Date: November 20, 2006 04:23 am Title: Labor Relations
Writing babyfic is a tough assignment - because as others have said - it is so easy to get sweet and sappy and just....not good.
This was a definite exception. Their banter was spot on -(I smiled through the whole thing - babies vs. spaghetti PERFECT) - as was the interactions with the other Office mates. Just a lovely piece of fluff in the midst of all the angst.
Author's Response: Thank you xoxoxo! I really enjoy your stuff, so this means a lot.
10 [Report This]Date: November 20, 2006 03:45 am Title: Labor Relations
Count me as another one who is usually skeptical of baby fics...so what a great surprise this one was! Funny and sweet and in-character. I loved when Jim says they're naming the baby Schrute, the breast pump gift...and the part where Jim puts her hair up for her was so touching. Thanks for taking me to the happy place!
Author's Response: Aw that means so much to me! I really enjoy all your work so much. Thanks for the feedback.
10 [Report This]Date: November 20, 2006 03:37 am Title: Labor Relations
I agree that Michael would probably still be there in the morning, annnnnnnnd that would be when I teared up, thx. Great take on baby fic.
Author's Response:
hehehe aaaaaaaaaand thank you very much for the feedback. I think Michael accomplished his quest of making people "afraid of how much they love him" lol
10 [Report This]Date: November 19, 2006 09:35 pm Title: Labor Relations
OK, truth time - my initial reaction to the synopsis was a mental groan because it's really hard to do babyfic without going super-sappy and OOC, but...you accomplished. The banter is wonderful; love the humor and LOLed a couple of times.
The avoidance at the beginning is spot-on; love the whole exchange about "making a baby"; I laughed so hard at Pam's "We're going to hell" and naming the baby Schrute. I could go on, but this review would be freakishly long. Essentially, the characterizations are great; the dialogue is wonderful; love the humor.
To my mind, the most "in character" moment is Michael still being at the hospital. He absolutely would, and he would totally drop a Chili's compliment.
Author's Response: Thanks Geinnob. I know, I know...baby fics are typically total sap. I'm so glad you enjoyed this one though! I'm with you on Michael. I absolutely believe that he would stay all night. Essentially these people are Michael's family.
10 [Report This]Date: November 19, 2006 09:26 pm Title: Labor Relations
Hee! This is so utterly perfect, but especially this:
and you turned to me and said, out of nowhere ‘Would you freak if I wanted to make a baby?’…and I said ‘Yes, because I really just had a craving for spaghetti tonight…nothing that exotic,’ and then you socked me in the stomach.”
That is so THEM, and oh, it made me laugh out loud more than a few times, and then smile at all the cute.
They'd be such great parents! Thanks for this!
Author's Response: I wondered if that line would come across - so happy it did! Thanks for the review!
Date: November 19, 2006 09:07 pm Title: Labor Relations
That was a really good story. I love it. It was all love and fluff and then all of a sudden I see “Pam-pam-thank-you-mom!” & I nearly choked on the cookie I was eating. That was great. lol So unexpected.
Author's Response: I totally live for making people nearly choke on food or spew whatever liquid they might be drinking. :-) j/k Thanks for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: November 19, 2006 08:49 pm Title: Labor Relations
Aww. Thank you for posting this, because I've been so deprived of fluff that it makes me sad.
Well, I loved this. It was freaking adorable. I'm glad Jim didn't freak out because I've seen that enough in fanfiction, and I love how helpless he felt, and I love what he suggests doing for her at the end.
Also, Michael! And Dwight! I loved how Jim interacted with those two. And the end! And KellyandRyan! And - well, I like so many things about this it'll take ages to write out, but this was seriously great. Thank you.
Author's Response: Thanks!!!!!
Date: November 19, 2006 08:37 pm Title: Labor Relations
I loved this story. The humor is excellent and I laughed out loud several times. And Jim is so freaking charming and sweet and funny.
Loved the Dwight name stuff and Michael being there was um....weird.
But this was great. =-)
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I appreciate the feedback! :-)