1 [Report This]Date: October 11, 2020 10:22 pm Title: Chapter 6
The banter about what Jim should've eaten is PERFECT. And I love no-bullshit Karen - the hero Jam needed, but not the hero they deserved at this moment, poor lady. And honestly, it's just nice to see the two of them getting their lives together at this early date and sparing each other all the pain we know would otherwise be coming.
(Also, and I will not get into this that much: this may be what Jenna Fischer's intention for the Dundies kiss was, but the shot The Powers That Be used sure makes it look like Pam's deliberately going in for a victory smooch.)
1 [Report This]Date: January 29, 2020 05:57 am Title: Chapter 6
Wonderful use of the best version of Karen. Generally I'm loving this (mixed metaphors especially) but the Karen here is great.
Author's Response: The best version of Karen is not always what we see on screen, so it’s nice to hear she’s believable here...
1 [Report This]Date: January 28, 2020 08:57 pm Title: Chapter 6
This is so great. Looking forward to the update.
Author's Response: Thanks Sprinkles! The update will come... someday...
1 [Report This]Date: January 27, 2020 12:58 pm Title: Chapter 6
YAY! You updated this! I've been waiting!
I got lost in the dialogue and storyline- so good! I'm glad that they are taking it slow, but maybe, not really taking it slow.... I've enjoyed the continuation of the sea metaphors woven through this chapter as well. I also like that her friendship with Karen is continuing.
As far as I'm concerned, you can add as many chapters as you like. I will be sad to see it end!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! It’s so lovely to hear you’ve been enjoying this.
Date: January 26, 2020 09:18 am Title: Chapter 6
Great chapter! You certainly know how to extend a metaphor. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thanks Donnamour! That’s a polite way to say drag something out - it made me chuckle.
1 [Report This]Date: January 26, 2020 01:35 am Title: Chapter 6
I read this chapter with a big smile on my face. It's fantastic! I like the sea metaphors for their relationships, and how they finally reached the land. And I like how third persons made the points (especially Karen; God, I love this Karen!). And... well, I probably like everything about this chapter! My fingers are crossed for the update :)
Author's Response: Haha, I’m glad you like this Karen! That can be a hard thing to pull off. Don’t cross your fingers too hard for the update, it might take a while...
1 [Report This]Date: January 26, 2020 01:35 am Title: Chapter 6
Ok, so how to write in nautical themes for this review that you haven't made yet? Hmm, might as well just plunge right in.
So, yeah this was just all sorts of wonderful. Their conversation at lunch was very refreshing. I see the Office Ladies influence there with everything going through Pam's mind in the parking lot of Chili's. Nicely done. I love how you have them talking so openly about some of those events. Building up the courage to ply through the bigger waves of other events. And low and behold they're both still on an even keel. They've both found out that trusting each other with their actual thoughts is proving more than enough to deal with the swirling currents of their past and they can sail through, not exactly with ease, but at least with purpose.
Great build up throughout the rest of the chapter. Good on Pam to say she needs to figure out who she is for herself before getting into more than a friendship with Jim. Also good on her to know that it wont take long. Especially now that she's sand under her feet as you so eloquently put it.
So Pam's ashore and reaching out to him. Lovely image there. Can't wait to see Jim follow suit as they make safe harbor after all the storms they've had to endure. Great update.
Author's Response: I like that you’re keeping with the nautical theme in your review, Warrior. I appreciate the dedication to the theme!