Date: September 10, 2020 09:05 pm Title: Chapter 4: The Dirty Truth About Coming Clean
It's impressive that you've managed to get two cliffhangers out of one revelation to one person. Nice work!
1 [Report This]Date: September 08, 2020 11:10 am Title: Chapter 4: The Dirty Truth About Coming Clean
Ooh, lots of heavy emotions with this one. You really captured Pam's nervousness well at the start of the day. Which led easily to annoyance and anger as she realized Jim had wimped out again. Like others have said, I like that she gets upset at Jim. It feels kinda odd to say that, but it's true. She's fighting for herself and inso doing fighting for them. Not letting Jim off the hook, standing by her feelings. Great to see.
This is just all sorts of Wishy-Washy Jim. Saying he wants to tell Karen but "I don't know how." Yeah that's a cop out. He knows it, Pam knows it and she rightfully calls him out on it. Yeah maybe hitting below the belt a little, but often times the truth hurts.
Then because they're not guarding their thoughts more of the truth starts to come out and then BAM in a trope worthy of any sitcom, just as it looks like they're about to kiss, Karen walks in. Nicely done for keeping with the sitcom trope feel with that.
Looking forward to seeing where this goes from here.
1 [Report This]Date: September 08, 2020 02:47 am Title: Chapter 4: The Dirty Truth About Coming Clean
Oh, I like this Pam, and I'm happy to see her so strong and not miserable! I like Jim here a little less than usual, though I can totally see why he kept silent about things... maybe, Pam could lend him some of her strength, couldn't she?
And, the thing I like the most is Pam's attitude towards Karen. Not a rival, but a 'lucky girl' who deserved to know the truth. I cross my finger and hope that Karen won't be hurt... or, at least, won't be hurt very much.
Thank you!
Author's Response: I’ve always wished we got to explore Pam and Karen more in the series, so I tried to write a little of it here. I never hated Karen, just wanted her gone. Haha thank you!