1 [Report This]Date: August 13, 2020 07:12 pm Title: Chapter 3
I loved this chapter! The sensory details (visuals, smells) are amazing. Just catching up after a while away from the archive and this chapter made me smile!
Author's Response: Hi Comfect! Thanks so much for reviewing! I'm glad you liked those details, I'm not very confident about how much is too much
1 [Report This]Date: June 26, 2020 05:42 pm Title: Chapter 3
No one has time for maps when they’re making bold, spur of the moment decisions. Stopping to print maps just allows time for second guessing...
“she even matches a car’s speed for some miles, and pretends they are in this together” I adore this. I can picture it so very clearly.
“If she had some doubts at first, now they seem to have grown to occupy all the available space in her small car.” This is exactly what I feared with the whole stopping for maps this. Any pausing is the possibility for a loss of momentum...
“She doesn't come up with an answer but uses extra deodorant just in case.” I love this. Your writing here has just the right amount of clever humor mixed in with the painful uncertainty that Pam is wading through.
I kind of love Grave having Pam’s back here, and her understanding of all things Michael.
Author's Response:
Well... I LOVE road tripping, especially in the US. So, this is a bit about my own experiences with maps (nobody needs them) and pausing for coffee. And tagging strangers' cars when I feel lonely.
I wasn't sure at first about needing Grace's help, but she couldn't do it on her own. Plus, yeah, I allowed me to throw that line about Michael :)
Against, thanks very much for your reviews!
Date: June 26, 2020 05:33 pm Title: Chapter 3
Yup a nice little filler chapter to keep things moving along. However it's also nice to see Pam's stated of mind through all this. The initial rush to leave and the excitement of the thing to be tempered by a whole heaping pile of "what the hell am I doing?"
Really looking forward to seeing how this all pans out. Also I love the receptionist's network. It's always fun when people bring that in and this is no exception.
Author's Response: I don't know if this exists but there should be a fic entirely told by the receptionists. Maybe one day, with the right amount of booze...
The thing about long drives is that there is a lot of time to be filled and that's when your brain kicks in. In this case, Pam's insecurities and fears.
Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing!