chance to see what life is like without him. It seems to be be working for her too. This Pam is a lot more intentional with her thoughts. Now after Jim's declaration she's thinking a lot harder about what she wants out of her life.
So those are some nice adjustments from the Pam we see in the show. What I think you've retained nicely here is that Pam is still a very sweet and caring soul. Waking up Roy early is a way she's looking out for his feelings, as well as looking out for hers. With all the complicated thoughts and feelings is going through with this marriage really what she wants?
Now how will Roy react? Again the dynamic of not being able to go anywhere except back into the freezer is a great dynamic to play off of here. Everyone can avoid each other to be sure, but they can't escape each other. Makes for a very dramatic story.
Author's Response: Well, I'm further behind on responding to these than I thought! Thanks for this really thoughtful review. I greatly appreciate your insights. This one in particular made me think for the next Pam chapter: "this Pam does know what it's like not to be with Roy." A very good point and one I am (hopefully) building on.