1 [Report This]Date: August 26, 2021 11:35 am Title: Back From Vacation
Even though she was in the magical years of self-delusion between twenty-five and thirty, where you were old enough to know better but could still get away living like you didn't..." Insightful. True. DEEPLY RUDE.
You did really well exploring the subtleties of Pam's physical desire here, both with Danny and with Jim.
Pam pulling up the worst apartment in Scranton is fun. She does come off VERY self-sacrificing in this episode, doesn't she? And besides, she and Jim can enjoy trashing them.
This moment between them is just... gorgeous.
1 [Report This]Date: March 01, 2021 04:58 pm Title: Back From Vacation
“Even though she was in the magical years of self-delusion between twenty-five and thirty, where you were old enough to know better but could still get away living like you didn't” Oh my god call me out why don’t you.
“but then again she was well versed in ignoring the obvious” shot to the heart. I —
“Experience also came with age and wisdom, two things that were only born from time so maybe time was all she needed” the way I’m about to print this out & put it on the wall in my office...
“she absently wondered if the color had drained from her face because she felt the fragments she had shored against her ruins falling away piece by piece” Wow. Honestly wow. This line blows me away. It’s so achingly beautiful.
How. Dare. You.
Jim.
It’s all too perfect.
I love that there’s not much said & yet so much happens.
That final line. It’s everything.
1 [Report This]Date: February 19, 2021 11:09 am Title: Back From Vacation
well this was *quite* rude of you, I have to say
1 [Report This]Date: February 19, 2021 10:52 am Title: Back From Vacation
You've written this alternate scene well.
Like you, I loved the Pam/Dwight interaction. I think Dwight pulling off his coat was intended to drape around Pam, but that was just a step too caring for Dwight. I was amazed he could retrench so quickly to come up with being hot; Dwight does not think fast on his feet. He's the rules and regulations guy.
I thought this was Pam's lowest point in all of Season Three. I like your alternate take; this could have brought Jim's decision point forward by months, but we would have given up Pam's beach scene and lost seeing her tangible growth. Jim's agony would have been far more acute, and he'd already been through Casino Night. I think the show writers thought enough is enough for Jim. It is an ensemble cast after all; JK had already shown he was the breakout star.
Your last sentence “And suddenly her grin and her life stopped being so forced.” walks that fine line between nadir and hopeful. Good onya
1 [Report This]Date: February 19, 2021 09:54 am Title: Back From Vacation
Another beautifully written piece that felt like you entered my mind and wrote things I saw or wished for. And did so with words written in ways I could never express so well.
Danny. You nailed it. Him. Her reaction to him. Why it ended before it began. (My yet to be posted features him too and we see him exactly the same way).
I never knew I wanted him to find her until you made it happen. This was perfect.
I was touched by the scene with her and Dwight but this was so right. It had me thinking of another line from the song we discussed.
Never used to get excited to sit here in the silence.
And now it’s all I see. And the whole narrative is different.
Thank you for that. Beautiful. As always.
1 [Report This]Date: February 19, 2021 08:36 am Title: Back From Vacation
You are way too good at this whole writing thing, but never stop. I love Pam and Dwight to pieces, but I always wished that Jim was the one to find her in that hallway. The fact that they could say everything without saying a word really just killed me. And then him staying, "the universe taking pity on two fractured souls seeking solace." That was beautiful, bored. I loved this so, so much.
Date: February 19, 2021 06:16 am Title: Back From Vacation
Once more your talent shines in this one. All the grief and pain Pam's gone through to this moment are right there on full display. And then surprise it's Jim that finds her. You wrote their ability to communicate non-verbally so well. Really if it had been Jim that found her like this and we'd had a moment such as this one, I think the Real Jim would have shown up a lot quicker. While Jim has his moments of being a jerk, for the most part he's a good guy. Seeing her so upset would have easily triggered this response and probably a lot more.
Excellent work as always.
Date: February 19, 2021 03:28 am Title: Back From Vacation
Do I want to cry? Do I want to laugh? Do I want to make a lot of 'aww' noises? I don't know, probably I want to do all of that and THANK YOU for that!
(Seriously. Lately, I have some trouble with feeling things — I feel mostly numb to everything that used to bring me emotions (or potentially could cause feelings) — and now I feel many things, which is so nice for a change).
And I love your writing, it's so poetic and delicate, like watercolors on fine paper. Especially I love these lines:
"she saw something more complex, more like a melodic song with notes of concern and pain and regret each playing their part across his melancholy visage."
and
"he had read her like the pages of his favorite novel before sliding the bookmark into the crease and shutting it for another day."
That's so heartachingly beautiful.
And I like these subtle changes you brought to the canon. I like their silent conversation and acknowledging each other's emotions, it really feels like something natural, and I hope that those changes will lately play their role. Can't wait to see that!
Also... thank you so much for not letting Pam fucked Danny. That little thing made me a little happier!