See this is why you rule the genre: writing a tyke that cute without making her the second coming of Shirley Temple (even credible - yet so adorable you could bite her - dialogue!) You pick just the right details - e.g., sticking out her tummy - to make her real, without overdoing it. Tasty as ever!


Author's Response: Why thank you Colette. Very kind of you to say indeed. ;-)  In my head Jill is quite adorable - but not perfect for sure. Seems she's picking up sort of a whiny thing. lol. Thanks for taking the time to review, as always. 

I've read your work for a long time and have even re-read this particular story several times. I love this universe you've created for Jim and Pam and I adore your characterization of both characters, including Jill. I love that you don't make Jim overly sappy and that you make sure to portray him as witty and sarcastic, which most writers seem to miss the mark when writing for Jim. In fact, in the fanfic realm, your characterization of Jim and Pam is one of my favorites. But I've noticed that your writing for this story and as of late with your most recent work have gotten a tad lazy. Earlier chapters for this story and your earlier work are so much stronger. You used to go into great detail describing scenes and the like. You put a lot of effort into it and it showed. Now, it's as though you're trying to quickly write something in order to post it up as soon as possible instead of taking your time with it. You and others may not share this opinion but since I'm such a fan of your earlier work, I want to plead you to take your time when writing because you truly are talented.

Author's Response: Goodtime Fella, it's nice to hear from someone who's been reading for so long. Glad you've enjoyed my work up until now. I appreciate your comments.  Typically (specifically with this story) I try and do something a little bit different stylistically from time to time.  Because it's such a long running story, I think it's helpful to mix things up a bit from time to time. If you'll notice, I change POV quite often and yes, often I will lean towards a more sparse storytelling style and sometimes I will be more descpritive if I think the chapter calls for that.  As a reader, I enjoy filling in my own blanks from time to time and I don't want the writer to describe every last detail all the time.  Sometimes the piece is about the dialogue and not the exposition at all.  I'm sorry you're not enjoying that, just wanted to let you in on my approach. Not everything is for everyone though. :-)

Oh, I loved this. Is it silly for me to be a little worried about this fictional characters and hoping it all goes okay the second time around? Probably, but there you go. Very sweet and very in character.

Author's Response: Here's a spoiler from me to you Jazzy...::whisper:: no need to be worried ;-).  Thanks so much for your loyal reviewing! LOVE IT!

Guh.  So freaking adorable.  Almost makes me want to have another one.  Almost.


Author's Response: hahah! Happy to aide procreation. lol...almost.  Thanks so much for being such an awesome reviewer Lisahoo. 

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SO EXCITED to see an update on this! Love it! :)

Author's Response: Thanks Liv, so glad you're still enjoying the story!