1 [Report This]Date: January 05, 2021 11:10 pm Title: Pam- Possibilities and Promises
Welcome to MTT! This is a really lovely start! I love this emotional journey - that Pam feels she is grieving for the impact this could have on her relationship with Roy only to come to the realization that it’s actually about Jim.
This line in particular I thought was great: “ And, there it is- dawning understanding of what she's previously only allowed herself to know in fragmented portions- she loves him”
There’s something about her simultaneously writing a letter to Jim & a to do list that I kind of adore. And to photocopy the letter so that she can agonize over it later is so very perfect. Boy, how I wish I’d done that with some things I’ve sent in my life!
Author's Response: Oh my goodness! Thank you! I feel so encouraged by your review. I’m glad to be here!
1 [Report This]Date: January 04, 2021 05:12 am Title: Pam- Possibilities and Promises
That's a powerful start. Pam breaking down in Jim's chair after The Kiss feels very much in keeping with how things migh thave gone afterwards. I'm sure she would have been feeling a ton of swirling emotions and you captured that really well.
What I'm really interested in, is what she wrote. It'll also be good to see Jim's POV here. I'm sure he's crushed. Based on the story summary I'm thinking there's going to be something that prevents him from reading that letter right away.
Welcome to writing. Keep it up because you're doing great!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! As one of my favorite authors, your review means a lot! I’m hopeful you’ll enjoy the twist that’s coming.
1 [Report This]Date: January 03, 2021 03:47 pm Title: Pam- Possibilities and Promises
One choice I really like here is having Pam turning to writing. These two always feel like they'd do much better with communicating each other when they don't have to think on their feet. And for careful, passive Pam, I think having her first reaction be both expressing herself and wanting to break down exactly what her tasks are for what happens next is both right and really would be something of a comfort to her and help her feel in control - she's working things out for herself as she goes.
I also like that her first reaction is to try to rationalize this away, and that she keeps trying to define it as being mainly an issue for their friendship. Feels very Pam-like.
Given your summary, Pam noting her unawareness of the camera crew, and Brian's appearance on the character list, I'm intrigued about what you've got cooked up for us in the next chapter.
Congrats on posting your first story! As someone who took a long time to go from MTT reader to MTT author I know how intimidating a step that can be. Looking forward to seeing more from you.
Author's Response: Thank you for the positive encouragement! I hope you'll enjoy what comes next! (c;