Date: January 17, 2021 06:30 am Title: Love is Kind
Of course he didn't leave - I'm so glad but all the talk of divorce must have him really freaked out.
Sweet scene with Nelly. And I like how you flipped the Dwight/Jim scene.
But at the heart it's a tough situation for both of them, Jim thinking he's doing something that will benefit the family not realizing how she doesn't need it or want it and just wants him to be there for the now. Pam not seeing that he is trying to make a change for their future, and that they (her and the kids) are the reason he's doing it.
They have fallen back into their days of miscommunication and that's when things go bad for them. TALK you fools.
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Yes, I'm writing it in a way that Jim refuses to give up on Pam but Pam is unintentionally making it hard for him. It's really a communication breakdown at its finest.
1 [Report This]Date: January 15, 2021 05:24 am Title: Love is Kind
OUCH AGAIN!
I like that Dwight’s now consoling Jim rather than Pam. It’s a nice change.
But OOF my heart! I loved this so much. Can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks!
Yeah, I really planned the chapter to turn out in a way that Jim would end up in the stairwell with Dwight so it took me a while to plan out how it would occur.
I'm writing the third chapter as I respond to this review so it shouldn't take long.
1 [Report This]Date: January 14, 2021 06:25 pm Title: Love is Kind
He needs to make her understand. Please let him make her understand. I can’t watch them get divorced.
I wish I had more to say, but I can only say that. There’s nothing else to say. This is amazing. Too many emotions.
BlindManCassidy
Author's Response:
Thank you! In terms of how this will end, it's literally a work in progress. I also have no idea how this will end up.
It's a lot of emotions. I actually have to go to straight to bed after writing because it is emotionally taxing.
1 [Report This]Date: January 14, 2021 12:00 pm Title: Love is Kind
Again, I really like you making the connection between this and the failure of Pam's relationship with Roy, not to mention her parents' divorce. It's very good context to remind us that Pam *knows* that relationships that people are committed to and badly want to succeed fail anyways - so of course she's not quite as confident that love is enough to get them through as Jim is. The idea of him changing his mind seems very plausible to her.
And the choice of having Dwight offer him the support Jim gave Dwight in Money was a nice touch.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! The divorce especially, I remember what Pam's father said about Jim telling him that she was the woman that he wants to spend the rest of his life with. It's definitely love. But she now has that internal struggle on how far that love can take them.
I know the last two seasons get a lot of hate but they got the closure on Jim and Dwight perfectly. Wouldn't have it any other way.
1 [Report This]Date: January 14, 2021 10:59 am Title: Love is Kind
Nice to get Pam's perspective to be sure. Really glad Jim didn't leave for Philly. However I get why he's freaked out based on what he heard in the hallway. Nellie talking to Pam and Dwight talking to Jim rings true to me. Pam has gone to Nellie in the past so they have some history there. It's a nice way to show the friendship that Jim and Dwight have at this point with Dwight being there for Jim.
Still not sure where we're going to go from here, but your writing is very compelling.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much!
Yes, I wanted to touch more on the relationships that the show had already developed so it would seem more genuine. Jim and Dwight, definitely towards the end, had that brotherly connection so it was something I wanted to incorporate.
I have a written down plan already for the next two chapters, but as for how the rest of the story will go, it's really up in the air at moment. I thought I had an idea of how I wanted it to end but it's constant back and forth. We shall see.