Date: January 03, 2007 04:25 pm Title: The Kiss
Drabbles are among my favorites, because saying less is so much harder than saying more. Beautifully done.
8 [Report This]Date: January 03, 2007 06:54 am Title: The Kiss
Nice - just enough to intrigue us!
Suggestion: consider formatting why, how, Pam, and kiss in italics to parallel your second paragraph stylistically.
Author's Response: Thanks for the suggestion...I will do that!
10 [Report This]Date: January 03, 2007 05:08 am Title: The Kiss
these are beautiful. It's amazing how you can capture their relationship and feelings in just a few short sentences.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing!
Date: January 03, 2007 04:53 am Title: The Kiss
His eyes had been full of please, then okay, then goodbye.
What a poignant line...really distills his whole state of mind at that moment. So sad. Lovely.
Author's Response: Thank you. I love Jim's eyes and his voice in that scene of GWH. So much emotion.
Date: January 03, 2007 04:39 am Title: The Kiss
This is awesome and I'm pouting a bit as I write this review because they are simply KILLING ME. Both of them. Ugh.
Love how you're saying so much in such tiny snippets. Keep 'em coming!
Author's Response:
Thank you! Well, it's supposed to be hopeful! They're taking a step towards each other! Sort of, anyway. It may take some time, but I'm loving all of this tension building up. I think when JAM finally get together it's going to be worth all of the torture we had to go through.
Date: January 03, 2007 04:07 am Title: The Kiss
Oh, their two kisses both hurt, in such different ways. Beautiful structure.
Date: January 02, 2007 11:30 pm Title: The Kiss
i really like the juxtaposition of the events.