1 [Report This]Date: May 20, 2020 12:58 pm Title: A Rainy Day in Brooklyn
Fancy New Halpert in this chapter! I think with so many live stories we get used to the back and forth, will they won't they that a clear, swift and direct declaration of someone's feelings can be so refreshing (in real life, too!).
Also great contrast with the beginning of this chapter so dreary and down to the ending being so hopeful, even making the rain seem like a good thing!
Inspiring to see two characters that I love going after their dreams (despite the Roys of life) and each other.
Thanks for writing!
1 [Report This]Date: May 19, 2020 09:14 pm Title: A Rainy Day in Brooklyn
Roy is over party indeed, that was pretty gutsy all around, I'm interested to see how Pam grows. It's implied that she has already done some growing by convincing roy to let her go to Pratt, so here's hoping for good things with Jim's encouragement.
Author's Response: Exactly, Pam’s a little more brave this time round, so I’d be expecting some more Pam growth soon :)
1 [Report This]Date: May 19, 2020 06:37 pm Title: A Rainy Day in Brooklyn
Well, that’s an interesting turn of events. Can’t wait to read more!!
Author's Response: Thank you!
1 [Report This]Date: May 19, 2020 03:26 pm Title: A Rainy Day in Brooklyn
That imagery of rainy Brooklyn, so good. I can picture it so clearly. It’s building Jim’s misery so very nicely.
Pam wants to walk to the station with him? Stop, that’s too cute. Pam loving the rain is a little infectious.
“Roy: pain-in-the-ass sleep stealer who liked to laugh at Jim in his dreams for having everything he wanted.” Oh, self deprecating Jim is a sorry sight. This is a wonderful line though, you capture that so well. “Roy-initis” Ahh, the wit. I love it.
“I’d like for you to be there. To be my ‘Team Pam’ enthusiast, more than you know Jim.” How are they so damn cute already? I love them so much. Jim is already so in her corner. “Soon, he’d be 2002’s most likely to get the girl.” Oh. My. God. It’s a Chili’s kiss reversal, kind of. YES PLEASE.
Okay, just picture me flailing and clutching at my heart. That’s what we’re dealing with after THAT KISS! The rain! The tropes! My. Heart.
Author's Response: It’s a chili’s kiss reversal, yes! I’m so glad you liked the roy-initis part, it was one of my favourite bits to write, and while self-deprecating Jim isn’t a frequent visitor, he’s still there, and still very active. Thank you so much!!!
Date: May 19, 2020 02:28 pm Title: A Rainy Day in Brooklyn
I can totally see Jim spending his entire weekend trying to figure out what kind of "guy" Roy is.
2002's shoulder to cry on. *snickers*
I LOVE that Pam is being assertive! I can't wait to see what happens at the gallery.
#royisoverparty LOL
Author's Response: Assertive Pam! We need her, definitely. Thanks so much, I’m sending out the invitations for the party now ;)
1 [Report This]Date: May 19, 2020 12:33 pm Title: A Rainy Day in Brooklyn
I enjoyed both journeys - the rainy one and the one through Jim's thoughts. Poor Jim... though his suffering didn't last long. Yay for that!
I have to say, things between them went fast, probably even too fast. But, come on, that's Pam and Jim... I don't even know why I'm complaining :)
Author's Response: I reckon young Jim and Pam are a little spontaneous, so things are fast, and as they say it’s strange, but they’re willing to take chances :) thank you
1 [Report This]Date: May 19, 2020 10:09 am Title: A Rainy Day in Brooklyn
OMG, I've finally had the time to sit down and read this story and it's so, so good! I am a trope loving girl, and this whole thing is checking off all of the tropes in the best sort of way.
He just kisses her in the subway when Roy is right there? I love this Jim. And then that wasn't enough for you - you went ahead and gave us a rain kiss.
This is me waving my Team JAM flag. I cannot wait to see what happens next.
p.s. #royisoverparty made me laugh so hard. You have no idea.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Confident Jim is taking chances, it’s his time to shine. So glad you’re waving your JAM flag, we might start a celebration with them for the Roy is Over Party ;)
1 [Report This]Date: May 19, 2020 09:24 am Title: A Rainy Day in Brooklyn
ROY IS OVER. LOVE IT. When I read the part that Jim had kissed her, I was saying, "Woah, woah, woah" outloud. That made me so happy. Such a bold move. I'm living for this story!
Author's Response: Haha, I was thinking “woah, woah, woah” while I was writing it! Thank you :)
1 [Report This]Date: May 19, 2020 09:01 am Title: A Rainy Day in Brooklyn
Great job of setting the scene with this chapter. Rainy day doldrums are the worst. Especially for Jim after his weekend of agonizing over everything. It's adorable that he comes back to life at even the prospect of meeting up with Pam, even if she has a boyfriend. Feels very true to canon.
From the brief bit of what we see of Roy, it seems that he's not a bad guy here, just not the right guy for Pam. Not that I'm complaining about a quick enter and exit for him so we can get to JAM-ness.
There seems to be a bit of a trend of Confident Jim around the archive lately and I love it. It's so refreshing to see Jim take a chance with Pam even while Roy is in the picture. I think you managed a good balance here with Jim being supportive of Pam but also giving her the push she needs to see there's something better out there.
Very cute image of her waiting in the rain by his apartment at the end of the day. Seems like she's got a hard conversation ahead of her though. All in all a great chapter. I really liked it.
Author's Response: That’s exactly what I was trying to put across- Roy’s alright but he’s not the one, Jim’s little shove was enough to put Pam in the right direction. Justice for Confident Jim, that’s what I say! Thank you :)
1 [Report This]Date: May 19, 2020 08:39 am Title: A Rainy Day in Brooklyn
Welllllll then. That was a mood. By which I mean you did a very good job throughout of keeping us aware of how Jim was feeling, how the world was conspiring with him to feel it, and why. I particularly loved "Unfortunately, the only known cure was a certain Pam Beesly, but the line at the drugstore was long, and Jim didn’t know when he’d get to the front." And the ending is quite nice too. I'm very much liking what you're doing here; thanks for sharing!
Author's Response: I’m so glad you loved that line, it was one of my favourites to write. Thank you so much!
1 [Report This]Date: May 19, 2020 08:18 am Title: A Rainy Day in Brooklyn
#royisoverparty #cmonthursday
I enjoyed this update thoroughly: the rapid pace of the morning, the drag of the day, the building anticipation because we all knew but Jim didn't that she'd be there for some kind of climactic event. Gah. I love a solid, angsty romance. I really enjoy the Smiths references too. This would be a great story to create a playlist for!
Looking forward, as always, to the next chapter!
Author's Response: Ahhh thank you! I love the idea of creating a playlist, it definitely captures the mood doesn’t it?