1 [Report This]Date: September 30, 2020 02:44 pm Title: Chapter 2
As usual, you made very good use of the ensemble here - what could have come off forced ended up seeming like a really natural story progression.
I love the dialog in the truck, especially Pam and Jim trying to one up each other with praise. And the kiss at the end was deeply romantic.
1 [Report This]Date: January 02, 2020 03:13 am Title: Chapter 2
Ah Dwight. Such a treasure. I love all these extras moments we got with Pam & Jim commuting thanks to Dwight’s interference. I like this version of Jim’s dad & how he says enough, but not too much to Pam. A great chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you! I really appreciate your specific review. It's always great to hear what's working. I just posted the conclusion. I hope you enjoy that too.
Date: January 01, 2020 07:51 pm Title: Chapter 2
I LOVE this story! This is the angsty, slow burn story I needed in my life right now! I can’t wait to see how this unfolds.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you are enjoying this story. I just posted the conclusion, and I'd love to hear what you think.
1 [Report This]Date: January 01, 2020 01:30 pm Title: Chapter 2
Loving this!!
Author's Response: Thank you! I just posted the conclusion.
1 [Report This]Date: January 01, 2020 12:35 pm Title: Chapter 2
Oh, I was so disappointed Pam had a spare key! Ugh! However, I am glad that she's recognized her feelings and is being brave enough to ask for time to think. Can't wait for the next one! Thanks for writing!
Author's Response: I was definitely tempted to let them spend a drunken night together, but I restrained myself. Thanks for taking the time to review. I've just posted the final chapter. Hope you check it out.
1 [Report This]Date: January 01, 2020 12:20 pm Title: Chapter 2
Can someone punch Ryan please? It seems he kinda deserves a punching. Not necessarily in the throat mind you, but a decent black eye.
Okay so now that I've got that out of my system. Yeah, I think it makes sense that they don't just run off together. You've got them admitting or realizing some very big about each other. I like that Pam says she needs some time to process. Lots of heavy emotions filled with a lot of implications.
I also liked flipping around the falling asleep on the shoulder idea. Since that scene also gives her a chance to have a brief but important heart-to-heart with Jim's Dad.
Great depth throughout everything here.
Author's Response: Yeah, Ryan is my least favorite character on the show. There's just something so...slimy about him, lol. I'm glad you like the scene with Pam and Jim's dad. Thanks so much for all your kind words. I just posted the final chapter!
1 [Report This]Date: January 01, 2020 10:03 am Title: Chapter 2
Oh, this is very sweet! Poor Jim, poor Pam, but they so adorable. The appearance of Jim's father is nice, though I had the impression that he pushed Pam a little (perhaps, she needed it, and yet...). And I love the idea of giving Pam some time to think about her feeling.
I am thrilled to see what happens next!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! And I'm glad you liked Jim's dad. I hope you enjoy the final chapter, which I just posted.
1 [Report This]Date: January 01, 2020 06:43 am Title: Chapter 2
Yeah this feels like the right number of and mix of emotions for Pam here. I wonder what Roy has been up to...
Good writing. Hope there's more to come!
Author's Response: Thank you! And in my next chapter, you'll find out about Roy. I just posted it :)